Adni OS-PENITENCE - Page 2

Originally posted by: amortentia15

"Dev is dead Chandni, the person you're talking to right now is Advay Singh Raizada and remember you mean nothing to him" the words reverberated in her ears repeatedly,plunging her into the abyss of hopelessness and despair.

she made her way into naani's room and naani as usual sensed her presence and and answered her silent question

"his parents were murdered chandni and he saw it with his own eyes...this is all i can tell you right now beta..anything else would be a betrayal to my grandson and as much as i love you I cannot fail him"

Chandni made her way to the patio and sat down tears streaming down her face. this man was Dev, her Dev the one she revered the man she loved and lived for. she could not pinpoint the moment she fell in love with him but all she knew was love meant dev for her. and now that she knew his true identity she couldnt bear to see the hostility in his yes for her. hi rancour rattled her made her restive.

She closed her eyes in deep contemplation...trying to remember the concatanation of events that led to the disappearance of the kashyap family and all she came up with were some grainy images of a few disjointed occurences...her telling everyone she had seen his mother flying in the air...her trying to find dev in their secret hiding place and she opened her eyes abruptly!! this was going nowhere...she needed answers

she ws so deep in thought she didnt realise the dark night had slowly turned into a periwinkle sky signalling the arrival of a new day, the dawn of a new beginning for her.

she got up sapped of all energy from all the revelation and slowly made her way to dev's room, their room she corrected in her mind

as she entered she saw dev in deep slumber and saw the strip of sleeping pill on the side table!!! so this is how he slept every night!! she went closer and his benign countenance while sleeping unleashed a tenderness and a sense of yearning and longing engulfed her in a way that all she wanted to do was enfold him in a hug and imbibe in herself all the pain and agony dwelling in his heart. she slumped on the floor crying her heart out at what her seemingly innocuous actions had let loose in his life.

she remembered his seraphic smile while hugging adi, his care and love for naani, pooja and maasi and she knew dev was not dead! her chimerical paradise was real...dev was with her and she would not let him fall into oblivion

With a newfound resolve she got up. she knew what she had to do. chandni took out her phone from her bag and dialled a number...seconds later a voice from the other end asked her "banno kaisi hai" and she knew some of her queries if not all would be answered.

so hellooo folks!!! this was something i wanted to write from chandni's perspective.

do let me know how you liked it. excuse the typos 😊

love and hugs

juhi

Originally posted by: natzcreado

Beautiful OS. Hope it would have played out like this on the screen as well...How nicely you have put across Chandni's pain as well..

Originally posted by: -Chipper-Treat-

Amazing this is what I want to see in the show.
Loved it.

Originally posted by: Lost_Somewhere

An awesome write up Juhi .

If only our writers were intelligent enough to show something like this in the show.. Hope the present tu-tu-main-main session in the show will be over soon and we will finally see the story moving.

Originally posted by: mayukatta

Juhi... You lil bunny...

Where have you been.?

Writing this ? Then I have no complaints😊

It's really good one dear... Sensible and completely possible scenario.

Emch sad that we didn't get this... But the we can always imagine😉

Originally posted by: Jothenut

This is just Lovely.. juhi

👏

Hi Juhi.

Originally posted by: ChitraGS

UFFF MEEE ISSS REEELINNNGGG WAAA

LAUUUEEEDDD IT MERI BUNNY !!!!

AMAZEBALLLSSS !!!! 👏

U know what i have a strange feeling tho that this scene is going to play out in the future fro some reason,

I loved Nani's answer to her, becoz this is exactly what i have been thinking everytime i have read anyone say why Nani isn't informing Chandini abt Devs past and his parents , YOU HAVE NAILED THIS ONE ON THE HEADWAA 😃

This was like a building up the crescendo for me, and then KABOOMM 👏 !!! it felt like someone punched me in the gut , with HE SLEPT WITH SLEEPING PILLS WALA PART !!! , honestly moved by this move my bunny wali mover.

Loved it, need to write more often , pilleeeassee, you have a way with your words that is simply incredible,

Now lets laugh, kaahe ki i want to thats BHY , see this bit really moved me the most OK

as she entered she saw dev in deep slumber and saw the strip of sleeping pill on the side table!!! so this is how he slept every night!! she went closer and his benign countenance while sleeping unleashed a tenderness and a sense of yearning and longing engulfed her in a way that all she wanted to do was enfold him in a hug and imbibe in herself all the pain and agony dwelling in his heart.

See if i had written this how i wud have written

She entered his room and saw him sleeping deeply on thier king size bed that had blue and white striped sheets (why am i even describing the sheets ) . She then realised he was sleeping on her side of the bed "Damm , so no sleep again tonite" She thought exhausted😕 . She then turned around and saw a strip of sleeping pill. "WHAT?? WHY ??" She asked herself shocked 😲. "OMG is this how this man goes to sleep every night" She thought as she put her hand on her chest, which had already dangerously started pounding away against her chest.

( Kaahe pochut ho , kaahe ki his benign countenance in deep slumber waaa has ignited a flame in places within her 😆). Therefore she kneeled down before him and started caressing his hair, as she wanted to hold him in her arms and cry her heart out, at her helplessness ( what helplessness poochut ho, she can't wake him up to cool her down kaahe ki he is on a sleeping pill, all she can do for now is watch and play 😉 )

What utter crap , who wants to read this utter crap i write 😡 , ----- JUHI 😆!!!! ( Dimag check KAR leeyoo bitiya kaahe ki ISHQ WALA PYAARWA KARTI HO HUMSE TUM DEFFO, YEAH that Meera wala , Rumi wala pyaar i was blabbering away earlier on, that kind of blind love karat ho humse tum, 🤣i know that now after having read this OS HAHA !!!)

WAISE HAD TO GO AND CHECK the MATBAL of PENITANCE , PILEEAASEEE do not use such wordwas in the phoochar bitiya, kaahe ke it gives me dhak dhak and acidity,

JUST phirst four letter PENI padke heee hum GUTTER LAAANDWA MAIN pohunch gaayeee naaa !!! ☺️ KAAA kare one track brainwa ke saath jo suffer karat hai hum 😆

But seriously sooo proud of u , just want to give u a BIGWALA JAADOOO KI JHAPPII 🤗!!! You are soosososo talented and I am sosososo PROUD OF YOU MERA BACHCHAAA

LAUUUEE U ❤️

Chitra

Originally posted by: Fa13

Hi Juhi.

So beautifully u've written Dear...👏👏

It was a short,light but high with emotion OS.

Loved it!

Indeed needed this type of emotions/scene in the show!

Do write more on AdNi if possible..😳

Hi Juhi
Brilliant write up . Loved it. That's what I was commenting on chitra's thread yesterday. Instead of showing that silly dining table scene n that make up scene, if they had shown anything like this n later on continued with these games n all, then that's one hell of a story telling it'd been. But they spoiled her character further with all these silly things without any continuity.

I can imagine this scenario quite easily. I just hope they show something along these lines in future episodes. Ur sleeping pills thing is the most realistic thing. It is highly impossible for a person like him who is suffering with that kind of an emotional trauma to lead a normal life unless n until it is completely cured.