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Destiny_015

@Destiny_015

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#171

Ye Khalish Jo Hai Wo Khamakha Nahin

Khamakha was one intimate nd cherished moment of SwaRon.. Nd dis OS of urs does complete justice to evry aspect of it.. I luvd the fact that it ws thru Sharon's PoV... U tuk out the lines nd deir movements nd carved out evry emotion of Sharon amazingly... U explained beautifully how much she was trying to control her heart nd not give into him.. Bt she failed... She failed infront of him.. Nd I luvd how u explained bout Swayam here.. How mch he gets determined wen he wnts sumthng nd ultimtly gets it.. Nd how he has the upper hand here... I luvd this lyn..."Im mad for him bt not witout any reason"... D OS ended wit a perfect kiss... Beautifully penned OS di.. Luvd it.. Nd SwaRon pe hum bhi pagal h... Par Khamakha nahin...

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Destiny_015

@Destiny_015

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#172

Till Death Do Us Apart

Di dis was jst brilliant! I luvd the lyrical flow in the OS.. How dere ws a certain flow in the events.. Swayam ws reminescensing the beautiful memories dat he has shared wit Sharon.. Confession, wedding, Romantic moments, experiencing parenthood, becoming prnts all dese memories were nycly brought out wit great emotions.. I luvd the wedding vows... A wondeful OS di...

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Destiny_015

@Destiny_015

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#173

Painting Mischief

Deeps di I alrdy tld u bout my romance bhuka syndrome..:P Nd dis OS fulfilled my starvation... I rly havnt read romantic OS in a long tym... So thnk u so so much for cuming up wit dis.. :p cuming to the OS.. It ws smoking hot nd adorable... The painting prt ws nyc nd agar kabhi Swayam Sharon ko paint kare bhi den Sharon wl do the sme.. Nd hu sits wit a paintbrush on a romantic holiday...:p nd den Sharon ka gussa hona nd swayam ka manana... Dis woman even if she tries hard cnt resist him.. Poor her.. Swayam h hi aisa...:p Dopplegangers wre a fun addition to the OS.. endin ws swt.. Nd wo painting bechara unfinished hi reh gaya..:p Lovely OS... loved it...:D

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Lubna

@8JSmileyFace8J

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#174

OH MY GOD!!!!that was an absolutely SEXY OS!!!seriously first sharon was seducing swayam then it was the other way around!!!oh my god and poor sharon couldn't even resist her oh-so-sexy husband!!!really great job i really luved how you ended the OS!!

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User123

@UserM123

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#175

Hey Di. 🤗
Aah!! It was So Damn HOT...
🤗
sharon seducing swayam, And Swayam Seducing Sharon Was Fun :P
Bechari sharon Could Not Resist His Hubby's Seduction
man, Di You are An super Duper Writer...
Read Your Work after soo Long, and was waiting for your work, but it seems the wait was worth it.
HOtness Personified In this OS.
Love It..
🤗
Love You Di.
-Kiddo

Edited by SwaRon_MiNi - 12 years ago

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sanjana shekhawat

@ky2fanfictions

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#176

amazing os..
romantic .. hayee 😳😳
loved it
whenevr u update any works ...
do pm me plzz

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Mihika

@Legilimens.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#177

Di, do I need to say anything more about this? 😆

Okay, I am editing here only... :P

Anyways, coming to the OS, I told you that day only that it is seductively romantic. 😆 😆

I loved the way Swayam was trying to concentrate on making the painting for her birthday... Aww.. her painting as a birthday gift. And Sharon was not letting him concentrate.. and then we all know what happened. 😳

Sharon's doppelganger fight was amusing, they were fighting like typical bro-sis by pulling each other's hair. But oh, not even the strongest power in the world can resist Swayam's charm.. So yeh doppelganger kya cheez hai. 😆 Even Sharon had to give herself in, eventually...

Well, romantic OS, and Sharon got what she wanted, some moments of romance and Swayam's prominent naughtiness in this process. 😛

What more do I say, I am out of words right now. ☺️

Well I liked it. 😳

Mihika. 😳

Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago