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Banumathy Prasanna

@banuprasa

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#31

Hi Dears,

Thanks or all your comments.. but he concept is a emotional concept where Roopa need to get married to Chandra... But i assure the track changes later & at last he will join hands back with Nandhini...

If you all okay then i will proceed with the storyline.. if none wants in that way.. i am sure to change the storyline...

Please do let me know to give further updates... 😊

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: banuprasa
Hi Dears,

Thanks or all your comments.. but he concept is a emotional concept where Roopa need to get married to Chandra... But i assure the track changes later & at last he will join hands back with Nandhini...

If you all okay then i will proceed with the storyline.. if none wants in that way.. i am sure to change the storyline...

Please do let me know to give further updates... 😊

Banu I guessed as much because you told so when you were beginning. I wouldn't like to curtail your artistic freedom or your story because it is your own baby. But since you are asking for my preference, I will always want to see Chandra and Nandini together. But you can have an engagement drama and all the pre-nuptial ceremonies with Chandra and Roopa if you want. If you ask me I will say I prefer a marriage only between the two real love birds Chandra and Nandini. All said and done, I will read this story till the end even if Chandra and Roopa marriage happens now and Chandini marriage happens in the end.

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Princess of Videha

@JanakNandini

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#33

My dear banu

I have nothing to say as Shailu pointed all the points.

Even i like chandini,because their love is true but roopa is just infatuated to him.

Even if you make Roopa chandra together, i will not stop reading.your story is good,esp nand.

Looking forward how you are going to depict

Regards

Avantika

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Banumathy Prasanna

@banuprasa

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Thanks Dears for your feedback.. Yes i agree with you both...

I am apologising to Jasmine here to go away from the concept suggested...

But i need to as i myself was unable to go against the same feeling which our friends expressed...

In fact thats the reason for only 10 updates in this FF while i finished 5 FFs on RoSid in this duration...

Now fast Banu phase of updates in this FF now...

Stay tuned for the roller coaster ride... 😊

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Banumathy Prasanna

@banuprasa

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

Part 11

Nandhini started to temple...

When she reached temple Chandra was already there...

He was praying to God sincerely while Nandhini stood in front of him...

She prayed to God as well and turned while Chandra opened his eyes...

Chandra & Nandhini meet each others...

Nandhini down her eyelids without able to handle his gazing eyes...

Now the eyes not even showing the love.. there was much more intensity...

It was showing some sort of rights over her...

Its obvious as Chandra was thinking that their marriage is already fixed...

They took the prasad and started going around the temple...

When they went behind the temple while going round.. Chandra looked on both sides...

There were no one there...

He hold her hand stopping her from going further...

Nandhini was shocked on his sudden touch...

She down her eyelids and down her face in shyness...

He moved towards her...

She took the Sindoor from the prasad and kept on her forehead...

Nandhini was shocked by his sudden action...

But Chandra just shared a smile as if its something normal which can happen...

Yes for him.. their marriage is fixed and soon he is going to fill her hairline with sindoor...

Then why cant he keep sindoor on her forehead...

She blushed...

She lift her hand and touch the sindoor kept by him...

Chandra; Come.. lets move before someone else see us together...

He said and started moving from there casually without knowing the effect he created inside her...

Nandhini was going behind Chandra speechless...

Now they came full round and again stood in front of God...

Nandhini wanted to talk to Chandra...

To ask his details so that she can inform her parents...

She was waiting for his prayer to end to talk to him...

When she was waiting.. Roopa was signalling Nandhini to come to her from little distance behind a tree which was inside the compound of the temple...

Nandhini wonder why she is calling her now...

As Roopa was signalling to come again & again...

Nandhini went to her...

Chandra who opened his eyes finishing his prayer found Nandhini was not there...

He thought she might have left from here...

Chandra started from there towards his office...

Nandhini reached near Roopa...

Nandhini; Roopa.. why are you calling me from here...

Roopa; I called you to introduce my fiance...

Nandhini: Fiance!!!

Roopa; Yes.. the one who was standing in front of you few minutes before...

Nandhini: What!!!

Nandhini asked her shocked...

Roopa; I dont know whether you notice him or not.. anyway.. i got photos which we took together i will show you...

Roopa opened her mobile gallery and showed Nandhini...

The selfies which Roopa took with Chandra...

Nandhini was shocked.. shattered...

She felt like the floor below his feet got moved and she is drawn inside the earth...

She was thinking.. Chandra is loving Roopa.. then why he was smiling at me..

Then this sindoor today on my forehead...

Is it like he was thinking me as his lover Roopa!!!

Nandhini; Does your fiance know we are twin sisters...

Roopa; No.. i got no chance to tell about that... why are you asking...

Nandhini; No.. he smiled at me thinking me as you...

Nandhini replied innocently...

Roopa gave a weird smile hearing that...

Yes.. her plan got super hit...

She finally made Nandhini clear that Chandra is loving Roopa...

Roopa; Nandhini.. you didn't tell me how my fiance look like...

Nandhini: Of course handsome.. good match for you...

Nandhini said trying hard to get his voice against the block the grief of losing her love was creating inside her...

Roopa; Thanks Nandhini... So when are you going to show me your lover...

Nandhini; Lover... no.. i dont have anyone like that...

Roopa: Are you sure!!! or hiding from me...

Nandhini; NO Roopa.. there is no lover for me.. Come lets go home...

Nandhini & Roopa started from temple towards their house...

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Very nice Banu. I hope Jasmine will not mind it. Sometimes we begin with one concept and as we begin writing we feel like writing something else. I liked this part very much. Nandini is heartbroken. Her grief was portrayed very well. Her whole world came crashing down.

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RTDeewani

@RTDeewani

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#37

Oh no... poor Nandini... Just as she was basking in the glory of her love, her so-called sister made her crash back to the bitter reality with the horrible revelation.

My state was no different from Nandini's when I read it. Just I was lost in the sindoor scene, you made my heartbreak with the RoopNi scene.

I can't believe Roopa could be so insensitive to her twin sister's feelings. It was normal on her part to introduce her fiance to her sister but what was that to make her wounds go further green, by asking her about her lover, when she well knows Nandini is devastated with the news of ChandRoo's marriage?

She is just a bratty inngrate.

Anyways, continue soon as you have promised, Banu. Great going.

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Banumathy Prasanna

@banuprasa

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#38

Part 12

Nandhini rushed inside her room and jumped to the bed...

She was unable to handle the grief...

The sindoor which he kept stick to the pillow...

On seeing that she remembered him keeping sindoor on her forehead...

She was thinking.. so he was keeping the sindoor thinking i am Roopa...

How mad i was thinking he loves me...

He always thought i am Roopa and was moving with me...

As he was very close to Roopa already & took photos as well...

Without knowing the otherside i unwantedly developed all feelings for him...

Avantika came inside room...

Avantika; Nandhini... are you crying... what happened...

Nandhini: Nothing maaji... i was feeling head ache.. nothing else...

Avantika: Are you sure!!!

Nandhini; Yes maaji... only head ache...

Avantika: nandhini i wish to ask whether you have any love interest.. if yes.. then tell us... we can arrange your marriage as well...

Nandhini was thinking... i was having maaji... not anymore...

Nandhini: Maaji.. nothing like that.. now lets concentrate on Roopa marriage.. what is the urgency of mine now...

She said with an artificial smile...

Avantika; Ok Nandhini... take rest as you are feeling head ache... shall i apply pain balm...

Nandhini; No need maaji... its ok..

Avantika went out with a smile...

From next day.. Nandhini stopped going to temple or anywhere...

She got no guts to see him...

She fear may broke down in front of him if it happens...

She was only inside the room...

Roopa & Chandra engagement was arranged...

It was planned that weekend... Marriage after 1 month time...

Close relatives & friends were invited by Nand for engagement function...

Roopa called Nandhini for purchase of engagement dress...

But Nandhini avoided going anywhere...

By their talk Nandhini came to know Chandra is also coming for purchase as Roopa asked for it...

Nandhini thought its right time to go to temple...

She may feel better going to temple...

After Roopa & her parents started from house, Nandhini went to temple...

She was praying to God with all tears rolling from her eyes...

She was praying.. Oh God... if he is meant for my sister then why you gave feelings inside me...

Her heart was paining with the thought that he is no more hers...

She slowly opened her eyes while she saw Chandra in front of her...

She was thinking.. Didn't Chandra went to purchase...

She got no guts to talk to him...

She just moved from there to go around the temple...

Chandra was coming behind her...

Chandra: Roopa... there is no one around.. why are you running away...

He hold her hand and stopped her from further moving...

She slowly took her hand from his hold...

As he called her 'Roopa' she got confirmed that he was moving with her all these days.. thinking her as Roopa & not as Nandhini...

Nandhini; You didn't go for purchase...

Chandra: I should ask that question to you.. i denied as i didn't got any interest in all these purchases.. but you were excited for the purchases.. didn't you go...

Nandhini heart was paining as she can understand he is talking to her thinking her as Roopa...

She got no guts to explain him that she is not his love...

Instead at least he is talking with love to her was giving soothing effect to her heart...

Nandhini: I didn't go...

She said and started moving from there...

Chandra; Roopa... Where are you running.. lets talk for sometime...

Nandhini; No.. i got some work...

Chandra: Roopa.. how many times you hold me from going to do my work.. now when i wish to talk to you why are you giving excuse of work...

Nandhini; No.. i got very urgent work.. I need to go...

Nandhini just rushed out from there...

Nandhini was thinking.. OH Roopa used to hold him from doing work and used to romance with him... they are loving each other since long.. while i was only fool to think that he got feeling on me...

She was unable to handle it...

She just rushed back to home...

Chandra was standing speechless in the temple...

Chandra was thinking.. Roopa you are ready to spend time in office or in my room while not here... i just wanted to talk to you.. you know i feel so good when i meet you here only.. why cant you understand that...

He took deep breathe...

Nandhini reached her room...

She felt guilty not to reveal him that she is not Roopa...

What if Roopa tell him that she went for purchase while he will come to know talking not to Roopa in the temple...

Then what he will think about me...

He may even think i am using the chance of being look alike of his love and tried to be close to him...

I should avoid such in future...

its better i dont go anywhere till their marriage...

Then what about after marriage...

How i am going to see him with my sister...

Is my heart going to accept it that easy...

Its better to go somewhere with some or other reason...

Nandhini decided on her own...

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RTDeewani

@RTDeewani

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#39

Wow... so quickly you updated. Thank you. Beautiful update.

Oh what a pitiful crossroads Nandini is in. She can't even try to put distance between her and Chandra by revealing her actual identity, while also a part of her soul wants to live and cherish those precious, little moments of love that she gets at the temple. Unable to handle all these mixed emotions, she decides to distance herself by leaving everything behind for her own sanity.

Now that you have decided to unite only Chandra and Nandini, I wish that Chandra soon find her and make her his woman for good, before she takes any drastic decision because of her heartbreak.

Update asap.

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Banumathy Prasanna

@banuprasa

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: Jodhu
Wow... so quickly you updated. Thank you. Beautiful update.
Oh what a pitiful crossroads Nandini is in. She can't even try to put distance between her and Chandra by revealing her actual identity, while also a part of her soul wants to live and cherish those precious, little moments of love that she gets at the temple. Unable to handle all these mixed emotions, she decides to distance herself by leaving everything behind for her own sanity.
Now that you have decided to unite only Chandra and Nandini, I wish that Chandra soon find her and make her his woman for good, before she takes any drastic decision because of her heartbreak.
Update asap.

Dear... you know i used to give minimum of 10 updates daily & used to finish 100 updates FF on 10 days time... Now a days little busy too with personal works.. thats why giving less updates.. Also not making very big FFs with 100 updates & only average of 25 to 50 updates FF...

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