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Posted: 12 years ago
Heyya di...Firstly sorry for commenting late. I am lazy na :P

I read this OS immediately after my exams. I remember, I had cried a bit even then and I cried even today.

Gosh di, I am still numb. I don't know what to comment. A beautiful SwaRon journey.. From their marriage, to 20 days post marriage to having their babies and grown up babies to their death. Freak, how can anyone write so well???
The first part, their marriage, you depicted it so well. Both of them adoring each other, was penned beautifully. The fact that she was his perfect brand of alcohol 😆 true that :)

I promise to cherish and respect you, to care and protect you, to comfort and encourage you, and stay with you, for all eternity'..till death do us apart ..

Next, 20 days post marriage, the initial naughtiness and the masti was bound to be there. Loved the way Swayam was teasing Sharon and Sharon the blushing diva was a treat to read.
3 years post marriage, when I read the initial para, I understood that it had something to do with their kid. Swayam understood it too, quickly I guess😆 Then he kissed her belly and greeted their kid into the world aww😳
Many years post wedding - Swayam the sweetheart still had the initial enthusiasm and love. A cheesy line by the cheesy majnu was definitely like cherry on the top. On the other hand, Sharon was the one who was getting embarrassed here and was smiling sheepishly.. But still, the love was there. It had to be there. Come what may. Loved the way the kids were teasing SwaRon<3

Tanya giggled at her Dad 's cute antics and Mom's crimson red cheeks...😳

And now the part, which seriously made me cry, SwaRon's death. I don't know why I cried, but unknowingly tears made their way out of my eyes. When you mentioned about Sharon's kidney failure, I was extremely upset 😭.. The whole conversation between them was heart warming, candid and touching. I did not want any of them to die. So many decades post marriage, the love was still there, visible and completely prominent...Their eternal love, which will continue to be alive even after them. Swayam lives with her. His heart stops beating as soon as her does. I can't express the magic you have recreated in this OS of yours di.
That's what SwaRon are famous for. Intensity, passion, the love which still promises to be there despite innumerable hurdles. This line touched me,

"Who are we to separate them ..when even the destiny lost in front of their love..."

And then, they were together in paradise. Celebrating togetherness. Their love, which will never die. Come what may. They will remain together in every phase of life and even after death. *TEARS OF JOY :')* The acknowledgement that Swayam made, the fact that he refused to accept that even death cannot separate them made me smile in happiness.😳

All in all, an emotional OS. Touching, and emotional, but still beautiful.
-Mihika😊
Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Yeh wala toh maine padha tha pehle... :-P

Like a kamini i dint comment. Anyway u know i was crying wen i read dis. I mean dis one was just sooo beautiful smarty

from the start i knew she was dying. But still i was lyk who cares if i cry i wanna read.

And i luv how u described him movong arnd n rememberin everything.

Such suckers v r for tragedy..but tragedy is something dat leaves me content coz i dont believe in happy endings most of the tym.

And wen he died next to her in the bed..it was soo swayam. Reminded me of the movie the notebook. And i would hav hated it had he not died. Sadist me :-P

aur bakwaas karungi toh tu maregi muje :-P

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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey Friends ...thanx a lot for liking my work... i love reading your lovely comments..please continue commenting as they are my sole inspiration for writing ...will be waiting for ur comments and feedback(positive and negative all are welcomed)


Thank u all for liking my previous OS ...😊The response and comments u all have given for the previous OS inspired me even more..thanks a lot for the detailed feedback...its means a lot to me...i am really sorry for not responding to them individually ..its just that I don't want to put a Thank u for ur beautiful comment..due to time constraint i am not able to reply...they are the driving force behind my write ups...ur love and support😳...


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Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey Friends...Here is a new OS ...Its a bit different from my regular work...i am writing a light OS after long time..hope you will like this OS... plz bear me with the mistakes..didn't get time to proofread ...😊


Its Dedicated to Smarty(Payal)...It was her Birthday gift..😊..Happy Birthday Once Again Smarty🤗

Thanks to My Partner(Nehal) ..for her help and support...😳..Love u Partner 🤗



WARNING: THE UPDATE CONTAIN SCENES WHICH MAY NOT BE SUITABLE FOR UNDER 14. KINDLY REFRAIN YOURSELF FROM READING THIS OS IF YOU COME UNDER THIS CATEGORY.





P.S- Thanx Himani for this Awesome Siggy ..Luv u babyyy🤗😳




His deep dark brown orbs were fixed on her angelic face ...her beauty was beyond words to explain ...her glowing complexion was enhanced with the moonlight falling on her through the window ... Her face was glowing with the cool silver light on it ... and...he saw a sign of irritation on that angelic face...she tried to move from her place...



Swayam: Sharon, Sit straight don't move. You are distracting me.


Sharon just made a face at him and again sat like a statue letting out a huge sigh.


Swayam just chuckled at her cuteness and continued his work...which held his attention on a potentially romantic Saturday night.


Sharon was hell irritated, they were here on their farmhouse to spend a romantic weekend and here her hubby is busy imprinting paints on the board instead of placing love bites on her...


On the other hand Swayam was trying hard to concentrate...he was having a tough time in keeping his hands limited to the paint brushes...when they were craving to move all over her...


Concentrate Swayam...you have to finish it today itself'...u don't have much time left ...he told to himself...


He was trying hard to control his desires when a sweet voice again broke his concentration...


Baby! Are you done... We have wasted enough time on this...we can do much better things tonight...


He looked at her...and she teased him with a flying kiss...


He gulped looking at her...his eyes traveled all over her and she taking the advantage slid the strap of her dress down...which exposed her shoulder to him...


Swayam breath was stuck in his throat... he looked down at the paint brush in his hand and then at his gorgeous wife...who was already in a compromising position...


He just wanted to throw that brush and go and take that lady in front of him in his embrace ...But with great difficulty he managed to shoo his thoughts off...


Swayam: Sharon, baby plz don't move you know I have to complete this before your birthday...and it will take time to dry also... now please sit straight na baby...


He went near her and made her sit properly and put the strap of her dress back in place he was about to move his hand when Sharon held it and moved it over her bare shoulders and again slid down both her straps...


She held his hands and made him rub them all over her shoulders and neck and then placed it just above her heart...


She breathed hard which made her chest move up and sown in sync and along with it his hand also moved up and down... Swayam gulped..he had lost all his senses...he tried hard to control his desire and here she was spilling water on all his hard work...


He was lost in her and by mistake he spilled the paints he was holding in his hand on her...


Sharon: ewww! She shouted and pushed his hands aside.


He heard her loud voice which broke his chain of thoughts and looked at her who looked like a cartoon...


Oops! He means tigress...who was all set to kill her husband...


She glared at him which made him move backwards...


Swayam: baby.. It was your mistake...

Sharon: My MISTAKE...she said through clenched teeth.

Swayam: You were the one who was seducing me...so i lost control...he chuckled ...

Sharon: You...Go to hell... you were here to spend a romantic weekend with me and not your paint brushes...

Swayam: Baby...but...

Sharon: What but...

Swayam: Dare you come near me Swayam... You are not even allowed to touch me for the life time...


Now move she pushed him and started walking towards the bathroom...


He saw her leaving and he noticed the silky dress which was about to fall off from her body...


That was when her words dawned on him...


Swayam: what?? No how can I not touch her...we were here to spend a romantic weekend with each other and for that I need to...

Oh god!

Sharon wait I am coming...


Sharon went inside the bathroom in haste and forgot to lock the door...


She went and switched on the shower and was about to pull her dress down...when she felt a pair of hands encircling her waist...


She gasped at his touch...


He bended and kissed her on her nape and rested his chin on his shoulder and then again kissed her on her cheeks and moved back...


Sharon gained her composure and turned back to shout at him but the sight in front made her lose all her sense...


He had removed his shirt and was now standing with bare chest so close to her and water droplets were continuously falling on him making him look irresistible...


She closed her eyes to calm her hear which was beating at an unnatural speed...


Why the hell he has to look so irresistible when she was so hopelessly trying to be angry at him...


Before she could do anything she felt him hugging her again...


I will help you in cleaning up...he said in huskily voice sucking her earlobe..


No ways...No ways...she tried to show her Siren side...it didn't work...


You have only two options...YES or YES...take it as a punishment for disturbing me in my painting...he said..winking at her...


He didn't wait for her answer ...next moment he slid his hands in her dress and made it fall on the ground...


She thought of running away ...but a part of her knew that it won't be possible for her ...to run away from him...she was looking down at trying to think of some plans to win over her smart husband...


She looked up...and all her plannings disappeared in thin air... he turned her around and smashed his lips on her...


While kissing she felt his hands move all over her bare form...she moaned at his actions which turned him more wild...


He left after what seemed like ages...her eyes were still closed...she slowly opened her eyes to find him adoring her...


She turned a shade of deep red and turned around avoiding his gaze...


The water droplets were shamelessly hugging his chiseled body...he ran his fingers through his wet hair... he pulled her back and she landed on his chest...


A part of her was telling her to stay away from him and continue the "who is having upper hand " game...the other part of her was surrendering in front of the Greek god beside her..


Sharon 1:WTH Sharon...don't give him that love sick puppy cum seduced look...you just can let him win(Diva Sharon)

Sharon 2:OMG...OMG...Why the hell ..he has to look so mercilessly hot ..it should be a crime..he looks so out of this world..his wet hairs...the water droplets hugging his lips...i so want to taste those lips...NOW...(Majnu's Laila)

Sharon 1:Hey ...why are you confusing her...she just can't let him win...Sharon ..never looses...NEVER

Sharon2:This is not war sweety ..this is LOVE.

Soon her doppelgangers started fighting with each other...pulling each others hair..spoiling each others make up...


She looked at the cat fight between her images...and she knew what she had to do...


I thought ...u wanted to help...he heard an angelic and dangerously seductive voice...he simpered...he knew she won't be able to resist him..


Your Wish is my command ..he winked at her ...he pulled her under the shower...next moment...water droplets were unashamedly hugging her all over... he adored the mermaid in front of him...the water droplets were making her beauty even more angelic...if that was possible...


She started running her fingers on his bare torso...which were playing with his senses...those chocolate brown orbs were fixed on her angelic face..she could feel his gaze over her...as if he was touching her though his eyes...


She blushed ...to the deepest shed of red...she turned her back towards him..gosh...swayam why do you have this effect on me...i can't think straight when you are around...u work like my personal drug...when I want to be angry at you..you make me go weak on my knees...she whispered to herself...



Ahhh...meri jaan...he whispered softly in her ears..this is the time to LOVE..not to be angry..


He hugged her from back and moved his fingers on her creamy and soft skin of her waist...her heart started beating harder...as if it would jump out of her chest any time...he kissed moved her hair from her back ...he moved his hand towards her neck...up & down...her breaths became heavy with the movement of his fingers...she was loosing her senses...he planted a trail of wet kisses on her creamy back...moved toward her nape...brushed his wet lips on it ...played with her ear lobes...with his tongue...continued moving the other hand fingers on her navel...


Swayaaam...she moaned his name...


Ummm...he was too busy to reply to her...


Sorry for disturbing you in your painting...she said..with a cute smile playing on her lips...she was breathing harder with each passing moment...


He made her face him...her face was painted crimson red ...it was his effect on her...he loved that fact..


Its ok jaan...I am ready to get disturbed by you every single day..if we always end up like this...he whispered near her ear while still brushing his lips on her creamy skin...


She turned crimson red at his statement...Next moment she felt his soft lips on hers...he kissed her gently with all his love and affection...she responded to the kiss in no time...she parted her lips and gave him a better access...his tongue entered her mouth..tasted every part of it and their tongues danced in unison..to the beautiful melody of their pure love...he picked his beautiful mermaid in his arms... and walked towards their bedroom...without breaking the kiss...


They were lost in their world of love and passion...moon was peeping through the window...he was the witness of this beautiful scene...two angels...deeply in love...lost in each other...making love to each other ...two soul mates...finding solace in each other embrace...


They were moaning each others name...their voices full of passion & love were creating a beautiful melody along with the wind-charm hanging near the window...


The touch of their bare forms were sending shivers down their body...she closed her eyes and allowed him to kiss her all over her...his touch made her got lost in her alternate universe...with HIM...finally their dream weekend had begun...


The moon left them alone ...trying to give the madly in love couple some privacy...his eyes fall on the incomplete painting..he sighed ...he knew...the poor thing will never get their attention back...


❤️❤️❤️



hey guys how was it? good ...bad ...very bad..boring ... plzzz do comment ... i will wait for your comments and feedback ...

Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

partner..my angels...my Dis 😳


Surbhi 😊

You are so good at writing especially when it comes to SwaRon and more specially when you voice out their feelings!

DD *Pranaam*
Itna gazab ka likha aapne?? Matlab itna hot aur sexy?? Itnaaa????
Mai toh shuruaat mei hi kaayal ho gyi...Sharon jaisi ladki har pati ko mile :D:D
Aur swayam jaisa pati toh mai cheen k le hi aaungi kahin se...! *SuperBigBlush*

That part when...Sharon melted in his arms and to the top of that she said--You wanted to help me..!
And then swayam took her under the shower.
Lol Pyaar mei pagal hai dono *blush*

And aapne finally painter bana hi diya iss ladke ko...aage nikli aap cv's se ;)
But i loved it!
Their Romantic weekend Had Begun :))

Megha Dii

diiippp!!!!

tujhe to pata hai hai yeh OS padh ke meri niyat bigad gayi thi...aur kitni bigad gayi thi wo bhi pata hai... *sweat !*

himmmiii

banner is superb!!!

loved seeing painter swayu through your eyes!

bechara kitni mushkil se apne aap ko sambhal raha tha, sharon ko kadar hi nahi use self-control ki...seduce karti rahi usse... 😆😆😆

kabhi flying kissie deti hai kabhi dress girati hai... besharam ladki! 😆😆

phir bhi swayu could control himself...sant baba hai...shayad meditation ka kamaal hai 😉

the "not allowed to touch me" part was amusing...pehle to khud seduce karti hai phit bechare ko bolti hai not allowed to touch me...confused ladki! 😆

imagining swayu bare chest under the shower -- phir se niyat bigad gayi 😛
swayu giving sharon tit for tat - mazaa aagaya! ab kaise bachti sharon swayu ke charm se 😉

You have only two options...YES or YES...take it as a punishment for disturbing me in my painting...he said..winking at her...

was fab! yes or yes - acha hai punishment to milni hi thi sharon ko, but lucky hai...mann chaha punishment mili...punishment mein bhi uski chandi hogayi! 😆

the cat fight of doppelgangers was mast! so much sharon like! humesha hi confused rehti hai...usse chup chap sharon2 ko jeetne dena chahiye (swayams sharon ko)

aur under the shower moments ke liye main kuch na bolu to hi theek hai...bahut saare bacche bhi hai yaha...meri image ka kabara ho jayega 😛😆😆😆

aur uss unfinished painting ko unhein apne room mein laga lena chahiye...har waqt itne sexy holiday ki yaad dilata rahega 😉😉😉


tu to romance queen se sensuous queen bhi ban gayi!! i dont think i have enjoyed sooo much reading any other story on swaron...itni niyat to kisi aur story ne nahi bigadi...aur itna mazaa bhi nahi aaya...aur haan most importantly thanks to this os of urs i could finally write the update of Missing Life...tune mujhe galiyon se bhi bacha liya...




love you,
your di!

Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Deepa dii...🤗
First of all.. Congrats... maximum likes...👏 and hims.. awesome siggy..!😃
What should I say..about the OS..😕
OS kitna acchai.. vo toh aapko pata chal hi gaya hoga...by creamy back...
Iski applaud ki aawaj aaj tak gunjti hai grp mein..😆😆 Hai na megha dii???
Seriouslsy.. a super hot OS
Sharon is sharamless😆😆 seducing swayam...!😆😳
and then herself stopping him...😕 iski confused soul rehne ki aadat jaayegi nahi..!!
But Swayam toh hero hai... usko sab tackle karna aata hai...😆😆
Bathroom romance.. ahha,.. mazza aa gaya padhke...😳
Creamy back...😉
Anyways.. loved the OS.. in all...
And I have always said...about ur writing skills... I stand there gazing and gaping like a speechless spectator...😃
And dare u not say anything to ur works😡

Love,
Ur Riii

Edited by Ria_SwaRon - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Amazing OS 😊
Loved it
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Posted: 12 years ago
got an os from ur side after eternity !!
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Posted: 12 years ago
this is amazing ..totally love it 😳
Soon her doppelgangers started fighting with each other...pulling each others hair..spoiling each others make up...

this part made me go 🤣
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Amazingly beautiful...
I luved reading it 😊

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