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nature-lover

@nature-lover

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

Nice and different and thanks for the PM

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667300

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: ms_1991
i actually loved the last line of the story..but otherwise..yu tried sumn different..and its quite decent story..since akash has always been a goodie goodie charectar kinda stuff to think him as negative..but tht has nthn to do vt yur story..great work

Interesting that you thought of Akash as negative here when he really doesn't do anything except sort of neglect Payal which he's actually doing in the show right now so I thought it was in character. I had assumed everyone would view Payal as the negative one and completely out of character.

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priyah_reddy

@priyah_reddy

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

Loved the OS and loved whatever was going on between Aakash and Payal 😊

Brilliant as always !!!

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dumas

@dumas

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+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#34

intense poor payal she felt lonely and that guy used it against her to get her in to bed and and she accepted his decision maybe because she really did not want to be in the marriage also glad she decide to fight using khushi and asr as heroes loved the update thanks for the pm

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Natasha

@drunkiiebabe

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

DIFFERENT N NICE OS LOVED IT

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@boyznaka

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Brilliant writing there. I loved how you stayed true to Akash's character, and I really liked the swift flow of the story. Poor, poor Payal. :(

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Sunara

@princessunara

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Posted: 13 years ago

#37

it was weird! i just couldn't stop even when i realized that it wasn't exactly on ArHi! i have been able to press backspace in most previous occasions if it had seemed to have nothing about ArHi!
but this kind of drew me in completely! intriguing and u know it is like looking outside a candy shop at an unreachable candy! u get to see, but not to have..
amazingly written!

Edited by princessunara - 13 years ago