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_SilentSoul_

@_SilentSoul_

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#151

Originally posted by: sunny303
Awww Ballu's such a cutie!!!

Great update bud...finally lol!!!

Are you continuing this!? Tell me it's a yes!!!

No😆 This was just an OS... I dunno what else to write cause I cannot make Veera fall for Baldev in just one part na😆 So I left it there with a feeling that she's falling in love with him because she was touched by his words😳 I have a new story in my mind though with the same essence of VeeBa but a new story😉

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_SilentSoul_

@_SilentSoul_

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#152

Originally posted by: kinkinikki
excellent update, like how u have integrated the tv story line in ur story with him wanting to marry her. I guess it can be quite difficult to think of how to end the story in a good way.

Means the ending was bad?! Thank you btw and seriously I didn't know what else I could write. You can read my comment above to know my point of view about the ending of second part.

@Sunny- Thank you for your comment buddy😳

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Neetu2825

@Neetu2825

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#153

Can you write one more part to this story? I wish Veera would confess her love to Baldev😊

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Princy

@princy48

Trailblazer

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Posted: 11 years ago

#154

hmm..pehle tho bada wala jhappi for this lambi update..

one more jhappi for such lovely veeba scenes...emotional hi kardi yaar tune...aaaw...luvd it to d core dear..omg u r jus a luvly writer..

"O pyaar matlabh... umm... jab tainu rota hua vekhke mainu aisa laga ki mere dil vich kuch 8-10 kilo ka atak gaya hai. Ya phir..." he thought and added, "...jab har waqt tainu vekhne da mann kare ya phir tere naal baat karne da..." he thought a little more and included, "Ya phir tainu koi tohfa dene da mann kare, ya phir mann kare ki teri saari pareshaani ka hal dhundke dedu tainu."

oh i luv u once more for this...lots n lots of hugs dear...agar aisa hi baldev veera se show mein bhi kahega naa...tab tho pind vich pyaar hi pyaar hoga bye god...

hmm..can't wait for d nxt..plz continue asap

Edited by princy48 - 11 years ago

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Nikki

@Nikki36

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#155

Originally posted by: _Bidzie_

Means the ending was bad?!Thank you btw and seriously I didn't know what else I could write. You can read my comment above to know my point of view about the ending of second part.

@Sunny- Thank you for your comment buddy😳

no no the ending wasn't bad at all. Its jus that the way u finished it doesn't seem like it should be the last chapter

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Bravehearts

@Bravehearts

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#156

Aww bidz ur storiez r awsum .love the update ballu such main cute haine

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_SilentSoul_

@_SilentSoul_

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#157

Heartbroken

She smiled dreamily and walked inside his house. "Tu inne waqt se jo sunna chahta tha, aaj main woh kehne aai hu, pata hi nahi chala ki kab teri bewakoofiyon pe, teri bakwaas baaton pe pyaar aane laga..." she thought, chuckled and remembered his antics. "Bewakoof kahika!" she shook her head. Raising her eyes towards where his room was, she sighed and paused. Gathering courage, she excitedly rushed upstairs. She wanted to surprise him, that was all she knew at the moment. She hardly cared about what others might think to see her in his room at this hour. She just needed to confess her feelings today - the state of her heart since so long. In the past, she never understood why his intensity would make her nervous, but now she did realize that she had fallen for his charm, eventually his heart and everything about him. She loved to be with him. She loved to get annoyed by him as well as hitting him playfully. Her grin grew broader and broader...

"Baldev puttar, kinna achcha kia tune, Ranvi aur uske parivaar de naal jaan pehchan baraaya aur rishte sudhar liya. Veera se bhi dosti kar lia, acha hai. Ranvi khush hoga aur tere vaaste peeche hat jaaega. Aur phir tainu Sarpanch banne se koi nahi rok sakta."

Each and every word that Bansuri said to Baldev stabbed the deep core of Veera's heart. All of a sudden, she saw her whole world crushing down. She stood numb for a moment and then ended up stepping back. A lone tear fell from her right eye. She opened her mouth but words did not escape. She wasn't even this much broken when she knew the biggest truth of her existence, she realized. A betrayal... once again! It seemed as if God never wanted her to be loved by the ones she loved with all her heart and soul.

She descended down the stairs. Baldev's words, proposals, antics, softness, affection, gazes, winks and flying kisses - every single thing of him appeared in her mind one after one. Was he pretending all the while? Was that gesture of support when she was shattered... a pretense? A freaking damn pretense just because he wanted to fulfill his so-called dream? Anger grew inside her, but the next moment, she was numb again when she remembered how she had started to love him... How HIS love compelled her to love him back. She was mad at herself for falling in love again, for loving that man whom she hated so deeply but one day, unexpectedly, became the only person she could confide to and in front of whom she could be HERSELF.

As she was lost in her ocean of thoughts, she slipped as soon as she stepped on the floor. Just then someone grabbed her wrist from behind and saved her from falling, and she knew who he was.

"Veera, tu itthe? Itthe ki kar rahi hai? Aur aise kisi se mile bina jaa kyun rahi hai?" Baldev confusedly questioned her as he stepped down and stood in front of her.

"Kuch nahi, mainu ghar jaana hai!" she was about to head outside when he blocked her way.

"Phir se nakhre! Oye teri taqleef ki hai? Mainu inna tang karne mein tainu majaa aata hai ki? Seedhe seedhe vyaah de vaaste maan bhi jaa. Kinne din bhi ho gaye tere chunautiyo ko pura kiye huye." Baldev sadly pouted.

Veera intensely looked in his eyes. "Maanna padega Baldeva... Apne Sarpanch banne de sapne nu pura karne de vaaste kya dhamakedar nautanki ki hai tune... Veerji se dosti aur..." she paused and painfully sighed, "...mere naal pyaar da natak..." she said and silently cried.

Baldev was at a loss of words. He stared at her, baffled, and tried to understand what the actual matter was by observing her face. "Aye tu ki..."

"Bansuri taayiji ne jo kaha kya woh sach hai?" Veera sternly asked. "Kya Sarpanch banne de sapne de vaaste tune Veer ji de naal dosti ki hai?"

"Haan aye vaaste Ranvi de naal dosti ki thi lekin ab..."

Veera mockingly laughed. "Aur main idiot aye soch rahi thi ki tu mere vaaste mere parivaar walo da dil jeetne di koshish kar raha tha. Main aye soch rahi thi ki tu sach mein meri Veerji di izzat karne laga hai aye sochke ki woh mere vaaste rabji se bhi barkar hai."

"Veera, meri baat toh sun..." Baldev tried to defend himself in front of her.

"Baldeva, tu jo tha wahi rahega. Mainu laga tha ki tu dil ka acha hai. Sab ki parwah karta hai... Par nahi... Tainu sirf apni fikar hai... Woh mainu saahara dena woh bhi ek nautanki ho kaun jaane..." She taunted and walked away with tears continuing to roll down her cheeks.

Baldev ran after her and roughly grabbing her arm, he pulled her to a corner of the building. "Kamli ho gai tu... Tainu sach mein lagda hai ki main..."

"Tune khud maana aye gal..." Veera reminded him coldly.

"Tu mere pe vishwaas hi nahi karti toh tainu kuch kehne da faida nahi hai." He moved back and turned away.

"Tere paas kuch kehne ko hai hi nahi Baldev, aur naa kabhi hoga!" Veera exclaimed in a high voice and her own words pinched her heart brutally, yet she emphasized on each word because she wanted to accept her reality of loving someone who simply took advantage of her for his own selfish reasons. As she had accepted this fact, the anger in her knew no leaps and bounds. How the hell could he do this to her? She walked to him and turned him towards her. "Mainu koi farq naa padhta tha... aur naa padhta..." she stopped. Was she going to say that she least bothered about him and what he did? Her confused heart questioned her mind. Her heart was not letting her to lie to him about her feelings. She looked lost for a few seconds.

"Tainu humesha se farq padhta hai, Veera. Par humesha ki tarah tu naa apne aap ko samajh paai aur naa mainu." Baldev calmly said to her.

"Khud nu samjha issi vaaste tainu aye kehne aai thi ki main tainu bohot pyaar karti hoon, hadh se jyada, khud se jyada. Tere badmaashiyo pe, bewakoofiyo pe, kab dil aa gaya pata hi nahi chala mainu." Her smile as she confessed her love and his happiness to hear from her that she loved him, faded in a second as Veera added in a vulnerable state, "Mainu ki pata tha ki wahi badmashiya, bewakoofiya, bas ik naatak tha." she looked away and sobbed.

Soon she moved backward and passing by him without even glancing him, she walked to the exit slowly. He looked at her as she was leaving, hopefully and sadly. Something died inside him... "Ik vaari vishwaas karke vekha hota." he whispered weakly and a lone tear fell from his right eye as well.

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I know it was sort of crap...writing after long, so forgive fr mistakes and criticize them so tht I can do better :P And long comments pleej! 😛 And yes this is the first part only with Veera's side of story. Baldev's one will be part 2 :P

Edited by _Bidzie_ - 11 years ago

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Tahira

@tamzin43

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#158

very nice start update soon plz

Edited by tamzin43 - 11 years ago

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836559

Hibernated

Posted: 11 years ago

#159

It was good yaar... conti soon :D

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Neetu2825

@Neetu2825

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#160

That was really sad😭

But you did a great job describing the scene. It was beautiful. I am glad you didn't make it overly dramatic as most revelation scenes tend to be portrayed on television. Instead, the scene had a subtle sorrow about it. Please update the next part soon!

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