Counting those Days l AR One shot :) - Page 5

Originally posted by: luvkaranmadly

nice n sweet.......

Originally posted by: simi2

hey neeta

just read this one shot ,

it was great , very nicely written and such a sweet end , wow , i loved it , it was great , very nice

loved the way you have written about her feelings , great

would love to read more and more from you doo try on with more ff's

take care

simi

Originally posted by: mar-

amazing shot write more

Originally posted by: 268143

super oneshot 😊 👏

Originally posted by: shilpa4eva

great one shot neetz

keep em cuming

iram

U r right without emotions all r robots.

but i m happy she find her share of love nd thats too forever.

love

ritu

Originally posted by: -simi-

sowiee last night i reserved that comment and as i was reading the part, i didnt realize that my laptop isnt plugged in and the battery is about to die.. so yea i read a couple paragraphs and the battery died 🤢 and it was too late night for me to plug it in and restart my lappy....

so enough of the ranting, back to the part..

it was definitely worth the wait 😛 its beautiful! i have said this before but i'll say it again.. that you are very good at writing one-shots and leaving most of the before and after part to the reader's imagination! in this case, we dont even know the name of the man who left her until the end, and what happened between them that has made the protagonist so emotionless ... but the way u show the lack of her emotions just like a robot really gives the reader an idea that whatever happened was really bad..

Thanks a ton Sims! I guess I simply like to not spoon feed the readers. 😛 😉 I'm glad you like my writing style, I understand it's a rather vague way of writing, but well, I am me, and I love writing this way lol :P

then the way you show ridhima being in self denial, but telling herself that she's not.. the way her friend tells her to let go and later when she tells herself that she has let go.. but really she hasnt because she wouldnt be counting days and thinking about how she has become a robot..

then the part when she sees him.. and the way her 'wall' starts to crumble as he starts talking.. i really liked how u used the last wall crumbling and finally letting a tear escape... bringing back emotion to her robot-self.. it was beautifully written!

Thanks! Accidently, that's my fav part aswell 😃 That line 'The last wall crumbles, and a tear escapes her eye', came to me like BANG..and i just had to write it 😆 😛

and the very last part... when she doesnt want to let go completely and wants to sort out the mess first... not many people do that and its really strong of hers to not let her emotions take over.. because she has been broken once.. and she knows she doesnt want to...

Exactly! I think it's more humane of someone to be wanting to clear out matters before gliding away to beyond the moon to have their 'happy' ending..I could never understand the fairytale endings 😕 😆 [and you know the real reason why i DON'T write mush 😉]

and again.. you brought in ur trademark ending where u left off the story almost mid-way.. and not stretch it unnecesarily... it was a great ending.. because the whole story was purely just about ridhima's emotions.. and not about what happened between AR...u had minimal role of armaan.. so having that focus on just ridhima throughout the end really justified what your story was aiming towards!

Thanks Sims! Glad you like the end...I wasn't expecting many people to like it simply because in such stories, people expect a passionate and romantic end, and well, you know I can't write mush LOL! 😛

looking forward to more one-shots by you 😛

Originally posted by: Robin_M

wow neetz that was really deep! well done!

Originally posted by: moonlit.gold

i wuv itttttttt

its really very sweet!! =DD i love the fact that u dont mention so many unnecessary details in ur ffs, but u still manage to get the point across beautifully=D

write more!!!!!

Originally posted by: krazy4kash

hey

it was really good....esp the whole robot part an d way you expressed her feeling when she saw him............tooooo goood

luv
kj