Gaurishankaram... Mohit Raina Mouni Roy FF

DhwaniNair thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#1
This is my first attempt.. u cant find anything new in it..This story is based on A famous MYTHICAL Love storyy... :)I will post it in different Parts... BR]


Mohit Raina...Shankar/Dev


Mouni Roy...Gauri Naksh Patel




Edited by DhwaniNair - 10 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

113

Views

18.8k

Users

12

Likes

141

Frequent Posters

DhwaniNair thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#2

Gaurishankaram...

PART I

23 years before...

Mr Naksh Patel, a well known successful Doctor, leading a happy life with his wife Sruthi and his daughters Ganga and Gauri, in Mumbai. When they visited a temple on the first birthday of Gauri, they met a Yogi there who propheced that she will marry her cousin who will be the reason for her father's death. Only Naksh came to knw about it and hide it frm even his wife.

Naksh has a sister, Daya, who is eloped with his young and beautiful gardener, Prabhu and now settled in Hariyana. Naksh dont maintain any relation with them after that bcaz he is very much angry with them. Once To prevent Daya from marrying Prabhu, he tried to kill him, but failed.

Prophecy threaten him each moment. So Naksh decided to meet them by going Hariyana without informing his family.

But there, he met the dead bodies of his sister and her husband. There he meets their 4 year old son, Dev!! He came to knw that their hut caught fire, but the son escaped surprisingly.

Naksh understood that this boy is the one who will marry his daughter according to the prophecy. It will be a disaster, he thought. So he decided to kill him also. He pretend to be taking him to Mumbai. He throw the child on a river frm the bridge on his way back to Mumbai. Naksh happily returned to his place like nothing happened.

Now...

Gauri is now at her 24. Her sister, Ganga's marriage is fixed. Naksh decided to conduct the marriage in his native place, one of the Villages in Uttarakhand and decided to live his rest of life there with his parents. So the family completely moved there.

On the marriage day of her sister, Gauri felt so happy and she is also enjoying new circumstances and the beauty of village.

There is a ritual in that village that if any marriage happens in there, the marriage should conduct in the Shiva temple of village and pooja of "mangalyasutra" should be done by one of the young bachelor priests of the temple.

Naksh family entered into the temple very early morning.

Gauri felt a different feeling which never felt before. Even Very little things in the temple gave her happiness... She heard that spiritual chants.. "ohm namah shivaya"...

Naksh met the senior priest and asked about the young priest who is going to do the rituals for them. Priest suggested Shankar who is his own son. Daksh became happy and enquired where is he. Priest showed the place where Shankar is doing Pooja of Lord Shiva.

Shankar, the embodiment of sun itself, whose face filled with divinity and seriousness ,attracted all especially Gauri. She stood like a statue at the first sight. Shankar came to Naksh and gave him a sweet smile without spoiling his serious look and said to come with him. His eyes accidently fell on Gauri...both look eachother... Gauri with a face of wonder and Shankar remained as Serious.

Pooja ended. Marriage happened so happily.

All left the temple.

But Gauri felt something lost there while Shankar couldn't concentrate on evening meditation...

Edited by DhwaniNair - 10 years ago
MsChanadlerBong thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 10 years ago
#3
Oh mere Mahadev , loved it di seriously . Their eyes met , plz continue soon . Really got hooked to this . Want to know what happens next
AsNoone thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#4
Beautiful Dhwani...
As the title suggested...and I repeat...GauriShankaram...wow. just continue soon.
AsNoone thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#5
Okay so here I am for detailed comments...which I did when some story just poke into my mind constantly. Congrats Dhwani...you have done it.😉😛

Originally posted by: DhwaniNair

Gaurishankaram...

PART I

23 years before...

Mr Naksh Patel, a well known successful Doctor, leading a happy life with his wife Sruthi and his daughters Ganga and Gauri, in Mumbai. When they visited a temple on the first birthday of Gauri, they met a Yogi there who propheced that she will marry her cousin who will be the reason for her father's death. Only Naksh came to knw about it and hide it frm even his wife.

Naksh has a sister, Daya, who is eloped with his young and beautiful gardener, Prabhu and now settled in Hariyana. Naksh dont maintain any relation with them after that bcaz he is very much angry with them. Once To prevent Daya from marrying Prabhu, he tried to kill him, but failed.

Prophecy threaten him each moment. So Naksh decided to meet them by going Hariyana without informing his family.

But there, he met the dead bodies of his sister and her husband. There he meets their 4 year old son, Dev!! He came to knw that their hut caught fire, but the son escaped surprisingly.

Naksh understood that this boy is the one who will marry his daughter according to the prophecy. It will be a disaster, he thought. So he decided to kill him also. He pretend to be taking him to Mumbai. He throw the child on a river frm the bridge on his way back to Mumbai. Naksh happily returned to his place like nothing happened.


I love the introduction. Specially the prophecy part. It adds an interesting effect here. And I love the name Ganga and Gauri...Dev.

And I can see you have Daksh and Himavan both in Mr. Naksh Patel.

great...btw it is very cruel to kill a boy.

Now...

Gauri is now at her 24. Her sister, Ganga's marriage is fixed. Naksh decided to conduct the marriage in his native place, one of the Villages in Uttarakhand and decided to live his rest of life there with his parents. So the family completely moved there.

On the marriage day of her sister, Gauri felt so happy and she is also enjoying new circumstances and the beauty of village.

There is a ritual in that village that if any marriage happens in there, the marriage should conduct in the Shiva temple of village and pooja of "mangalyasutra" should be done by one of the young bachelor priests of the temple.

Naksh family entered into the temple very early morning. Gauri felt a different feeling which never felt before. Even Very little things in the temple gave her happiness... She heard that spiritual chants.. "ohm namah shivaya"...

Naksh met the senior priest and asked about the young priest who is going to do the rituals for them. Priest suggested Shankar who is his own son. Daksh became happy and enquired where is he. Priest showed the place where Shankar is doing Pooja of Lord Shiva

Shankar, the embodiment of sun itself, whose face filled with divinity and seriousness ,attracted all especially Gauri. She stood like a statue at the first sight. Shankar came to Naksh and gave him a sweet smile without spoiling his serious look and said to come with him. His eyes accidently fell on Gauri...both look eachother... Gauri with a face of wonder and Shankar remained as Serious.

Pooja ended. Marriage happened so happily. All left the temple. But Gauri felt something lost there while Shankar couldn't concentrate on evening meditation...

So Shankar worships Shiva...it is a great title...anyways I like the way you keep the DKDM effect alive here...Gauri's feelings in the temple and the brief eye locking with Shankar. I am missing SHivSati😭 EVen in last episode Mahadev himself told the best relationship is where no words needed. Only eyes are enough to tell everything.And here also I am getting some essence from Shiva Trilogy too...there Daksh killed Sati's first husband.



Dhwani add the picture here too...and add Mohini FF in your title too...then It will be easy to track down.
DhwaniNair thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#6

PART II

Gauri is disturbed by the thoughts of that temple and especially of that person. She herself confused about her state. She remembered there was a boy in her college who proposed her, Indrajith. He is handsome hero of the college. So many girls fall for him. But his heart is fallen on Gauri. But she rejected him. There are a lot of reasons for that rejection. Main reason is she never felt any love to him. He is arrogant and do whatever for win and Gauri also know that Naksh never like such a man for her. When she was in Mumbai, he disturbed her through phone calls which informed by Gauri to Naksh. Thus Indrajith caught by police.

Such a big story happened in Gauri's life. But nothing affected her.

This is strange!!! For the first time, she is wandering like this!!!

Gauri atlast told her father about it because she knw that he has solution for her all problems.

Naksh understood that Magic of love embraced his daughter. But Shankar... just a priest...!!! No!! He is not a suitable son-in-law for him. It is necessary to make realize Gauri that this is only an infatuation. Infatuation... In Naksh words, Gauri just liked the divine atmosphere of the Temple and that Pooja bcaz it is new experience to her, Not love. Shankar has nothing to be her husband. For Gauri, her father is a genius. So he is definitely right.

Gauri needs a change for getting rid of that temple atmosphere. So Naksh sent her to a beautiful stream of the village with a maiden servant. He is right. Gauri enjoyed it very much by forgetting all.

But suddenly...!!

A group of men came there and teases them. Gauri didn't loss her courage and protest them by saying Naksh's name. One of them touched the hand of the maiden which provoked Gauri and he slapped the man. They all turned to her. Gauri tried to call Naksh, but they threw it to the steam. Both girls tried to ran away. The group chased them. On the way the girls parted away. Gauri lost her way and reached in a forest type area.

But the group followed by calling "Naksh's daughter". She cried out so loudly for the help. But none was there.

Gauri met a big wall. There are no other way to escape. The group is just behind her. Tears overflowed. Men laugh at her and the one whom she slapped, raise his hand. Gauri scared. He tried to touch her. But suddenly a stick swapped at his hand. All are wondered. They looked at the direction from where it came.

Shankar!!!! Gauri became happy and run to him. She hide behind him. The group of men frightened. They drooped infront of Shankar and apologized. Shankar's face filled with anger.

He slapped and warned each of them. They run away.

Shankar turned to Gauri and asked why she is there. She said what happened. He called Naksh and asked him to come to the stream for picking Gauri. He promised that he will drop her there safely.

Shankar asked Gauri to sit on the bike. She is very much happy and obeyed him. The bike moved. Gauri feels like she is in paradise flying with her Gandharva. Accidently she touched his shoulder.

That Touch!!!

She touched him again intentionally. Shankar requested her to held her hands on bike's holder. She became sad, but obeyed.

Naksh waited them on the place. Shankar handover Gauri to him. Naksh became happy and said thanks to him. He asked about the culprits. Shankar replied that he punished them. So don't worry.

Shankar left. Naksh smiled at her and hugged. Confidence filled in her mind. Gauri attain a new state. Now there is no confusion. She asserted that She is in Love!!!

Edited by DhwaniNair - 10 years ago
AsNoone thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#7

Originally posted by: DhwaniNair

PART II

Gauri is disturbed by the thoughts of that temple and especially of that person. She herself confused about her state. She remembered there was a boy in her college who proposed her, Indrajith. He is handsome hero of the college. So many girls fall for him. But his heart is fallen on Gauri. But she rejected him. There are a lot of reasons for that rejection. Main reason is she never felt any love to him. He is arrogant and do whatever for win and Gauri also know that Naksh never like such a man for her. When she was in Mumbai, he disturbed her through phone calls which informed by Gauri to Naksh. Thus Indrajith caught by police.

Thoughtful Gauri...very serene yet beautiful. So an Indrajith already proposed her and she got him arrested😆. That's my Mata.😳 Remind me of lots of thing...umm Sadhvish from Sati era, Vidyunmali from Parvati era...and Akash from Junoon.



Such a big story happened in Gauri's life. But nothing affected her.


Aww...That's because you have not fallen in love yet...Gauri.😳

This is strange!!! For the first time, she is wandering like this!!!

Hmm...once again Sati...always in deep thought of her Shiva( though that time she didn't lay her claim upon him.)

Gauri atlast told her father about it because she knw that he has solution for her all problems.

Daddy's girl.

Naksh understood that Magic of love embraced his daughter. But Shankar... just a priest...!!! No!! He is not a suitable son-in-law for him. It is necessary to make realize Gauri that this is only an infatuation. Infatuation... In Naksh words, Gauri just liked the divine atmosphere of the Temple and that Pooja bcaz it is new experience to her, Not love. Shankar has nothing to be her husband. For Gauri, her father is a genius. So he is definitely right.

Wow...typical Daksh...of course Indrajith was suitable for your girl Naksh...And Gauri too believed it...again remind me of Sati, when Daksh convinced her that she was just spelled bound by Shiva's evil magic. How...he demonstrated with 5 elements forgetting those elements along with everything in Creation bow to Shiva as their Master...while Sati is the embodiment of the same.

Gauri needs a change for getting rid of that temple atmosphere. So Naksh sent her to a beautiful stream of the village with a maiden servant. He is right. Gauri enjoyed it very much by forgetting all.

How thoughtful of him.

But suddenly...!!

A group of men came there and teases them. Gauri didn't loss her courage and protest them by saying Naksh's name. One of them touched the hand of the maiden which provoked Gauri and he slapped the man. They all turned to her. Gauri tried to call Naksh, but they threw it to the steam. Both girls tried to ran away. The group chased them. On the way the girls parted away. Gauri lost her way and reached in a forest type area.

Aww...famous Vritrasur track...my favourite.

But the group followed by calling "Naksh's daughter". She cried out so loudly for the help. But none was there.

Gauri met a big wall. There are no other way to escape. The group is just behind her. Tears overflowed. Men laugh at her and the one whom she slapped, raise his hand. Gauri scared. He tried to touch her. But suddenly a stick swapped at his hand. All are wondered. They looked at the direction from where it came.

Mahadev's trishul...😉I mean Shankar's stick.

Shankar!!!! Gauri became happy and run to him. She hide behind him. The group of men frightened. They drooped infront of Shankar and apologized. Shankar's face filled with anger. He slapped and warned each of them. They run away.

First of all this scene is the best from this part...I love it very much.

Next it reminds me of Vritrasur and Chitrasur defeat...Vidyunmali and Co ka jamke dhulai...seems young priest is the one.

Shankar turned to Gauri and asked why she is there. She said what happened. He called Naksh and asked him to come to the stream for picking Gauri. He promised that he will drop her there safely.

Hmm...pure gentleman...

Shankar asked Gauri to sit on the bike. She is very much happy and obeyed him. The bike moved. Gauri feels like she is in paradise flying with her Gandharva. Accidently she touched his shoulder.

That Touch!!!

Shankar is Gandharva and Gauri is his Apsara...I like this concept too. And wow she first time obeyed someone other than her father that's too happily. By the way Bike??

She touched him again intentionally. Shankar requested her to held her hands on bike's holder. She became sad, but obeyed.

aww...stern and stoic hermit. I understand. But again thanks Dhwani for the after Vritrasur track where she first time touched...from here you know comes the bestest music...the Sati theme music. Enough to hypnotize anyone.

Naksh waited them on the place. Shankar handover Gauri to him. Naksh became happy and said thanks to him. He asked about the culprits. Shankar replied that he punished them. So don't worry.

He is such a great person. By the way here i am suspecting that Shankar has some memory with Gauri's father...which he knew. What are they?

Shankar left. Naksh smiled at her and hugged. Confidence filled in her mind. Gauri attain a new state. Now there is no confusion. She asserted that She is in Love!!!

Whoa whoa...but Mata...in morning you said it was an infatuation no??



Such a beautiful story with gorgeous screenplay...you are genius Dhwani. I love it very much. Thanks for giving me bliss again.
...
Apna naam badal doon,
Ya tera naam chhupa loon.
Ya chhod ke sari yaad
Main Vairaag utha loon.
Bas ek rahe mera kaam ishq,
Mera naam ishq,
Mera naam,
Tera naam.
Yeh laal ishq...yeh malal ishq...yeh ebb ishq...yeh bair ishq.

Edited by mmroyalkaterick - 10 years ago
SadhanaV thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#8
Dhwani

Wonderful from the word go

Indrajith the hero of the college falls in love and proposes marriage Gauri gets him arrested wow mere Gauri smart girl actually brave takes me back to memories of Sati


Naksh understood that Magic of love embraced his daughter. But Shankar... just a priest...!!! No!! He is not a suitable son-in-law for him. It is necessary to make realize Gauri that this is only an infatuation. Infatuation... In Naksh words, Gauri just liked the divine atmosphere of the Temple and that Pooja bcaz it is new experience to her, Not love. Shankar has nothing to be her husband. For Gauri, her father is a genius. So he is definitely right.


Ok so Naksh is like Daksh only wanting to get what he wants all the time regardless of his daughter's feelings for another man


Then the group of men follwing Gauri and teasing her she running away from her only to bump into Shankar and he hitting them with the stick
ofcourse he beat them

And then the bike ride and Gauri placing her hand on his shoulders while he telling her not to do so aww Shankar is so harsh on her

This is so good and beautiful I can see it before my eyes continue very soon

DhwaniNair thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#9
PART III


Gauri is sleepless now... Speechless now...She is in dreamy world... Her mind whispers only one name "Shankar.. Shankar.."

Ganga asked who is this Shankar!!

Gauri skipped the topic "where is papa?"

Ganga "He went outside for meet someone. Hey Gauri..Shankar.. that priest... Am i right??"

Gauri "No" smiled and run... Ganga chased her playfully.


...


Naksh entered Martial Arts Coaching Centre of the village. He is impressed with its appearance. He enquired about Shankar, the owner and teacher of the centre. He found that Shankar is well educated and very intelligent. Naksh became happy and saw a son-in-law in Shankar. He is not from aristocratic family. But infront of his knowledge and talent, All other minuses are faded away from Naksh's eyes.


Naksh met Shankar there and proposed his idea of making him, his son-in-law. It was not a typical proposal. It was really an order! Shankar remained silent in his serious look. Naksh started to say about his wealth and fame. He also mentioned Shankar's family's status below his status. And he made a small favour to his "future" son-in-law that giving money for reestablishing the coaching centre into national level & then inter national. He informed he also did the financial help for his first son-in-law Chandramouly for starting a company because he is also talented.


Shankar breaks the silence. "Actually what you want? A son-in-law with talent or a suitable husband for your daughter" Naksh wondered both are same na?! A marriage not only need the blessings of parents but also the consent of man and woman. So Shankar said "I don't know about your daughter's heart, but i know my heart which is telling me to say you NO! I dont know whether I can be a suitabIe husband for your daughter or not, but I know I wont be a son-in-law as u wish. I am not a puppet. So sorry.. please"


Naksh smiled "I like this attittude. Brave man! A perfect man! Yes... You are my son-in-law" Shankar smiled and nodded his head smoothly which denotes his objection again...


Naksh left the placeq with a great determination.
Naksh went to Shankar's father, Swami and said about the proposal and his son's rejection. Swami wondered and at the same time shocked. He knows Naksh well. If this marriage never happens, then Naksh will not let his son to lead a happy life. His son needs a good wife. He remembered Naksh's father's comment on goodness of Gauri. So Swami conveyed his happiness on the proposal. He know his son will obey him. Thus they fixed marriage of Gauri and Shankar.
...

Shankar shocked on Swami's decision. " Why dont you reveal my identity to Naksh, pa? He is trying to bribe me which I will not allow. All creates problems in future." Swami said "You are my son. my own. I know reality is not that. I know Naksh once tried to kill you,my son. I dont the reason of his act. I saw his cruel act with my eyes. I rescued you and love you as my own son. You came to me as my inspiration to live, from the same river where my wife and son drowned once. You are my son. But you are Dev,who belong to Naksh family. you must be the one of them." He informed his anxieties on what Naksh do if he wouldnt accept the proposal. He also showed his faith in Shankar's courage to protest him. But Swami want him a peaceful life as his own son Shankar. He requested to accept this proposal.

As an obedient son, Shankar agreed.

Gauri forgot herself in the joy while Shankar in meditation anxious about the aftereffects of this marriage.





Edited by DhwaniNair - 10 years ago
AsNoone thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#10
wonderful Dhwani...reminds a little of IOM...
res for detailed comments.

Related Topics

Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: sarveshjoshi42

8 years ago

Rivanya and Raina ff - Love me like you do

Ritik Mehra : Business Tycoon and Elder brother of Raghav Shivanya Kapoor : Doctor and Elder Sister of Naina and love interest of Ritik

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: sarveshjoshi42

8 years ago

Rivanya,Ishveer,Raina,Ragsan and Vikresha ff - My love is only for u

Let's me introduced the Characters Ritik Raheja (Arjun Bijlani) : A very rich business tycoon and elder brother of Ranveer and Ragini Ranveer

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".