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AshtaVasus

@AshtaVasus

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#101

Originally posted by: LovingAHA2017
"Thank you for bringing a different shade of meaning to that line"

You know when the chemistry between an author and a reader is best? When author writes something in his/ her flow of thought ... while it perfectly fits the perception of reader within his thoughts.

Digressing... my habit always😃!

During schooldays we had a beautiful poem in regional language. It was written by a famous poetess after the death of her husband, also a literary himself and theirs was a love marriage through their common love for literature. The poem is a beautiful depiction of woman's feelings.

Before the teacher gave the entire background, I had interpreted it as the sensitivities of a woman just coming off to age and not knowing how to handle all the emotions emerging within her.

My teacher had laughed heartily and lovingly told me, " Humaari Ladki badi ho gayee!😳"

The crux of the incident, beauty of a piece of writing is when it has different colors to it.

Well said, Neha. 👏 very true.

What a beautiful reference you gave. Hmmm... toh humari Neha was naughty during school days itself huh? 😳

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Neha

@Loving2Missing2

Rocker

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Posted: 7 years ago

#102

Originally posted by: FrankPunch

Well said, Neha. 👏 very true.
What a beautiful reference you gave. Hmmm... toh humari Neha was naughty during school days itself huh? 😳

Uss se bhi jyaada!! right from Kinder garten days! I drooled on my class teacher when she looked sexy with a flowing saree and goggles on her eyes, waiting for a bus on a hot sunny day... I wanted to grow up and be like her!😆😆😆

Aur bhi bahot kuchh tha Neha ki jindagi mein!

Edited by LovingAHA2017 - 7 years ago

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Neha

@Asyalover

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#103

this is a great story..thank my luck i came across it or i wud have miss this wonderful story...p.s. do pm me for next update if you do.

Edited by Asyalover - 7 years ago

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AshtaVasus

@AshtaVasus

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#104

Originally posted by: LovingAHA2017

Uss se bhi jyaada!! right from Kinder garten days! I drooled on my class teacher when she looked sexy with a flowing saree and goggles on her eyes, waiting for a bus on a hot sunny day... I wanted to grow up and be like her!😆😆😆

Aur bhi bahot kuchh tha Neha ki jindagi mein!

Really???!!! 😳 I think all of us dreamt of becoming like our teacher no? Yay, we also will get a chance to scold others, write on the board, use a cane, give gyans etc etc. But you girl, take the cake. I was a timid girl back then. Would love to know more of those mischeivous days Neha.

You know what? you could actually write a story on this - like a diary of a young girl full of mischief and her wonderful journey to the day she saw her own girl in her hands. Like a Moth to a Butterfly.

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AshtaVasus

@AshtaVasus

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: Asyalover
this is a great story..thank my luck i came across it or i wud have miss this wonderful story...p.s. do pm me for next update if you do.

Hello @Asyalover,

A warm welcome to my Story Factory. 🤗

I thought I was actually directing you to Ashley's other FFs who had mouthwatering drool worthy Advays who were smart, possessive and romantic.

Little did I expect you to chance upon my work and found it interesting.

Thank YOU for such wonderful words. You made my day !

I am updating my next chapter in a day or two. Will definitely PM you.

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Neha

@Asyalover

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#106

Originally posted by: FrankPunch

Hello @Asyalover,
A warm welcome to my Story Factory. 🤗
I thought I was actually directing you to Ashley's other FFs who had mouthwatering drool worthy Advays who were smart, possessive and romantic.
Little did I expect you to chance upon my work and found it interesting.
Thank YOU for such wonderful words. You made my day !
I am updating my next chapter in a day or two. Will definitely PM you.

lol😆 I am not commenting person but yours and Ashley's stories had mad me comment. this past few days i have been on Ashley's post find her stories and the ones she read. therefore i read some as well cause i love revenge, possessive, romantic, antsy, fri-nemies, hate/love, fantasy, supernatural or rivalry/secret love/marriage concepts type of stories.

i will wait for your this fanfic update and do pm me to recommend any long ff/ss on the concept i mentioned or which you find interesting.

I would like to recommend you 2 stories too which i totally love is on:

Asad & Zoya -> https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/4712086/asya-ff-mohabbatein-part-18-updated-pg-140-20-12-16

Mugdha & Rajat https://www.wattpad.com/story/5433945-prithvi-vol-1

⭐️MERRY CHRISTMAS⭐️

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alanta

@alanta

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#107

Thank you for this long update. This was a beautifully woven chapter, which was precisely written bringing out the shades of the characters with a brilliant narration 👏

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@JanakNandini

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#108

I really love this story.Perhaps more than Devils trap.You can ask me the reason ? Because you have potrayed different colors of all characters.Till now We dont know what will happen next.Expecting lots of twists and turns.

I have to appericiate your effort to bring out a story.That too when forum is dead.. .Kudos.Chandra and Nandini are always magical.Forget plus and minus. IF someday Suddenly if myself or you going to publish some book I would say Chandra and Nandini sowed the inspiration for us.I discovered my writing passion only here and so is you.

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2filmy

@2filmy

Trailblazer

Posted: 7 years ago

#109

Originally posted by: FrankPunch

Take your time, dearie.
There's no rush. Writing the next chapter.
Will post that by tomorrow.

Thanks Di for understanding

Now I can comment

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2filmy

@2filmy

Trailblazer

Posted: 7 years ago

#110

Lopamudra really loves Nandini a lot

She is just a mere servant but the way she cares for her and is so concerned for her shows her deep feelings for Nandini

They are much more than just mistress and servant as Nandini treats her with the respect she deserves

Such relationships are very warm and such people can do anything for the person they love

I understand the point you made very well here

however much we struggle ourselves we never want our loved ones to have the same fate

we cannot see them struggle like us but our siblings learn from us so pick up some of our traits

It's so easy to see how fickle minded and shallow Nalini is so even I feel she will forget Chandra the minute she sees a more handsome person

Nalini just goes by the outer beauty and believes in the use and throw policy

But it's touching to see the subtle sadness in Nandini as it hints her deep feelings for Chandra

I think Avantika herself was very ambitious so she didn't like sensitive Neela and ignored her always

Avantika seems to be a person who believes that emotions make you weak and a loser

I think she left Neela with Nandini as she had understood that they both are similar so will bond well

or she just wanted to ignore them both so thought they will be well occupied between themselves

Maybe Avantika doesn't complain about how Neela grew up as she is her own daughter not a step one

Nalini was an extrovert child so she was Avantika favorite. she pampered Nalini. Nalini saw the ways of her mother and imitated her so became like her now rather a worse version of Avantika. Avantika had indulged Nalini then but regretting it now when it's too late.