Adni OS-PENITENCE - Page 4

Originally posted by: amortentia15

agerta porishni?? pm korbo?

that was more of a gist of the three main characters then. ekhn to indu indu is on a break

Originally posted by: Lost_Somewhere

Oboshyoi.. Can't wait to read that one..😉

Originally posted by: Joyness

Amazing

Originally posted by: amortentia15

Thank you my baby gillehri!🤗

But its not my first self made post

Remember the one I wrote on the three characters😃

Oh yes I remember
That was an analysis
This is scene😳

Next can u please write on her feelings
After Niru tells her the full truth ?

hi Juhi.. this is one peek into Chandni's heart and mind.. you show the girl is minus militancy towards the dismissive,predominantly hurtful ASR.. inside. she is aware.. of something she may have said to contribute to his existing grief. Juhi.. you bring out brillantly, Chandni's confusion over how much she was involved in his past.. your title Penitence.. expands upon Chandni's need to know the complete truth,of her flippant statement .. you bring out the important issue that she is quite in the dark about the dire consequencs her words made for DEV..In the final part, you express beautifully the need of a loving wife to put right all the wrongs she may have brought about in her husband's life.Some fine adjectives you use,"chimerical paradise". The best bit the OS..ends on a positive note..Chandni, is not paralyzed by gulit! she is into looking out for postive resolves to this conflict between her and dev!.. it echoes back to their friendship.. in the show, friends fall out, but care for each other. brings about patching up! over all Juhi,many thanks for portraying a penisvely senistive Chandni.. prone to considering what holds Dev back from being her Dev...
Brillantly engaging piece of work.. pleasure to read your thoughts.. do write more OS, gives positive joy... much love hammie

Originally posted by: 2filmy

Next can u please write on her feelings
After Niru tells her the full truth ?

Originally posted by: arnanya

Juhi, Again I cannot help but wonder how well you write.

it just flows and carry the reader along with that flow.

Like the others said if only the CV's too learnt what is to be shown when and how ...

Keep writing Juhi and we can all fill in those blanks and create our own magic ... 😃

Juhi, I love the way you have written her introspection. It adds a layer of depth to her character that makes her someone worthy of being Advay's true friend. When you care for someone, it's natural to want to understand them. She has spent years yearning for him. Would she not wonder at his hatred? I like that you have chosen Mamaji to be the one she turns to.