'Anjaana Saaya' (Short Story)last Part V

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Bhoomi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: sri_4
hey bhoomi..
started reading u fics..so u will see my comment..
in detail..will post again..
good wishes..
sri:-)

reading one by one that makes me feel my stories rnt that boring.. take ur time.. u feel like reading it completely makes me feel happy for sure..

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Sri

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Posted: 15 years ago

#42

Hey bhoomi..
Another story with a very different theme-reincarnation..
Mahendra thakurs character was very good as an elderly person trying to help her lover sarithas soul rest in peace by renovating the shubhdwar!!
The whole flash back was handled well..vidhis character was really potrayed good,scared of her night mares,sad becos of not getting married she was really not happy but was trying..n then she came across the reason for her nightmare…the temple-shubhdwar!!!it unfolded many stories of saritas death n she was her rebirth hmm..her n mokshs relation was again confused..they both compromised n decided to get ,married!!!
Moksh,with his greedy parents ..he was happy living with his uncle rather than them didn't liked vidhi at first thinking she has attitude when she didn't give books to him but later he found out that she is good at heart..and they both look like a perfect couple..he was worried for her night mares and supported her always after that..
The last part was really good!!
"Iss bar naa sahi, Vidhi ka vidhan hoga to main agle janm mey tumhari banungi, Tabhi mujhe shayad Moksh prapt hoga"-what a dialogue!!loved it hehe!!
And the end was really funny,,never thought a end like this for a serious story!!
"Sapne mey mujhe teen bachen nazar ayein, teeno kitab padh rahe the aur teeno ney tumhari tarah mote mote chashmey lagaye the. Hai Ram! Lagta hai mere bacho ka bhavish khatre mey hain agar woh apni Maa pe gaye to"
Hehehe!!!
Good wishes..
Sri :-)

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: sri_4
Hey bhoomi..
Another story with a very different theme-reincarnation..
Mahendra thakurs character was very good as an elderly person trying to help her lover sarithas soul rest in peace by renovating the shubhdwar!!
The whole flash back was handled well..vidhis character was really potrayed good,scared of her night mares,sad becos of not getting married she was really not happy but was trying..n then she came across the reason for her nightmare?the temple-shubhdwar!!!it unfolded many stories of saritas death n she was her rebirth hmm..her n mokshs relation was again confused..they both compromised n decided to get ,married!!!
Moksh,with his greedy parents ..he was happy living with his uncle rather than them didn't liked vidhi at first thinking she has attitude when she didn't give books to him but later he found out that she is good at heart..and they both look like a perfect couple..he was worried for her night mares and supported her always after that..
The last part was really good!!
"Iss bar naa sahi, Vidhi ka vidhan hoga to main agle janm mey tumhari banungi, Tabhi mujhe shayad Moksh prapt hoga"-what a dialogue!!loved it hehe!!
And the end was really funny,,never thought a end like this for a serious story!!
"Sapne mey mujhe teen bachen nazar ayein, teeno kitab padh rahe the aur teeno ney tumhari tarah mote mote chashmey lagaye the. Hai Ram! Lagta hai mere bacho ka bhavish khatre mey hain agar woh apni Maa pe gaye to"
Hehehe!!!
Good wishes..
Sri :-)

Hi Sri,

U know as the show Raaz peechley janm ka has started i recollect my this story and wonder that such things for me when i wrote were the most strange and fiction story as such.. but can they actually be tehr ein real life too ..?? may be such temple may exist like it did in my story lol.. i shoudl check it out na..😆..

SO Sri u enjoyed reading this reincarnation story... yup this theme was different and this was the first time i was wonderign it will be felt or people may not relate it at all.. i was overjoyed many have liked it..its amogn my early set of writings.. and i feel nice that evenafter a loong time people read it and stilll like it..

Yes the Shubh dwara and mahesndra thakur.. it was strange how the names i just got as the plot of this story unfolded i realy didnt make much efforts to search for them..they came in few secs.. yes Vidhi , Moksha..and u liked that lines... yup many readers have liked that segment dialogue a lot.. am so happy that Sri even u liked it and enjoyed had a smile reading the last part... endign on a happy note usually i love.. so smile ont he face as one complete an ff makes me feel content abotu my wriintg..warna whats the use of writing if it makes one not smile... at all..

Thanks Sri for reading and replyign to this story... feels good to know that u liked it and the story was intersting as a read.... keep smilign ..and enjoy.. tc

Bhoomi

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seema mittal

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Posted: 15 years ago

#44

heyyyy bhoomi
this ss was also really good
the mystery n the reincarnation part made it really enjoyable to me
i always love watching this kinds of things
n this time i loved reading it

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: seema.mittal2
heyyyy bhoomi
this ss was also really good
the mystery n the reincarnation part made it really enjoyable to me
i always love watching this kinds of things
n this time i loved reading it

Hi Seema,

hehe u enjoy such reincarnation types story ... glad to knwo that.. when i wrote this it was to try soemthign different but after watchign shows like raaz peechley janm ka i wonder many mnay storeis more will be written now onward sby tohers... good to know dear u enjoyed reading the story... and have fun na.. a bit fictional and easy at heart kind..

Bhoomi

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Escapist

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Posted: 15 years ago

#46

awwe this again was a wonderful story loved it to d core....ahh now im feeling i'll fall short of words soon ...itni deep feelings r der in ur words...im spellbound truly....

i loved d 4th part whr u described vidhi's choice of her partner ..felt it soo very close to my heart...
and evn the 5th part was awesome!!

lovely 😊

-Fatima

Edited by charming.angel - 15 years ago

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: charming.angel
awwe this again was a wonderful story loved it to d core....ahh now im feeling i'll fall short of words soon ...itni deep feelings r der in ur words...im spellbound truly....

i loved d 4th part whr u described vidhi's choice of her partner ..felt it soo very close to my heart...
and evn the 5th part was awesome!!

lovely 😊

-Fatima

HI Fatima,

glad dear u liked this ff too..this one is one of the rare one in my collection where there is a thriller kind of feel.. with a lot of imaginative story line.. more of a fictional base.. btu so nice still all felt it to be somewhere real..and liked it so much..

thanks a lot for ur lovely comments i appreciate it a lot.. it makes me to write more and continue my journey here..

aww u liked Bidhi's coversation and felt it u could relate to urself..thats such a big compliment.. u enjoyed the 5th part too.. glad and happy u had a good time reading these stories.. and ur comment made it to be open for a longer time as wel..tc

Bhoomi

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-sam-

@-sam-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#48

just read this
Its so good....
You write so differently
My exms r going on so i'll comment on two wheels made us one later...
Do write one on Mayur...

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: sam-18
just read this
Its so good....
You write so differently
My exms r going on so i'll comment on two wheels made us one later...
Do write one on Mayur...

Hi dear,

glad u liked this story... I try to potray differnt charcters and concepts.. and feels ncie that u liked it and felt it was different.. oh ur exams r on.. all my best wishes with u.. yup take ur time and araamsey later comment no problem..

writing on MayUr .will see nothignon mind yet.. tc

Bhoomi

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