Deep Thoughts:My Writing Index..New OS link PG-41 - Page 16

Sorry di for commenting so late.I need some time to comment on this marvellous work of yours..:D
The way u penned down this os from swayam's eyes was really beautifull.I felt like I was watching this whole scene in front of my eyes.
It was a perfect mixture of romance and eternal love.
Their marriage:One of the best day of their lives.When they become one forever.The vows which they take at that time they fullfilled it n loved each other till their last breath n after it too..:)The magical kiss their official kiss which symbolize that they r meant to be together.Two different souls become one for forever.
Their first confession:where they confessed each other that they want to be with each other forever.Two young ones begin their relationship,start a new chapter of their lives.
Love after wedding:Naughty swayam who never fail to make her feel special.
Then their relationship take a new level.
Their sign of love was taking breath inside her.The feeling of parenthood increased their happiness which complete them n complete their lives..:)
The sweet moments which they leave with their children.A perfect life which anyone would wish for..
Ending was amazing.
"Death can not do us apart" true they live for each other they die with each other.
Two souls madly in love with each other lied in each other arms. will remain in each others embrace forever.
The way u penned each scenes was really beautifull
Loved it

i read this one before ...but never commented...anyway thanks for d pm...it was lovely ...thought so then...think so now

Beautiful OS. Loved this side of Swayam and not to forget perfect ending for perfect Os. I specifically loved the ending part.

Keep it up.

Love

Sonu

Hi!!! My Li'l Angel... Lots of Love from ur Dii...❤️

Its Dedicated to My partner (Nehal)..Megha Di...& Afshan Di...

Thanx for showering so much Love on me...❤️ It's my pleasure to be one among ur loved ones... I would love to thank U from the depth of my heart...😊

Now coming to ur post... My views on ur post r in golden color and the black color is the extract from ur post which effected me very much...

Awesome title...👏 Perfectly reflects the theme of ur story...

The way U portray Swayam's views are soulful... Any lover could easily connect to it... The way U define his opinion about Sharon is out of this world... so emotional yet lovable... so simple yet special... so soft yet cheesy...

...to make sure if it's perfect...after all She was the epitome of perfection...he wanted everything to be just PERFECT ...

Just the Sharon way...😉 The way Swayam always cares about Sharon, keeps me falling in love with him again and again...😳 U defined even the tiniest part of PERFECTION with great care...

...with white orchids in her hand...

Thank U so very much for including White orchids... Love U a lot for this part...❤️❤️❤️ Muuaaahhh...

...THOSE EYES...the most beautiful pair of green eyes ...the most amazing pair of eyes in the whole world ..in which you can see her heart ...her soul...which is pure...like dew drops...divine...like prayers...innocent like blossoming buds... the veil on her beautiful face was trying to hide her beautiful big greenish orbs...as if it was trying to save people from getting intoxicated due to those eyes...her eyes full of love...they were his personal brand of alcohol...

...and the best feature of his face...his personality...his soul piercing dark chocolate brown eyes...they always reminded her of deep oceans...as if they had thousands of emotions hidden in them...she was drowning in those dark brown oceans...she could see the happiness in his eyes..they were shining like stars...her morning stars..which will show her path in any darkness...

The most important feature of a human face is his/her eyes... and the way U spelled ur magic on me was with these 2 paras which clearly described SwaRon eyes... Sharon having perfect pair of green orbs and Swayam having pair of dark chocolate brown orbs... (Loved the way U included ur nick name in this...😉 I mean DEEP OCEANS...oops... just kidding😛) Jokes apart... Many fail to define pair of eyes in such depth as U have done perfect justice to them...👏

...it symbolized the transition in her life...

The most important transition a girl/boy has to undergo in her/his life... No woman or man could be complete without this transition in their life... This transition is defined as marriage... This transition is bound to no caste... It is followed by each and every person born on this earth...

I am grateful to almighty for finally making me stand here... in front of the girl of my dreams...the love of my life...the angel from heaven who came to earth just for me...I promise to cherish and respect you, to care and protect you, to comfort and encourage you, and stay with you, for all eternity...till death do us apart ..

The wedding vows were really amazing...👏 Never assumed it could be so heart touching...❤️

A beautiful girl in a white dress...was pouring out her hidden emotions..a guy...he still loves her like his princess...

This part brought back all the glimpses of that particular scene which was actually aired on D3... (I was continuously smiling on the line BUT BLOODY HELL HOTA HI NAHI... just imagining Swayam repeating those lines... Awww...)

No...Sharon Raiprakash ..correction..Sharon Swayam Shakhwat ..can't loose any argument...

The DIVA SHARON was clearly reflecting in these lines...😉

Will you love me ...even when I will get fat..when my belly will increase in size...and my feet will get swollen...I will love you when your belly will increase in size...i will caress and kiss it every moment as you will be carrying our sign of love..our DREAM inside you...i will fulfill all your wishes ...with a smile ...after all your wish is my command...

The way Sharon revealed the best news of their life to Swayam was amazing...😊

Her fears, her insecurities were well handled by Swayam... Hope this is not a dream and atleast one such couple existed in this world, whom I could adore like SwaRon... Aww My Li'l Angel U r making me crazy for Swayam in this OS...☺️ Somebody bring me back to earth from SwaRon dreamland...😵

... dried out tears started flowing from her eyes again..but this time they were tears of joy...the joy of motherhood..tears of hope..hope of a new dawn in their lives...

MOTHERHOOD which defines woman... No woman is complete until she passes through this wonderful phase in her life...Have no words to define it actually as U do it better than me...👏👏👏

He looked at Sharon's face...her angelic face was glowing with the pride of being a mother...a smile crept on his face..he kept the camera on automatic mode and rushed towards them...he took both his angels in his embrace ..and the moment was captured forever ...three smiling faces...two hearts which beat for each other ..and the third one was the rhythm of their heart beats...

The little aspects which U cover in ur stories relate each reader to the real world...😊 Though this para was simple to understand it had its depth which explained the love of parents for their child..👏👏👏

Pehla nasha..pehla khumar...

Even after so many years of their blissful life Swayam maintained the same caller tune for Sharon... This song has great memories in SwaRon's life... Such a lovable feeling...❤️ I had tears in my eyes just when I felt the immense love Swayam has for Sharon even after so many years of their marriage...😭😭

...time had left its ruthless signs on them...but few things remained same..their un-dying love for each other...a pair of deep eyes which reflected their feelings..as if their weary eyes were trying to absorb their images ..they were trying keep the image of their beloved safe ...inside their hearts...

This para was most effective... I could not stop myself from going through it again and again... U expressed such a deep thought with such simplicity yet kept its essence alive...

Our love is strong enough to challenge the destiny...

"Who are we to separate them ..when even the destiny lost in front of their love..."

Two souls stood far away from the crowd ...their fingers intertwined with each other ...they had won this togetherness after a battle with destiny..

She kept her head on his shoulder ...he encircled his hand around her waist...

So together forever?...she questioned..

Together Forever...Forever ...even death can't make us apart...

He placed his lips on her forehead...and took her into his embrace...it was home coming for her...

Two souls drowned in the ocean of love...remained in each others embrace ...for eternity ...

At last Swayam fought with destiny for his love and won the battle... Even destiny could not keep them apart... These lines made me literally sob😭😭😭 cause somewhere I felt that death may separate them once and for all but destiny had some great plans in store for them... Hence they leaved together forever...

After all this my love, my heart is full of emotions...😭😃❤️ Can't express my feeling through words to U... Thanx for such a beautiful OS... U portrayed complete journey of SwaRon from Sharon's confrontation to their wedding, next their romantic sessions, then their best phase of life PARENTHOOD, then their complete family, till they became old, last but not the least till death and even after that... While going through all this phases of SwaRon life, not at a single instance did U loose the focus on their LOVE... Thanx, thanx a lot for honoring me with such a great work to go through...😳

Lots and lots and lots of ❤️❤️❤️... Infinite... hugs🤗 and kisses... Muuaaahhh...

But wait here's my gift for My Li'l Angel...

Dedicating this poem to MY LI'L ANGEL DEEPIKA...

Just like a rose,

So precious and rare,

Is the forever friendship,

The two of US share!

Planted with kindness,

It's warmed by the sun,

Of caring and sharing,

Laughter and fun!

It's grounded in trust,

And nurtured by LOVE,

With a sprinkling of grace,

From GOD up above!

Tears of sadness,

And joy, like dew,

Renew this friendship,

I share with U!

A blessing of beauty,

Unsurpassed,

Our friendship's a flower,

That will always last!

Just like a rose,

So precious and rare,

Is the forever friendship,

The two of US share!!!

And wait there is one more thing...

And edit of SwaRon/Tanha... Hope U like it...😊

Love U my Li'l Angel...❤️ Muaaahhh...

Till Death Do Us Apart:

The entire journey of Swayam and Sharon through life. At first, I thought Swayam was walking down their memory lanes after Sharon's death, given the impression the title of this OS gave me. But I am glad you wrote it this way, even death couldn't separate them.

I really loved how Swayam and Sharon were admiring each other on their wedding day. You have so marvelously penned it down. Only they can adore each other the they were, and your words were just perfect.

Their little romantic moment in their bedroom, Sharon's worries that Swayam won't love her post her pregnancy, Swayam's assurances that he will love her no matter what because she possesses a beautiful heart, their small family moment with two beautiful children. All beautifully done.

And the hospital scene. Sharon didn't want to leave Swayam behind but had come in terms with their fate. But Swayam was not willing to let her go. Finally, they challenged their destinies and embraced death together and their souls are together as well.

I can read this story again and again, if only I could read through my tears. And thank you for not dividing it in parts. This is one of those stories one should read in one go.

Phew, this was quite long comment considering how numb i went after i read this. Trust me I was not even able to form one coherent sentence. But all these words have not been successful in conveying what i truly felt. Sometimes even words fail us.

Hats off to you for writing this, and keep writing.

hey deeps...the most unpredictable guest appearance is here today and read till death do us part...first of all congratulation you have 82 likes on board which means it is liked by readers very much and so happy to see that...

Now talking about os it was just superb fantabulous and out of the world...in short its something that touches you instantly when you are reading it...It was a story like anyother couple but yet it was different because it had that never ending love of swaron...i really am left with no words...and the comments you have got on this are humongus and state everything that i wanted to say so i am altering my ways now...os is just too much adorable where you have described whole circle of life and how never ending love of their's stays after they left the world...its a share delight to read this work...

You know the journey you described keeping SwaRon as object is something every person wishes to have...the simple journey of life with lots of memorable events thats what this os is about...and you are one such beautiful writer that you made whole thing so beautiful and captivating that every line was a clean visual by itself...trust me if i can make it visible i will show you how beautiful it looks when you imagine whatever you have written...you are superb writer you rock big time...

Your os started at an interesting note where swayam was reliving his moments he spent with sharon...and what was more amusing was that you started with marriage which you made it look heavinly and delite for reader...

Then came their romance part which was really nicely put up...all the cute moments were shown too beautifully and i am still adoring that...

then sharon pregenancy revealing chapter was just readers 's delite. ir was cute amuzing and yet full of romance...

Then kids came and life changed for them...the baby steps first time and sharon's respone are very real and then the hapiness of child's first step is totally very real...

then finaly age old swayam romancing his wife opposite their children and fun was just out of the world... it was totally amusing yet very beautiful...

and finally the part came which made me cry their last convo and all sitation was superb...the love was evitable evry where...and then promises they rememberd were totally romantic yet high on emotions...and they left the world together and even made god accept them as 1 soul...

and finally what Rey said is right even death couldn't do thwm apart...and the tittle was ampt for the story...it had everything for every one...

Thank you so much for giving us such beautiful os...thanks for pm and do write many more

with love

pratik

Sorry for commenting late :(
*Sigh* wht an amazing Os...
U made me cry By the End Of It *Sob* but kya Os tha... Di Loved It... I dun Have words to describe how beautiful it was... Love Love Loved it... :*
Love You Di...
Ur Kiddo :)