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Posted: 10 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: mohinianammu

i read all the parts it was just amazing👏👏

powlichu allo😛
that dancing scene reminded of sati
really missing my sati and shiv😔



oh u already read na? i just pm u abt my ff...

Thanks for ur comment... :)

Shivante perinoppam Sati enn mathram kelkananu enikishtam... cant accept Parvati atleast in a photo frame tooo..
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Posted: 10 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: DhwaniNair

PART VIII
Gauri's bhajan is appreciated by others. All praised "Dr. Naksh's daughter".Swamiji blessed her. Someone whispered about the broken marriage too.
Meanwhile Shankar is happened to hear these type of whispers on the way and his smile completely faded away.
Gauri's eyes are searching for the Shankar.

Gauri's singing part was very beautifully written. Thanks for the reminder of the Vasantotsav sangeet pratiyogita.😛😳I love it very much.😃 And hers enquirying eyes that's too only for her Shankar, never ceased to amaze me.😳

"Gauri ji"

She exclaimed who is this. Nandu introduced himself as a brother like of Shankar. "I attended the engagement ceremony too."

Nandu, who know what Gauri is searching for Shankar, helped her by saying that Shankar will be at a forest near the stream this time.

Gauri remembered that day when Shankar saved her from some uncultured fellows. Yes that forest is this...!

Forest huh!😉 And i like this Nandu fellow😆😆everytime he's ready to help out Gauri.😃No matter what😉! Don't he affraid of Shankar's third eye??

...


Gauri reached the forest. None is there. How can Shankar comes here alone daily! She searched for him. Atlast she found him who is meditating under a tree.

"Oh Mr. Shankar! You are here! I feel like I am Shakti and You are Shiva."

Gauri came in front of him and looked at him with a cute face.

"I am going to disturb you Shankar. I will disturb you throughout my life" She smiled.

Well said Gauri👏😆 You are indeed Shankar's Shakti if he's your Shiva😉😛. ANd we all know how's Shiva...he needs a Sati's devotion and a Parvati's initiation to accept Shakti😆. SO carry on.😛
P.S. so Shankar has earned his life long disturbance...😳my condolence 😉😆🤣

Gauri called him in a romantic+childish tone.

"Ssshan...kaaarrr, Shankarrr.., Shaaankarr"

Shankar opened the eyes with anger and looked at her. Gauri fainted. He shocked and broken his meditation. He stooped to the ground.

"Hey Gauri what happened?? Open your eyes. Open" He touched her cheek and called her. "Gauri"

Gauri opened her eyes and stood up with the help of Shankar. By holding her, Shankar asked her,

"Suddenly what happened to you?"

Gauri said in low voice as she is not well, "You opened your third eye na? I became ash" She stopped her acting and started to laugh.

Shankar reject her hand from her and looked so angry.

"You are really mad!"

He tried to leave the place. Gauri is running behind him.

"Hey...Shankar... Please go slowly. I am sorry. I will not repeat it. I did it just for fun. Please listen me, Shankar"

Aww I just wish the other Gauri could use this tactics over on her Shankar.😳I like the Kama Bhasma drama she played...but form Shankar's point of view, it's low. She shouldn't do this.😊 See Shankar has taken the profession of being a priest with all his respect. SO he shouldn't be mocked for anything he does on this regard.
P.S. but he is entitled to be pranked by Gauri.😉😛 always.

Shankar,while walking, without looking back, said:

"Villagers started to say something and they are discussing now on "broken marriage". Your father may busy with finding a guy for as soon as possible because of only one muhrut. If you are following me like this, it will create problems in your marriage. So don't do that."

"I found my groom. So don't worry Shankar. My father will definitely accept our love as he loves me. Ganga is not so close with my papa. Thats why she didn't get a good marriage. But Shankar he will definitely accept our love"

"What non-sense! Our love!!?? I don't love anyone."

"Then why you searched for me when you went to room in temple today. I noticed it."

Shankar stopped his walking and turned to Gauri.

"Yes. I looked if you are following me or not. I feared if torture is following me."

"Torture!! You called me torture.. But you know, this is sign of love."

"No I don't love you because I don't like you"

"Why?"

"I have some dreams about my girl. She will be good mannered and loving without selfishness. I just want a simple girl. Not a rich girl like you"

"I am rich. It is not my mistake and I am good mannered I am sure. I am always give respect to elders! I am not selfish too Shankar"

"Are you giving respect to elders??I am elder than you. But you still calling my name "Shankar" without giving any respect. How much time I ignored you. But you are irritating me again and again for your happiness. Selfish!"

Gauri shocked and remained silent.

Shankar started to walk. Again she started to running back him. "Is it a big problem Shankar? Oh noo... Shankar Ji...! Stop there. Please. Listen me... Shankar Jiii..."

They reached at the stream where the forest ends.

Some passerby villagers looked at them and some whispered something. Shankar stopped.

"Look! All are watching us. Every suspicious eyes are like fire.It will make your life an ash. So please go Kanya."

Gauri smiled. "That fire will not affect me because you are with me, Shankar ji. Heyy...don't go..See now I am giving you respect in my words too which is already in my heart. I am not selfish. I know I am not irritating you. I know you loves me. Love is not an irritation. Okay bye Shankar ji. See you tomorrow..."
Gauri went without letting Shankar to say anything more.


okay...1. Shankar is worried about Gauri and irritated at the villagers' gossip.
2. He does care for Gauri.😛as he is thinking about his wedding.
3. He is in love with Gauri😃.
4. He has already given his instruction about the dos and don'ts for his future wife. And Gauri starts to abide by them.
5. Gauri is very cute and childish...I think that's why Shankar is fearing.
...


Evening Gauri reached again at the temple with her Dadaji and Ganga. The pooja is done by Shankar. She felt more crowdy now than in morning. So that he didn't see her and passed her by just giving prasadam. Dadaji did not disturbed him because he is that much busy. After sometime, Swamiji came to meet Dadaji and invited them to the Ulsav special dance performance of little girls held at 9 pm. He readily agreed. But Gauri got interest only when she came to know that girls will dance with the song of Shankar, which is informed by none other than Nandu.There are no seats in front of the stage allocated for audience. They should sit on the ground and watch.On the stage, Swami arranged a chair for Dadaji from where he can get the side view of the perfromance. Gauri refused a chair because she knows these types of partiality wont like by Shankar. "Chair is for elders. I will stand and watch." Ganga supported her.
Shankar entered, but at the opposite side, where arranged musical instruments.

So...both future groom and bride are in for the dance competition.😛


He sat down with orchestra team.
Gauri gazed at him only.

"Rii...nii riri saaa aaa...aaa dherenananaaa dheee dheerernnnaaa..."

Gauri gazed at him only...

Little girls moved their cute steps with that magical voice and rhythm. All others enjoying it.

But Gauri gazed at him only... Listen his music only...

"Sa Sa ni Sa Ni Ni Sa... Pa Pa Pa Ma Ri Ga Ri Sa... PaPaPaMa Dha Dha Dha Pa Ni Sa Sa...NiDha Ma Ma Ma..."

Shankar
closed his eyes while singing.

Gauri moved forward by forgetting all.. Little girl danced by moving backward...

Now Gauri is in the centre of the stage by facing Shankar. Dadaji stood up. All wondered what is happening .

"Riri thanana dhithaNanana dhirana dhirana dhirana..."

Gauri started to dance.

"...thanana Riri thanana dhithaNanana dharininanana dhirana dhirana dhirana dheeem dheem thanana dhirana dhiranana...dheerreeenAaa...aaa"

Shankar opened his eyes... Gauri stopped her dance... They look at eachother... All witnessed their magical eyelock...

From the moment Shankar sat to the moment Gauri stared at Shankar's eyes...the entire scene is ethereally outstanding. I don't know I will ever be able to experience the same...but Dhwani, in this particular sequence you just didn't write a scene or paint a image...you made the entire thing so real and alive. Reading the lines, especially the tunes, creates shudder on my skin and it gives me the same visuals what I saw in DKDM's forest dance scene. You are blessed. You need to sharpen your talent, darling. Baki is upon God. May he and she both always bless you.😃+😭

"Gauri!!!!" Mouli's voice trembled the place. Ganga shocked. He came to the stage and pulled Gauri's hand. He stared at Dadaji and Ganga with great anger.

(Like Gauri's cute, childish voice) Mouli aka Rode doesn't have booming voice.😭
"All come with me."

Dadaji remained silent for not creating a scene there. They left.

Swamiji looked at Shankar. Yes, his son is upset...

Don't be upset Shankar ji. She will be back soon, here , forever in that sense...😆😛




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Posted: 10 years ago
#83
And I am sorry for being late Dhwani. I will accpet every punishment you give.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#84
Thank You Rimi... :)

I am giving u a punishment ;) You should write a 4 lines poem about me :P he he... Nice punishment na? ;)

:)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#85
sure Dhwani...😉
here you go...😆

A friend of mine😉,
She always sounds fine.
(As she is the Sound that sounds fine)
I have a friend whose sound is sweet and bright;
Talking with her is my heart's delight.
She's so gentle yet fierce in her mind and soul.
She may be imperfect but perfect to me, that's all.
She calls me Nalan and teases me as Billy ( from stradford on Avon)😉😆
But still she's my buttercup...my Honey Bunny.😳


Hey Dhwani...I have done my best.😆
Edited by mmroyalkaterick - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: mmroyalkaterick

<font color="#003366">sure Dhwani...😉
here you go...😆

<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif"><font color="#00FFF">A friend of mine😉,
She always sounds fine.
(As she is the Sound that sounds fine)
I have a friend whose sound is sweet and bright;
Talking with her is my heart's delight.
She's so gentle yet fierce in her mind and soul.
She may be imperfect but perfect to me, that's all.
She calls me Nalan and teases me as Billy ( from stradford on Avon)😉😆
But still she's my buttercup...my Honey Bunny.😳


<font color="#CC33CC">Hey Dhwani...I have done my best.😆</font>
</font></font></font>




Thank You Lady Nala + Lady Shakespeare for ur wonderful Poetry :) Like button of IF is not working, but that of my heart is working. :) I gave it to u :)

Now u r totally free from punishments ;)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#87

Originally posted by: mmroyalkaterick

<font color="#003366">sure Dhwani...😉
here you go...😆

<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif"><font color="#00FFF">A friend of mine😉,
She always sounds fine.
(As she is the Sound that sounds fine)
I have a friend whose sound is sweet and bright;
Talking with her is my heart's delight.
She's so gentle yet fierce in her mind and soul.
She may be imperfect but perfect to me, that's all.
She calls me Nalan and teases me as Billy ( from stradford on Avon)😉😆
But still she's my buttercup...my Honey Bunny.😳


<font color="#CC33CC">Hey Dhwani...I have done my best.😆</font>
</font></font></font>




THANKKK YOOOUUU RIMI...

oh those lines about me from my lady Shakespeare. :))))

I AM SOOO HAPPYYy... Thank youuu :))
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Posted: 10 years ago
#88
Dhwani
When are you updating😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#89

Originally posted by: Sadhanamomo

Dhwani

When are you updating😃



will soon dear... next month examm...so tension :(
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Posted: 10 years ago
#90
Wish you all the very best
relax

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