A Lost Battle -SwaRon OS- Part 2 updated.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: sravani.gunturi
Are you not gonna continue ?? They won't be together :O :(

Sorry if you found the ending sad, but i guess that was apt @ the time. About continuing i can't say anything now. 😉

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: meevee
Sudha, u already know what I feel abt this...so glad u posted it & thanx for the kind words😊

Luvd ur Swayam in this one...he was there for Sharon all the way...as a friend, as a luver, understanding her dilemma and her outburst, doing his part of trying to convince her but finally letting her take her decision and not imposing on it...

It is enormous when u lose sumone precious in life and when that happens when ur too young, it does leave a scar sumwhere deep...

It felt real to realise Sharon's fear of losing another luvd one, and also her decision to go ahead with the other option for the sake of those who luvd her, her family...but yes, as u said, this was a battle she wuld have won if she had made her mind to go for it... do write more ... u do it well😃

I can't tell you how much I love you for making me do this. 🤗

Thank you so much for liking my work. Sometimes life gets tough on you and you need to take tougher decisions of moving away from someone, even though you know how miserable life would be away that special someone. You will be the first person to read if i decide to continue.😊

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Snowey

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: Madhura..
Beautifully written, Sudha!!

Detailed reply later!!

Thanks Madhura,

will wait for your detailed comments.

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Snowey

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Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: marauder
You know we should get you gift not the other ways around. 😊 . This OS was nothing less than an awesome gift. This OS certainly didn't look like your first one. You definitely should write more.Loved the way in which Sharon's and Swayam's friendship , then mutual attraction and then growing closeness you have potrayed. But the best part was ending - subtle yet imapctfull.
You know I always loved a movie or any story in which story progresses in two time frames. And kudos to you have made it happen in your OS superbly. The ending is a satisafctory and concluding one albeit sad but it would be awesome if u continue it.
And yeah looking for more of ur works.

Your comments were no less than a awesome gift Shishir 😊

Thanks for liking it. I wasn't sure about if readers would appreciate the frequent past and present drive, i tried my best to keep the transition smooth, and very happy that you liked the two timed frames i was going for. I am giving it some serious thoughts to continue, but may not be before the next weekend. Sure will try writing more.

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Snowey

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: ---Priya---
sudha 🤗
this was brilliant...
different end to a fairy tale... Sharon left to US even after she knew she would have won this game 😔

i really liked swayam in here.. the perfect frnd & lover...
he last scene was really heart-wrenching... they both didnt want to go away frm each other...

awesome writing... please do write more FF/SS/OS 😳

Mikka Nandri for liking my work Priya 🤗

Yeah the Swayam is just perfect 😊 Will sure try writing more, and ungalku nichiamaga a PM panre. 😊

P.S - ihope u got what i said. 😉

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: lyfisbeautiful
Sudha this was really nice... n i loved the fact dat it was one looong OS!!!:) :) nothing makes me happier than long SwaRon oneshots!! love u for this!! Thr is something very simple about the way u write n i loved how we got the entire story in sharon's narrative. Her thots involved both the present and snatches of flashback but everything was so clear right from the beginning.. Thr interactions were so sweet and genuine that i really dint mind the end.. and dats nt me.. u knw how much i love happy endings.. bt absolutely no complains with this one.. Its wierd how this OS has an open end to it n yet it seems so complete in itself...! Bt obviously i'l love it if u cntinue.. if nt i'l sure b coming bk to read dis again..
U shud definitely write more..

Shalini you were way to kind on me.

I don't see i deserve this much appreciation. I was worried that i will leave the readers confused with the frequent past and present drive, glad to know that it was pleasant and smooth enough and made a good read.

I know, i am just like you a sucker for fairytale ending, thats what surprised me, i write something for the first time and can't think of a happy ending for it. 😕

But the ending felt apt to me @ the moment. Will sure consider continuing. 😊

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Posted: 13 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: manasie
Why did u end it one a sad note... Anyways it was amazing... Ok i just loved your os you could have made it a ss instead pretty long one must say...

Thanks for liking it. I know it ends on a sad note, but that's what life is about, sometimes happiness and sometimes sad moments. I thought of posting in two parts but as a reader myself i know how much i'd like to read the whole thing in one shot.

Edited by Sudha-SK - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: tanukaswaron
this was freaking amazing sudha !!👏
it didnt feel to be ur first time at writing , this os was beautiful and fantastically written 😃
it was totally heart wrenching and i had tears after reading the end . sharon still left for US knowing the fact that swayam truly loved her.💔
i loved how u portrayed swayam , the perfect friend and the true lover who did let out his feelings but didnot impose them on sharon and let her take her own decisions 😊
u are awesome at writing so plz do write more ...
pm me next time.

Thank you so much for liking it.😊

Swayam never wanted to impose his feelings on Sharon, as a matter of fact he never confessed his true feelings with Sharon. To him her comfort was always the no. 1 priority.

Will try writing more and sure will PM you.