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Posted: 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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AUTHOR'S NOTE :


Friends,
I am extremely sorry for the delay.
Just posted my next chapter.

This is the longest single chapter I have ever written - approx 4000 words ! There was no way I could split it into two chapters. It would have spoilt the plot otherwise.

Take time to let the chapter sink in, and give me your valuable feedback. If I have missed out on something, do let me know.

Regards,
Sangeetha
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Wonderful chapter Sangeetha😊
The conversation between Nandini and lopamudra was interesting⭐️
The scene between Nandini and vaidji was nice❤️

Edited by Nonie12345 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Long one , Yes! But intriguing enough to read till end!

Her assessment of his character is so perfect...and the moment of his silently hearing it in his disguise must have given him more pride than defeating Nanda

And he then gifts her back with that emphasized You are NOT your father... A magnanimity in Chandra's character further


I just wondered bande ko apni army nahi hai kya? Full time biwi ke saath bitaayega to war planning kab karega?😆

This phrase about "whispered rumor"... is it commonly used? A beautiful phrase!


Congrats on a beautiful chapter!


p.S. When are you going to find time to read my 13th Chapter? It's Barun Bonanza if you love the guy😉
Edited by LovingAHA2017 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: LovingAHA2017

Long one , Yes! But intriguing enough to read till end!

Her assessment of his character is so perfect...and the moment of his silently hearing it in his disguise must have given him more pride than defeating Nanda

True. Hearing people speaking good about you, when they dont know that you are in earshot distance is sooo Honey to the Ears. Thats a rare honest feedback one can get. It makes your day, isn't it ?


And he then gifts her back with that emphasized You are NOT your father... A magnanimity in Chandra's character further

OH, I dint realise that at all !!!!!!!!!!!!!
I wrote it from the angle where Nandini is feeling dejected and says that -- Chandra will not marry his arch enemy's daughter now, after all the bloodshed.
And Chandra giving a comforting answer to that, without disclosing his identity stating You are NOT your father. --- You dont have the tyrannical traits of your father. You are different. So I dont consider you an enemy's daughter.
And the statement serves as a precursor of her monologue for the Treasure Locket - That she need not act like her greedy father in hoarding the treasure for personal use. She has a choice of giving it back to the People.

Only after reading your comments, I went back and read that paras again. And it made total sense!!!!!! They were actually complimenting each other.
Thank you for bringing a different shade of meaning to that line. ⭐️⭐️⭐️


I just wondered bande ko apni army nahi hai kya? Full time biwi ke saath bitaayega to war planning kab karega?😆

🤣
Banda toh 2nd Chapter main hi kalti mar diya tent se. 2nd chapter ended with statement that "her thoughts went back to the day events" and the 3rd Chapter started with a statement "A Few Hours Earlier...".
So here, our Heroine is thinking back those events with the Scroll in her hand. And there, Chandra is narrating the events to Chanakya.
Do you think it will be better if I write this as the Author's Note in each Chapter ??


This phrase about "whispered rumor"... is it commonly used? A beautiful phrase!

Thank You, Neha 🤗
Actually, the perfect translation of RajaRahasya should be Imperial Secret ??!!

Generally, the Raja Rahasya contains details of the secret tunnels / passages of the fort, trade secrets, the King's Impostor used mainly for Public Appearances, information on Rani getting pregnant (the Queen who get the heir for the Throne would be titled Patrani. So, if one queen gets pregnant, the other queens would use the Vaidji to ensure her abortion. Yep, Ladies Harem Politics 😉) etc... etc...
Such secrets are generally passed to the next person, ONLY in the ears - as a whisper - that too, by keeping the hand covering the mouth while speaking the secret (so that nobody can understand the lip movement also). And generally, the whisper would start with "nowadays we hear that... or There is a talk in the town that ... "

So I used the word "Whispered Rumour". I dont know whether such word really exists in the Dictionary 😲



Congrats on a beautiful chapter!


p.S. When are you going to find time to read my 13th Chapter? It's Barun Bonanza if you love the guy😉

Guilty as charged. Just tied up with work. I promise that I will complete reading it as soon as possible.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: FrankPunch



Make your own opinions, Sparrow. Trust your instincts.
Its not necessary to bend all the time, to please others. 😳

Not not to please
You are the creator so you know best about the story😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: FrankPunch


I am so sorry for the delay... will update the chapter today.

I am a bit late to reply again
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Posted: 7 years ago
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I just read the update
It's too late now
will comment tomorrow
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Posted: 7 years ago
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"Thank you for bringing a different shade of meaning to that line"

You know when the chemistry between an author and a reader is best? When author writes something in his/ her flow of thought ... while it perfectly fits the perception of reader within his thoughts.

Digressing... my habit always😃!

During schooldays we had a beautiful poem in regional language. It was written by a famous poetess after the death of her husband, also a literary himself and theirs was a love marriage through their common love for literature. The poem is a beautiful depiction of woman's feelings.

Before the teacher gave the entire background, I had interpreted it as the sensitivities of a woman just coming off to age and not knowing how to handle all the emotions emerging within her.

My teacher had laughed heartily and lovingly told me, " Humaari Ladki badi ho gayee!😳"

The crux of the incident, beauty of a piece of writing is when it has different colors to it.
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: 2filmy

I just read the update

It's too late now
will comment tomorrow


Take your time, dearie.
There's no rush. Writing the next chapter.
Will post that by tomorrow.

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