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---nishu---

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Posted: 12 years ago

#81

hi dear

m on of your silent reader

read almost a your ff

but being lazy bum

(which i am ,please don't tell all

its secret)

i comment only few times

and on this OS

not one even after three update

so here me goes with my official first comment for your this OS

PLEASE REPLY IF YOU LIKE IT

AND IGNORE IF YOU HATE IT

A I KNEW HOW GOOD YOU ARE WITH PEN

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---nishu---

@---nishu---

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#82

FEW LINES

ZINDA RAHNE K LIYE

KISSNE KAHA

ZARURI HAI JEENA YAHA

TERE EK PAAS HONE SE

MRE SAATH HONE SE

MERE LIYE TO KUCH AUR NA PAANA BAKI RAHA

TU YH MAANE KE

TU MERE LIYE KUCH BHI NAHI

ISS PAHLE MEIN DEDU HAS KE YEH ZINDAGI

KYOKI

tu har khushi se karwati hai ,

meri pahchan

tu woh muskaan hai meri !

tu ruh ban ke mujme base ,

tu woh jaan hai meri !

tujhe bhulne se pahle ,

mine uss rub ko kya khud ko bhi bhul jaayu

par jis ek pal

ek ahsaa

ko na bhul paao ,

tu woh ek yaad hai meri !

tujhko bhul kar

haan tujhko bhul kar ,

na jee paauga ek pal bhi

tu woh ek saans hai meri

sorry for spelling mistake

Edited by 9n9i9s9h9u9 - 12 years ago

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anmirza

@anmirza

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#83

Loved it!!! Can't wait until the family reunion!!!

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tich.1990mg

@tich.1990mg

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: 9n9i9s9h9u9
hi dear
m on of your silent reader
read almost a your ff
but being lazy bum
(which i am ,please don't tell all
its secret)
i comment only few times
and on this OS
not one even after three update
so here me goes with my official first comment for your this OS

PLEASE REPLY IF YOU LIKE IT
AND IGNORE IF YOU HATE IT
A I KNEW HOW GOOD YOU ARE WITH PEN

hey sweety i can never hate any comment of my reader
and i know u r also very good with pen
ur poems are really good... 😃

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tich.1990mg

@tich.1990mg

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: kuhu18
awesome update
it was really emotional
please please give the next part
its such a beautiful story
please dont end it
cont soon
will be waiting

hey dear thanks a lot for liking it
They says Good thing has to come to an end
and its better to end on a good note than stretching it which will become bitter
it will end with one more part and i hope
it will remain in my reader's heart

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tich.1990mg

@tich.1990mg

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: Rajshree12
Part 2
Mind blowinggg uppdate di...
Poor Maan...he loved Geet ssooo much...
But he was fearing tht Geet may also leave him the way his parents & daadima left...
Loved their confession...

Plzzz di...aage ka part bhi dedo na...
Plzzz...plzzz...plzzz..

Thank u sooo much sweety,,
de diya ek part and will update next part maybe tom

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tich.1990mg

@tich.1990mg

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: moni6262
Ur simplest of words can make me cry
it was so simple yet so beautifully depicted
loue u for how u portrayed their emotions
n about posting more parts...plss do post
would love to see their after life
how the kids get their dad back
will b waiting for nxt updates
post them soon plss
bt awesome n fantastic ss..
Such portrayel of emotions can be only expected from u
so simple, so beautiful, so sweet

aweee thanks a lot dear
i m overwhelmed with ur love and affection
i m glad this story had made a place in ur heart

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tich.1990mg

@tich.1990mg

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#88

Originally posted by: Desigirls12

hai tich, tis os i read in ur os competition, was so lovely emotional os.. te way kids asking no no craving for they father ki love and geet too , was so painful.. te way kids asking her and geet struggling wat to say, my maan is listen to all tis which piercing his heart was so painful.. te way my maan ki pov was so painful, so for his geet he hide his love.. oh god .. te way geet came to know and hugs my maan was so painful scenes..i love te os so much.. can u give 2 more updates my maan with kids...

Nalini sweety thanks a lot for ur words..
yup Maan and kids will be in next part
sorry only one part left but that will be with family

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tich.1990mg

@tich.1990mg

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#89

Originally posted by: OsheenDGr8
Hello Tich, this is the first work I read of urs... n must say it is fab👏
The way u portray emotions is superb... I loved all the dialogs n the talk betwn Geet n her daughter...

On whole the concept was amazing n ur way of writing is even better...

Loved it⭐️⭐️

OMG Osheen Thank u so much dear.
I m really glad u read it and liked it also
in our world we can see this kind of situation in every 2 houses
and i really wanted to show the turmoil of the family
thanks dear for ur lovely comment