Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#81

next update is day after tomorrow right ?

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Lubana

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Posted: 7 years ago

#82

Reading this was pure bliss
I could feel the intensity passion just from this piece of writing itself
Every emotion of Advay hit me full force, it had so much rawness to it
This was the Advay Chandni I signed up for and the Advay here is hands down my favourite character
He is written so well that I could almost see Barun enactling him here..also I could relate to his emotions when he was pursuing her at the begining of the show..then there were only expressions here, I read his mind
Coming to their reunion, it was bombastic as you promised..reminded me of the time Advay pinned her to a pillar near the temple the first time they met but this was hundred times better than that
You make me so happy with your writing Chits

Hoping to get an update soon

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Jinro Soju

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Posted: 7 years ago

#83

Hi Chitra,

thank you for the wonderful update... Meeting was so perfect and bombastic... Advay's behavior was bang on... letting us know about his persona... innocent Chandni is already smitten thinking if he is Dev or not... looking forward... thanks for PM

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#84

he can read Chandni so well
but I think at some point Chandni can oppose him

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#85

I am now waiting for Indrani Advay meeting

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hailly

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Posted: 7 years ago

#86

Awesome update, loved it.

Continue soon please.

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#87

are Kajal and Shakun maasis here as well ?

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Joyness

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Posted: 7 years ago

#88

Chitra such an interesting update...both of them are struck by lust and Cupid.

Loving this story..

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2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#89

counting the moments till the next update

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Mangothyme

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Posted: 7 years ago

#90

Before I come to the meeting, may I just say I loved how you described the temple, the flowing of the river, the chanting of the Vedas and Advay mumbling verses. Advay would have been the next Mahant, but that part of the story we never saw in the series. Though he does not believe in God now which makes perfect sense, I like that parts of his old upbringing comes up instinctively.

I love that you introduced Chandini in the temple, praying to Shiva and she prayed for Advay. I also liked very much that the first meeting was lust and not pyaar and that too in a temple. People do feel lust even in a temple, even the best of us. You don't shy away from reality with some sense of false religiosity though you come across as deeply religious. Loved the episode. I am calling it an episode instead of a chapter because you write so descriptively I can imagine very well. Now I am scared of what I will imagine when the dominant parts come. 😳

I have a request Chitra and it's a big one. I know from your recaps you know a lot about Shlokas, mantras, rituals and puranas. One of the few things I assumed about Chandini was she was a Shiv Bhakt. But other than the stupid Bole ki Sainik dialog that almost seemed to mock her faith and mysteriously disappeared after some time, I never felt she was any Shiv Bhakt or any Bakht in the series. I want to see that part of Chandini please and the Sanskrit scholar if possible. Make her a true Mahant daughter please. I know you will come up with something wonderful.

Thank you for a wonderful story.

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