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iram4eva

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Posted: 16 years ago

#21

great one shot neetz

keep em cuming

iram

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Simone

@-simi-

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Posted: 16 years ago

#22

sowiee last night i reserved that comment and as i was reading the part, i didnt realize that my laptop isnt plugged in and the battery is about to die.. so yea i read a couple paragraphs and the battery died 🤢 and it was too late night for me to plug it in and restart my lappy....

so enough of the ranting, back to the part..

it was definitely worth the wait 😛 its beautiful! i have said this before but i'll say it again.. that you are very good at writing one-shots and leaving most of the before and after part to the reader's imagination! in this case, we dont even know the name of the man who left her until the end, and what happened between them that has made the protagonist so emotionless ... but the way u show the lack of her emotions just like a robot really gives the reader an idea that whatever happened was really bad..

then the way you show ridhima being in self denial, but telling herself that she's not.. the way her friend tells her to let go and later when she tells herself that she has let go.. but really she hasnt because she wouldnt be counting days and thinking about how she has become a robot..

then the part when she sees him.. and the way her 'wall' starts to crumble as he starts talking.. i really liked how u used the last wall crumbling and finally letting a tear escape... bringing back emotion to her robot-self.. it was beautifully written!

and the very last part... when she doesnt want to let go completely and wants to sort out the mess first... not many people do that and its really strong of hers to not let her emotions take over.. because she has been broken once.. and she knows she doesnt want to...

and again.. you brought in ur trademark ending where u left off the story almost mid-way.. and not stretch it unnecesarily... it was a great ending.. because the whole story was purely just about ridhima's emotions.. and not about what happened between AR...u had minimal role of armaan.. so having that focus on just ridhima throughout the end really justified what your story was aiming towards!

looking forward to more one-shots by you 😛

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Simone

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Posted: 16 years ago

#23

woah that was one long comment 😕

i hope ur not regreting the fact that u wanted me to write long comments 😉 ahahahaaha

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Robin

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Posted: 16 years ago

#24

wow neetz that was really deep! well done!

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hello.

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Posted: 16 years ago

#25

i wuv itttttttt

its really very sweet!! =DD i love the fact that u dont mention so many unnecessary details in ur ffs, but u still manage to get the point across beautifully=D

write more!!!!!

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Neeta

@U-No-Poo

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Posted: 16 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: Neha_luvPRB
superbly written
really appreciated..
loved it
Love,
neha.....

Thanks Neha, glad you liked it 😃

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Neeta

@U-No-Poo

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Posted: 16 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: ammygurl
hadd ho gayi...
itna chota?
thoda bada likhogi please?
awwww......nice one
riddhima the robot...lol..=)
awwww!!!!!

Ananya

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lol..sorry..shall write longer next time :D

Thanks alot Ananya, glad you liked it 😳