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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: ~DaZZ|ing~

Avani, chapter 7 was all that I had pined for in terms of a confrontation. Well done, my dear!👏 I agree with Meenu, you made a man out of Viplav. I can sense the wheels in Viplav's mind churning at full speed. 😉 It'll be interesting to see how Tripuari undermines his own father in favour of his freedom and money. Will he get away with such a notion?😳I also loved how Dhani held her ground firmly in front of Kanak in her own soft-spoken and gentle way. It must've taken Dhani courage galore to stand up to someone as wicked and pompous as Kanak.👍🏼 I also really liked the final paragraph of the chapter - the phone conversation between Viplav and Dhani. Throughout all of the chaos and darkness in their lives, they were still able to see a glimmer of brightness for one another.☺️ Can't wait for the next chapter and all that it'll entail!❤️


Thank you Dazz 🤗
Glad that you liked it 😊 Yeah i wanted to bring out Dhanis state of mind too here . How people perceive you specially people surrounding you matters a lot.
I was again apprehensive of Tripurari and Viplav convo if its true to their characters 🥱
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Ishq - Ek Pratha Chapter 8:

Viplav was waiting near a secluded place in the Ghat. He clearly looked very nervous . He very well knew by now whatever he will get to know now wouldn't be good.It was instructed by Tripurari that he collect something from a person here and meet him in jail.

It was a week since Viplav had met Tripurari . Meanwhile with the help of his friends he had found out to his utter shock that some of the undertakings that happens in the temples under his Grandfather is not legal.And that would mean even his mother was involved in all this as she used to help his Grandfather.

He noticed a person approaching him . He went upto him slowly. He was handed a pile of docs covered in a cloth and before he could react the person stormed off. Viplav immediately removed the cloth and started going through the pile with impatience .He would not be able to go through it like this!!He went to his office and shut his room. An hour later he was sitting there lifeless unable to react almost numb . 'No it cant be . This is all fake. Tripurari is trying to get on him and his family clearly'. His heart screamed. But his mind refused this outright . All proofs are genuine! It seemed his life was a lie all this while!! Everything since his childhood seemed fake now. No no this can't be. There is something fishy about these documents. Yes there should be.He sprang to his feetand started going through documents photos and cds again one by one trying hard to find something which would prove these are fake documents. But the more he went through it the facts slowly started to sink in him and he sat there wanting to scream to the world, to himself, to everything and everyone that this can't be true but he couldn't . He couldn't even move as if someone has tied him up from head to toe. He was staring at his table and all of a suddenhe got up and headed out of office and reached Benaras District jail. He wrote out the request to meet Tripurari as a lawyer. He did everything mechanically without giving a glance to his surroundings . He went in to the room where Tripurari was already sitting opposite to him separated by grills .




"Viplav Baba how are you?" Tripurari asked faking utmost concern


"Are you are you really? "Viplav Stuttered


"Your Uncle? Well yes . Whether you accept it or not . You asked me for proofs. i gave you! If you are still not convinced we can have what do they say?? that medical test. Now you know Your Grandfather who happens to be my Father is not at all what you think he is . It's not just Ashram papers. Whatever i did in my life was by his instruction "


Tripurari was on and on describing and explaining all his misdeeds and how Mahant Dashrath Tripathi was the source of all.


Viplav was just sitting there with no reaction.


"Do you have any doubts left now ?I have given enough proofs i think. Now its your turn to repay me"


Viplav got up. He felt suffocated . He wanted to run away . Run away as fast as he can to a place where nothing of this was true.


He heard Tripurari screaming.


"Viplav Baba you forgot something"


He turned back once and as if he had decided something went straight to the police and requested a form to take back his complaint against Tripurari.


He somehow managed to write the form, submitted and came out of the prison premise. He got to his jeep and drove off without even deciding where to go. He just had to go away from this place. Before he could realise he was on his way to Dhanis Ashram.

He banged the Ashram door. Thankfully it was Dhani who opened the door. Viplavs eyes welled up seeing Dhani in front of him. Dhani panicked seeing the state of him . She immediately held his hand and took him in .


"What happened Vakil Babu" Dhani almost screamed holding his shirt.


All the ladies were in the hall working. They were all shocked seeinghis distressed state. V


Badi Amma indicated everyone to go in realising that Viplav and Dhani would need privacy .

While they left Dhani forcibly made him sit down .


"Vakil Babu what happened . Tell me" She begged holding his shoulder


"All lies Dhani. Everything. What was the necessity. My whole life.."He couldn't continue anymore .


Dhani cupped his face "What lies. What happened?"

He somehow managed to spell out about Tripuraris and Dashraths relation and started sobbing like a child. Dhani didn't know what to say. She immediately pulled him close to her chest with her eyes filled with tears.

"How could he "

"Why why would he "He was sobbing incessantly holding her.

"And Dadii"

Remembering his Dadi he sat up with a feeling of indignation. Dhani was wiping off his tears trying hard to console him.


He saw Dhani once and got up.


"Where are you going? " She questioned seeing him walk towards the door.


"Home" and he walked off.


She wanted to go with him badly but held herself back. It had to be him alone this time. He sure will be able to manage and will be fine she convinced herself.




Viplav reached home and found his Dadaji sitting in the hallgoing through some book.


Anger surged in him. Dadaji seeing Viplav asked "Son this early to home? Whats the matter?




"Is Tripurari your son Dadaji? "


Dadaji looked at Viplav stunned at his question.


"Son what are you saying. How can you say such a thing" he stuttered.


"PLEASE. Can you for once today tell me the truth Dadaji. Is it not true?" Viplav shouted.


Hearing this Dadi and his mother rushed to the hall to know whats the matter.


"Viplav mind your language. How can you shout at me like this " Dadaji retorted


"I know all about you now everything Mahant Dashrath Tripathi. No more drama." Viplav screamed.


"Tell me is he not your son?" Viplav looked at Dadi and his blood boiled realising his Dadi knew all this while.


Dadaji came near him "Who told you all this. Its a lie. How can you believe such a thing my son.. who did.. "


Viplav shook off Dadajis hand "Cut it short please. I was a fool till now. Will not be anymore.

I am aware of all your doings. All. Why would you do all this Dadaji? How could you do this to Dadi? How could you do all that you have done against me and Dhani? All along you were my idol. I respected you more than anyone in this world" He choked


Dashrath sighed once "Yes i did a mistake. A mistake which i did in my youth. And i have repented it all my life. Please forgive me Viplav"He joined his hands.


Viplav smirked "A mistake ? A mistake you say? Is it not a so called sin you Pandits keep bringing up for each and everything? Ok let me take it as a mistake of yours . But what about all that you did to me? Do you have any answers? You backstabbed me all this while by faking concern and all you did was try to kill Dhani? "Seeing no reaction from Dashrath


"Oh yes i have come to know all. About Ashram papers and Dhanis kidnapping and what all is being done in all of your temples" He glared at his mother.


"Viplav how can you blame your grandfather with such a thing " his mother complained .Viplav held his hand in front of her indicating her to stop.


"Answer me" he said looking at his Dadaji


Dashrath slowly said "I have the answers Viplav my son. It was all for your good i did this. I was trying to protect you and what i get back is a blame from you. All i want is your happiness and your wellbeing and nothing else matters to me more in this world."


"You were protecting me and my happyness by killing my love? "Viplav screamed


"Yes she is nothing but a bane in your life Viplav. Why don't you understand this? She is a widow you understand? Who is not supposed to be anywhere near you. But still i tolerated her only for you but nevertheless i had to try all i can to keep you safe from her and her likes. They are the filth not worthy of living you should.."


"Enough!!!" Viplav shouted at top of his lungs.


"This is it. Don't you dare say anything against Dhani. You have lost all the respect i had already but i will forget you are something to me if you say anything more" he roared.


Dashrath stood still for a while hearing this and then slowly responded "Say whatever you want Baba but this is what the society thinks too. And i will have to go by it. I tried my best to get you away from all this. But now that you know i am against it let me make it clear. I will not allow you to marry that widow at any cost.Did you hear? AT ANY COST . If you want Dhani to be alive and you to be alive this is necessary "


Viplav looked at him with utmost disgust. "And let me be clear no one i mean no one can stop me from marrying Dhani. And i can't bear to stay at this house anymore "He looked at his Dadi and stormed off to his room to pack his bag.


Everyone followed him to his room trying to convince him but he did not budge. He was about to leave his room when his Grandfather blocked him


"Where will you go? How will you manage? How will you survive out there. You are not earning enough"

Viplav walked out without reacting to it.


So here he was out of the house he grew up in all alone but determined to face everything and achieve what he wished for.


Edited by AvaniVrinda - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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As I said enjoying your IKRS version.
You captured viplav 's mental upheaval well Avani . The turmoil ,the hurt ...
In this version I think DT will have scope to be more ruthless, villanous.as its all out in open. And we are heading for some real volatile
confrontations.
Loving it ...

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Posted: 7 years ago
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A wonderfully written chapter, Avani! 👏 Viplav Baba finally knows the truth and is ready to fight the demons of society for his one true love and his grandmother. 👍🏼 Viplav's inner combat between his mind and his heart was very well portrayed in this chapter! I could only imagine his mental state on a revelation of that magnitude especially with undeniable evidence. Poor guy! 🥺 I agree with Meenu, you have a lot more scope for DT's villainous deeds to be more apparent in his bid to separate his grandson from the love of his life. Tripurari too will have an interesting role to play in this mix. I hope we'll get a few more scenes between Viplav and his mother who's also disappointed him beyond measure in the chapters to come. I also liked how Dhani held back from joining Viplav in his confrontation with his grandfather. I agree, it was Viplav's journey and a moment that should've been private between the members of Ayodhya Niwaas. 😊 Superb, Avani! Can't wait for the next chapter! ❤️
Edited by ~DaZZ|ing~ - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Meenakshi-rg

As I said enjoying your IKRS version.

You captured viplav 's mental upheaval well Avani . The turmoil ,the hurt ...
In this version I think DT will have scope to be more ruthless, villanous.as its all out in open. And we are heading for some real volatile
confrontations.
Loving it ...


Thanks a lot Meenu 🤗
Yes now it will be him against the world and it would be his own Dadaji foremost in them!!!!

Edited by AvaniVrinda - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: ~DaZZ|ing~

A wonderfully written chapter, Avani!👏 Viplav Baba finally knows the truth and is ready to fight the demons of society for his one true love and his grandmother.👍🏼 Viplav's inner combat between his mind and his heart was very well portrayed in this chapter! I could only imagine his mental state on a revelation of that magnitude especially with undeniable evidence. Poor guy!🥺 I agree with Meenu, you have a lot more scope for DT's villainous deeds to be more apparent in his bid to separate his grandson from the love of his life. Tripurari too will have an interesting role to play in this mix. I hope we'll get a few more scenes between Viplav and his mother who's also disappointed him beyond measure in the chapters to come. I also liked how Dhani held back from joining Viplav in his confrontation with his grandfather. I agree, it was Viplav's journey and a moment that should've been private between the members of Ayodhya Niwaas.😊 Superb, Avani! Can't wait for the next chapter!❤️


Thanks a lot Dazz 🤗
Yes Dazz as you said now there will be lot of dynamics happening between him and with individual members of his family 😊
Neither his Dadaji nor his mother would let go this easily. 😉
And yeah neither Tripurari will 😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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👏👏👏 AvaniVrinda .. ... u have very beautifully weaved the storyline and the characters of IKRS highlighting the social message it truly stands for 👏
Enjoyed reading each chapter after each... u have given love, understanding, revelations, heartbreak, bonding, strengths, weakness, truth, suspense all in one basket

To tell the truth I disliked watching the episodes where Dhani confronted Dhashrath...Thanks Avani for penning the revelation of Dhashrath's misdeeds in a composed way as well Dadi opening upto Viplav without hiding her husband's devious intentions and acts...👏
It's so good to see strong women in your story unlike the way the show portrayed ...it was upsetting coz even Dadi wasn't being true to her most loved grandson who was the only soul who really cared for her in d family

The deal with Tirupurari looks like it's not going to end there...waiting to read more...guess Viplav has got to handle more obstacles now with his grandfather and mother on d opposite side...it's so interesting
Also I musn't miss out how you portrayed Dhani opening upto Viplav about Dhashrath being behind the ashram papers... truth when hidden weakens the trust in a relationship...
Love the way u take care of all the details

Anxiously waiting to read how your going to colour the forthcoming chapters in red, black and white...pain, disappointment, anger, lies, truth, love




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OMG Thank you so much Beignet 😳
Glad that you loved the story 😊
And special thanks for such a sweet and thoughtful views on the story 😳
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Ishq- Ek Pratha : Chapter 9



Viplav was standing near the window sill in a hotel room he checked in right after leaving his home .Sun was setting and darkness was slowly engulfing outside. With that his life had changed big time. His home was not his anymore . In fact he was homeless now !!


His family seemed to be a big disillusion. As if it never existed.


Meanwhile Dhani was standing in front of Tulsi plant watering. But her thoughts were around her Vakil Babu. She had come to know from his mother that he had left his home with rage . Yes his mother!! His mother had called her an hour back and had accused her of separating Vakil Babu from his family . It was very painful to hear vicious insinuations from her . But this time it was not her who had caused him pain. Not her !!!she wanted to scream but patiently heard all accusations insults and threatenings .


Even now she could not fathom that Mahantji could do this.She could not help but wonder the difference in personality. Vakil Babu a gem of a person and his grandfather turns out to be a fraud!!


She looked at the clock hanged on the wall. He hadn't called her since he left the Ashram. She was getting tensed more and more as the time passed.




Here Viplav spent whole night reminiscing memorable times he spent with his GrandFather and trying hard to come to terms with what had happened. He fell into kind of a stupor in the early morning.


It was almost noon when he got up only to realise he was not in his home . He freshened up . It took him sometime to come out of lethargy. He was starving. He ordered something to eat . There was no point sitting here all day . He will have to think of what to do next.


He cannot stay at hotel for long. He has to search for a place to stay first . But before all that he had to talk to two important persons. They would be so worried and eagerly waiting to hear from him.


He dialled up to his sisters phone to talk to his Dadi.After talking briefly to his sister ,phone was handed to his Dadi. His princess as expected bombarded him with questions. He patiently answered everything and later called Dhani to inform her about his whereabouts.




After his breakfast he went to his office to spread out the word that he wanted a house for rent urgently.He called up his besties later in the day . They made themselves available as soon as he had approached them. He thought himself lucky to still have persons he could trust his life with! Both his friends Raj and Pankaj offered him to stay in their house but he was not ready. He needed his space right now.


When he was busy with all this in the afternoon he got a call. It was an unknown number. Hearing the familiar voice when he picked the call his heart raged . "Viplav Baba. How are you? I hope everything is going well around you". It was Tripurari. Viplav took a deep breath. He will keep his word no matter what! . This was not the time .There will be his time soon . For now he is not in that position.So he asked "Tell me"

"Hows my honourable father doing? He would be finally very happy to know that you know about me right" Tripurari chuckled

"Why did you call me. Spit it out" Viplav retorted impatiently

"Yes yes Viplav Baba. Have patience. I think you forgot something important. I can totally understand you might be busy. But you know i am in dire need of it"

Viplav remembered he had promised to pay ample amount of money for this scumbag. He replied

"Yes yes i am on it. Will give you soon" he cut the call unable to bear him anymore.


Later in the afternoon with the help of his friends he found a decent house through an acquaintance of his and the owner was helpful enough to accept a meagre advance what he could come up with. It was settled that he would move there very next day. He found himself lucky to find a house within a day.



After all thIS hustle bustle he ended up in Ashram in the evening . Seeing his Maji, Kaki and Dadi surrounding him with utmost concern for him overwhelmed him . All of a sudden it seemed Ashram was more of a home then what he had left a day back.


After talking to ladies for a while and having a cup of tea Viplav with Dhani entered Dhanis room. They sat on the floor near her bed. Viplav leant on the wall exhausted mentally and physically. Dhani held his shoulder tight and caressed his face slowly.

Feeling her touch he closed his eyes feeling much lighter.


Finally they had got time to talk to each other with leisure. She did not know how to breach the topic about his family. She would wait for him to share when he wants. She waited patiently for him to talk. Ater a while Viplav let out what he was going through slowly to her. Hearing him declare that he would never enter that house again no matter what Dhani questioned

"How long will you stay in the hotel? Any luck with the house ?"


"Nothing to worry about the house. Got a house already .Will be moving in tomorrow . Dhani house is the least of the problem now "he sighed


He looked at her doubting for once whether to bring out his thoughts to her . She would again get more distressed. But he had to. This was about their life their future.


Dhani was waiting for him to continue.


He reached out to her hand. Holding her hand he said


"You know first thing that came in my mind when Dadaji had opposed our marriage citing society was to move away permanently from Banras with you which was always my plan anyway. But only reason that stopped me was Dadaji. We would run away but Dadaji and our family would face the wrath of society. He would lose his position.

And now that i don't care about him i am only concerned about this Ashram if we leave this place

"Will all of them be ready to move out of this place for us? Even if they agree how can we manage ?"

He looked at her tensed face and said as if convincing himself too "Dhani the only way is to be here and fight it out"


Dhani took a while to reply . "All this because of me.. "she was saying when she felt a firm hand on her lips .Viplav was signalling her to stop it .Sensing her turmoil he immediately held her face and looking into her eyes said "You don't know Dhani how i felt when i entered this Ashram today. I found a new home despite losing one and all because of you!!!" he smiled.


Seeing him smile Dhani smiled with content. He immediately laid his head on her lap. Dhani reacted swiftly asking him to get up scared if someone in Ashram would see them. She had to give in to her adamant Vakil Babu sensing he needs it the most now and slowly started caressing his head.




So here they were uncertain of what lay ahead in their future but certain that they were in it together!!



Edited by AvaniVrinda - 7 years ago
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Apolgies for all the wonderful forum members for late update to the story.
I know chapters are very shor too Will try to update coming chapters soon 😳
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