A Lost Battle -SwaRon OS- Part 2 updated. - Page 4

Originally posted by: sravani.gunturi

Are you not gonna continue ?? They won't be together :O :(

Originally posted by: meevee

Sudha, u already know what I feel abt this...so glad u posted it & thanx for the kind words😊

Luvd ur Swayam in this one...he was there for Sharon all the way...as a friend, as a luver, understanding her dilemma and her outburst, doing his part of trying to convince her but finally letting her take her decision and not imposing on it...

It is enormous when u lose sumone precious in life and when that happens when ur too young, it does leave a scar sumwhere deep...

It felt real to realise Sharon's fear of losing another luvd one, and also her decision to go ahead with the other option for the sake of those who luvd her, her family...but yes, as u said, this was a battle she wuld have won if she had made her mind to go for it... do write more ... u do it well😃

Originally posted by: Madhura..

Beautifully written, Sudha!!

Detailed reply later!!

Originally posted by: marauder

You know we should get you gift not the other ways around. 😊 . This OS was nothing less than an awesome gift. This OS certainly didn't look like your first one. You definitely should write more.Loved the way in which Sharon's and Swayam's friendship , then mutual attraction and then growing closeness you have potrayed. But the best part was ending - subtle yet imapctfull.
You know I always loved a movie or any story in which story progresses in two time frames. And kudos to you have made it happen in your OS superbly. The ending is a satisafctory and concluding one albeit sad but it would be awesome if u continue it.
And yeah looking for more of ur works.

Originally posted by: ---Priya---

sudha 🤗

this was brilliant...

different end to a fairy tale... Sharon left to US even after she knew she would have won this game 😔

i really liked swayam in here.. the perfect frnd & lover...

he last scene was really heart-wrenching... they both didnt want to go away frm each other...

awesome writing... please do write more FF/SS/OS 😳

Originally posted by: lyfisbeautiful

Sudha this was really nice... n i loved the fact dat it was one looong OS!!!:) :) nothing makes me happier than long SwaRon oneshots!! love u for this!! Thr is something very simple about the way u write n i loved how we got the entire story in sharon's narrative. Her thots involved both the present and snatches of flashback but everything was so clear right from the beginning.. Thr interactions were so sweet and genuine that i really dint mind the end.. and dats nt me.. u knw how much i love happy endings.. bt absolutely no complains with this one.. Its wierd how this OS has an open end to it n yet it seems so complete in itself...! Bt obviously i'l love it if u cntinue.. if nt i'l sure b coming bk to read dis again..

U shud definitely write more..

Originally posted by: manasie

Why did u end it one a sad note... Anyways it was amazing... Ok i just loved your os you could have made it a ss instead pretty long one must say...

Originally posted by: tanukaswaron

this was freaking amazing sudha !!👏

it didnt feel to be ur first time at writing , this os was beautiful and fantastically written 😃

it was totally heart wrenching and i had tears after reading the end . sharon still left for US knowing the fact that swayam truly loved her.💔

i loved how u portrayed swayam , the perfect friend and the true lover who did let out his feelings but didnot impose them on sharon and let her take her own decisions 😊

u are awesome at writing so plz do write more ...

pm me next time.

Originally posted by: sukanyaa

nyc one

Originally posted by: Rutu

hey it was beautiful...and really it didnt look like u wrote it for 1st time...

if any plans of continuing pls pm me