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moonlight99

@moonlight99

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Posted: 13 years ago

#41

This was such a pleasure to read! Such a different concept and so nicely written! I loved it and for some reason I can see this happening in the show if only the production was willing to take more chances.

Loved the story!

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littlemoi

@littlemoi

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+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#42

Great OS!

Thanks for the pm!

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--drama_queen--

@--drama_queen--

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+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#43

nice OS nayika 👏

i truly loved i t😃

continue soon..

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purplekid

@purplekid

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#44

That was different! I want to read more PaYash Os's now...

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Ritika

@WiseGirl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#45

This is really different. Not that that's a bad thing. I really liked it because it portrays the visible change that we've seen in Akash these days. He isn't the sweet guy we used to see before he and Payal got married, but is just trying to be someone that he is not. And it doesn't seem like he and Payal are even trying to talk to each other about their problems, and instead talk about them to others; Payal to Buaji and Akash to Aman, I suppose. This really feels like it could be something that could happen in their futures with the way that their relationship is going so far.

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Sonia

@sonia_92

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+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#46

oh so beautiful! absolutely beautiful! a heartfelt piece, a beautiful piece of writing! so simple and just so beautiful

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anumber1

@anumber1

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Posted: 13 years ago

#47

O god another sad one. Beautifully written (I don't mean to offend. It was really well done) but all the updates I've read today from the FF writers I follow have all been sad. Not your fault of course. I liked how it was from Payal's point of view. I don't see to many of those. So yeah, I think I'm gonna curl up into a corner a cry.

Edited by anumber1 - 13 years ago

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Rabba-Ve-Delena

@Rabba-Ve-Delena

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+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#48

So this is the depth Akash and Payal lack!
Brilliantly written.

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Sona

@sparikh

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#49

Brilliant OS...so true to characters!

-Sona

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Aishwarya

@muffins2waffles

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#50

Oh my gosh, excellent job!

I like how you gave Payal much more of a character. It was so consistent and interesting! It actually almost made me cry, esp the ending. Loved it to the core, amazing! <3

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