Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#61

wow you updated
you are really on a roll these days

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#62

both your Advay s are so special and unique

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#63

u had reserved one more positive
will u post another update ?

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mahin

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Posted: 7 years ago

#64

loved it. the sexual tension between them is so powerful. now after meeting her he had a change of heart. dark Advay is rising . he is going to use her to satisfy his fantasy. so excited for the upcoming parts.

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neverlandspirit

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Posted: 7 years ago

#65

Excuse me for replying so late...I am sorry!

Right off the bat I want to address how possessive Advay is. Of course this is nothing new, Advay was possessive in your other FF too, but somehow that was endearing to see. It was cute.

Here, in ENTRAPMENT, it is almost sinister. It something that makes my toes curl in fear. There was nothing soft, nothing adorable. And I have to give you a around of ovation because you did such a remarkable job with it.

This Advay gave me shivers, in all the dark ways. It showed that he means business! This isn't a pastel colored fairytale. IT WAS AMAZING!

Oh, Chandini! You cutie pie! 'You have blood on you...' That part was hilarious! It bought a nice relief to the story.

The part where Advay says she can never say his name...I don't know why but I instantly thought that he means that in a very BDMStic way. That would be some domineering!☺️ That sentences oozed Power and domination!

There first meeting set such a wonderful platform for the story, it straight away gives us the taste os tension, bitterness and confusion, while also giving us the proper background of the characters, so there is really no way we can side with one character.

It goes without saying, but it was a great chapter!

Edited by neverlandspirit - 7 years ago

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Rimi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#66

WHOA!! pehle mulakat mein hi Hone wala pati... Quite very fast I must!! Again what's going on his wicked head NOW??

I am excited to read more... Continue soon...

Here's a VM for ur refreshment.. ;)

Ae Dil Hai Mushkil

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#67

oh my goodness
such a sensational update
you are so perfect right from the start

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amortentia15

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Posted: 7 years ago

#68

Chapter 2 review:

Wow chitra that was super fast!

I am totally hooked on to the story and under the spell of your Advay! Hehehe. Toh chandni kya cheez hai

Loved the pace of the second chapter...it is just like advay to not beat around the bush and come to the point directly...I know he will put his iniquitous plans to action very soon...and the wicked "an eye for an eye" side to me is waiting for him to maneuver his way into her family and take his revenge..

Chandni...your FL is not headless yayyy!!! Happy tears. It does make her wonder if that's her dev...but she shrugs off the doubt thinking that her dev couldn't be the way this man behaved...good going chandni...I hope she stands up to him and proves a formidable force in thwarting his plans of doing anything bad to her...

Also I am waiting for sasuma jamai interactions chittu

Keep writing.keep spreading the love

Love and hugs

Juhi

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#69

the first time he came here after 16 years and entered the temple he was overwhelmed by his emotions
he was remembering everything from his childhood
I think he was recollecting each and every memory
he was going through all the details of his past life
everything was the same but the circumstances and situations were different now
he was back but his family was lost forever
he could never get back the old days again
I loved the way u described each and every thing he saw and felt seeing the temple and his surrounding
it was again proved how well Murli understands his brother and what a beautiful bond they share
murli gave him the moral support needed to go forward and Advay also took strength from his parents

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#70

the first AdNi meeting was just electric
it was raw passionate and full of sexual tension
he was lost in his thoughts when he first saw her
but once he saw her he was just mesmerized
he couldn't react for some time
I think he never thought Chandni will take away his breath on their first meeting
similar reaction was for Chandni too
she crashed on him as she was getting unbalanced and held him for support and he held her tight
she wanted to get away from him yet she also wanted to stay in his hold and she got strange feelings too
she understood he was sinister and dangerous but she was attracted to him like a moth is attracted to a flame
she was pulled towards him by a sheer invisible force
she looked in his dark eyes and was drowned in them
Advay held her so possessively and her hair stuck on his watch like a divine signal that they are made for each other and they can never be parted now

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