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Lassi_TanHa

@Lassi_TanHa

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#141

Beautiful os..
Deir journey of love together from d marriage to death.. beautifully penned down
loved it..

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Anu_TanHa

@Anu_TanHa

Stunner

Posted: 12 years ago

#142

Wow Wonderful os lovely & beautifully written👏

A very beautiful journey of Swaron.

It was very emotional how swayam was remembering all their moment spend together & re-cherishing them.

And in the end even Death fails to separate them from being Swaron.

Their immortal love wins over the Death.

Please keep writing more

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Simren

@DanCing_DiVa_SK

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#143

Deepu Diii 🤗
Dii i really don't know from where to start, ok firstly emotional yet amazing OS, I literally cried by the end of this update, Loved the beautiful thought behind this OS "Even death can not tear them apart"

It started with their wedding, The promises they made to rejoice in joy and weep in sorrow, to care and protect, to comfort and to encourage to stay with each other for all eternity, til death do them apart, And then their first kiss after marriage was heavenly, the whole church wedding ceremony was beautifully penned down

Then the next part took me back to the day when Sharon confessed her feelings and gave their equation a hope, that made me miss Tanha, It reflected all the Tanha memories back, After Sharon trying to wake Swayam up and his cute tricks to make Sharon blush, that was extremely cutee, blushy blushy Sharon is always a treat to read

The day Sharon told her that their sign of love is growing within her and the way she asked such innocent question the response Swayam gave her to that was incredible

I will love you when your belly will increase in size...i will caress and kiss it every moment as you will be carrying our sign of love..our DREAM inside you...i will fulfill all your wishes '.with a smile ...after all your wish is my command

And then the most beautifull moment of their lives when Tanya took her first steps, that's one of the most cherished moment ever, and then their cutee little family, Tanay teasing Swaron, and then their cutee eyelock, just loved the fact that their love is so eternal

At the end it really brought tears in my eyes, Swaron as old couple and Sharon lying on her death bed, Their emotional yet sweet convo, was heart touching and then Swayam died along with Sharon loved the way you described it

Two souls madly in love with each other '.in each others embrace...both their bodies were cold..lifeless ...still the warmth of their love was prevailing in the arena...

At the end loved Rey's comment on seeing Swaron died in each other's embrace, that was simply mind blowing "Who are we to separate them ..when even the destiny lost in front of their love..."

Two souls stood far away from the crowd ...their fingers intertwined with each other ...they had won this togetherness after a battle with destiny..

She kept her head on his shoulder ...he encircled his hand around her waist...

So together forever?...she questioned..

Together Forever...Forever ...even death can't make us apart...

He placed his lips on her forehead...and took her into his embrace...it was home coming for her...

Two souls drowned in the ocean of love...remained in each others embrace ...for eternity ...

This scene no comments m short of words just gonna say even destiny failed infront of their love, death could not tear them apart, these two souls are meant for each other for eternity

Awesome OS dii, yeh comment bhi chota padh gaya aapke iss brilliant OS ke samne but kya karu m very bad in expressing my feelings and your work just makes me fall short of words, Outstanding OS...Love you...muaahhhzz ❤️

Edited by sweetsimi123 - 12 years ago

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GoldenLuna

@GoldenLuna

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#144

amazing...

i guess this was 1st swaron os after reading which i m hvng goosebumps..loved it alot...

thanks for pm...

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meetu chaudhary

@mits40

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#145

that ws simply awesome...
I literally cried after reading d whole update...:)

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Divya

@Winter_Falls

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#146

awesome.. 😃 i really loved it.. 😊

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VAISHNAVI MURALI

@-vaishnavimural

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#147

loved d update...
deep ur mindblowing to emote d emotions in right place...
had tears til d last i was not able to control..
usually i control it but this time it didnt stop...
i had hard time to hide it from my mom who was near me...
i ve shed tears for few ff/os/ss but deetha's diva n ur this update r d 1 for which i can control them..
u played brilliantly wit d words...
hats of to u dear...
coming to d os its fab...
superb portrayal of love togetherness fulfillment of life u ve shown...
loved how u showed swayam imagining past wen he enters each of d room thiniking abt their love that was fab...
but d last part where swayam says not even death can do us apart was fantastic...
even loved s part where rey said who r v to separate them wen they proved even destiny cant separate them...
u r great writer...
love u for d most beautiful update dear

waiting for more such works dear.. til then

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prateek

@prateek.007

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#148

Well done deepika..👏.. after reading this,u are my one of the favorite writer at IF..i just loved it.. first of all, the name "till death do us apart"..is just wow..i like it so so much becoz it is the short definition of u'r OS.. and it truly justified the main theme..

firstly the marriage scene..well explained by u..i like all the beautifull lines..like..

""I love you from the day I know you..loving you natural to me just like inhaling life...your mind stirs my soul to new height ...your faith gives me strength...your touch delights me...without your love..i am incomplete...""

""Between us we found the echo of LOVE...love..that has filled the universe since the dawn of creation...that LOVE will enlighten our lives...my heart will continue loving you till my last breath...""

""In riches and in poverty ...in jubilation and in despair..in sickness and in health...despite of our flaws..I will share my life with you...""

then,their magical first kiss.."what a great explanation"..

After that..all the small stanzas of their life including Swaron's bedroom masti,their kiss, sharon pregnant,their first child's first footstep,their dining table love and teasing by tanya..all scenes was just heavenly perfect and well explained...

and at last,hospital scene..which i like most... totally emotional..this lines are enough to cry each and every reader..

""They saw ..two souls madly in love with each other ….in each others embrace...both their bodies were cold..lifeless ...still the warmth of their love was prevailing in the arena..""

and well said by rey..and (u)..

""Who are we to separate them ..when even the destiny lost in front of their love...""

So,in total i just loved it..but the end part was really sad which i love most.. The characters..."swaron" a heavenly soulmates,symbol of true love...is like "sone pe shuhaga"..

i really enjoyed,and cried after reading this..For me..its a small trailor of swaron's life..(from start to end)...last,thanx a lot for pm and for this emotional swaron dreamland..i liked it so so much...

keep updating and pm me...

sorry,its long post...

prateek..

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Asma

@-FrozenRain-

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#149

Deeps I'm really sorry for the short comment..
Nut I loved this..
Its superb..
the flow made me feel superb <3

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Satnam

@Satluvsd3

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#150

di🤗WOW what an OS!!!!!!!this was by far your BEST BEST OS!!!!❤️❤️i loved the way you penned it.though it was long but in the end i came to know it was meant to be long,and in one go!😳you describe so well di,with great emotions!!..gosh,i was grinning,smiling,blushing and aww-ing!😳 😆
gosh...with memories stepping one by one ...each one had a feeling of love and happiness in them and truly a memory!you wrote the best ones to keep us happy and SwaRon-ish!!😳
the 1st memory telling about their marriage!😳beautiful,how you described they getting lost in each others eyes,cherishing their moment that their dream's coming true!then they take their vows,each vow was really unique and made me 😃 😳
I am grateful to almighty for finally making me stand here ..in front of the girl of my dreams..the love of my life...the angel from heaven who came to earth just for me..

I am grateful to the Creator that LOVE found me ... wrapped me in its arms ...and it is making me complete today...
the 2nd ...the confession!you kept it same but still after months,i had those scenes coming one by one in front of me as i read the whole piece!😳so i enjoyed it more...totally nostalgia

I love you Sharon...I really do...I can't stop loving you even if I want to ...its not that i didn't try ...i tried ...not to love you ... but bloodyhell hota hi nehi ...my heart always takes your side ...he said...caressing her cheeks...wiping her tears...
the 3rd...😆 a naughty naught one,i enjoyed it too
the 4th...😲 for a sec then a huge 😃
awwwh i loved the way she let out the truth of their baby!😳 very unique coz i wasnt expecting that...
i will caress and kiss it every moment as you will be carrying our sign of love..our DREAM inside you...i will fulfill all your wishes '.with a smile ...after all your wish is my command...❤️
the 5th...was really super cute...😳
and the moment was captured forever ...three smiling faces...two hearts which beat for each other ..and the third one was the rhythm of their heart beats...❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
the 6th...ohh!!loved when his son says continue your eye-lock after the dinner!!😆😆
and then 7th,how the truth came out😲 my eyes were filled with tears wanting to pour down...but my emotions got raised very high..
Death can not do us apart..I promise you...
and on this line
those tears came rushing down😭...awwh diii..tussi gr8 ho ji!😳when i read this...line was the best!!!!!
"Who are we to separate them ..when even the destiny lost in front of their love..."
and with a perfect line to end!really awesome work dii am short of words to express what i felt reading this 1!😳
please ...keep writing!!!!!😳

Edited by Satluvsd3 - 12 years ago