She his weakness OR Thaakath!- the K-Jodi - Sukor - a Bonus. - Page 6

Another dhamaka flashback......very realistic though I must say... heart wrenching👏👏👏

How many in real life too must be facing such situations na!! And not everyone is lucky to get a Mr. Khatri!

So now hands have met!!! Finally......😅😅😅

Ok now that I have read and loved this part, I am all set for the next....just saying😜😜

Thanks Sritama... Ohoh that's lovely one.

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Another gripping ,heart wrenching flashback Sumi di,revealing d cruel realities of life👏👏👏😥😥just like Suraj ,Chakor too has gone through so much trauma n pain n she has witnessed heartbreaking agonies of her mother😢kudos to u Sumi di👏👏how realistically u have highlighted d heartbreaking gruesome realities of our society💔so Suraj's father took care of Chakor's education n he sponsored her..n Chakor is d girl with d sword😍why Chakor calls herself Dr.Chakor, why she hates men,d reason behind so many transfers...now it's all cleared..two broken,shattered souls pouring their hearts out to each other..finding solace in sharing their pain which dey were suppressing for so long..both extending their hands n their hands met for d first time😍😍❤❤loved it..d precap..d sword mystery..that question of urs..had destiny bookmarked dem to lock😍💓waiting waiting with bated breath😍😍

N d chapter headings were so apt..loved d way u used d tree's example to name d chapters.. how step by step Suraj -Chakor relationship is unfolding with every new chapter..

Saplings,sowing n all d other ones..very apt n perfectly synchronized with d content of d chapters

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🤗🤗🤗🤗🙏🙏🙏🙏

Thanks Smita.. I know its painful but fact cannot be hidden.

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Part 4A:

It's quite a heartbreaking, painful update Sumi 😢😢, sukor conflict regarding the Mall encounter, her anger towards him & all the men, he's saying he has committed himself to the elimination of criminals from society, so didn't want to make anyone his weakness, his grabbing her head (typical Suraj style👍). Her accusations was hurting him , compel him to bring up his painful, bitter past before her, he's breaking down, crying after long, ohhh so heartbreaking dear 😔😔 😢😢.

I was so curious to know about their past & it needless to say that you have so brilliantly brought it to us 👏👏. So perfectly & exquisitely you described of Suraj's physique & efficiency in all the way, so mesmeric 😍 😍 . Cadet Suraj bewitched me by his charms 👌👌❤❤, just imagining Suraj Khetri (specially Vj) in that majestic uniform with his dignified personality👌👌😍😍.

Despite being an aristocratic family, his father was very kind, righteous, honest man, but the consequences of believing someone blindly were very severe😩😩, that left his family in misery😥😥 The contretemps & the forcibly occupying of their land & property for illegal purpose, his father's tragic death before his eyes made him mentally devastated, then afterwards rigid & cynical. The entire scene was so tormenting & heart wrenching, the monstrousness of the incident ,staggered me 😔 😔 😢 😢 ,( it reminded me the day Suraj forcibly became a bonded labour to his ruthless father 😢 to save his mom ) . His traumatized past made Chakor softend towards him, first time she subconsciously sympathized with him, trying to calm him, which is great 👍👍.

It's truly a heart touching, fantastic update though with so much pain but you brought it in the perfect way with your efficiency 👍👍👏👏. Let's see what happened with Chakor in her past, which made her so arrogant ,the reason behind her hated towards men & non using her surname. Thank you.

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Sumi dear🤗🤗

its heart wrenching to read the hardships chakor went thru.. both sheding tears at last, immersed in the sorrows, and finally both hands met each other, aww i can imagine the scene and atmosphere. I am awaiting to see their journey from here.

And again intriguing gripping precap..awaiting for it to unfold. keep going.👏

Thanks Sonia.

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Just read both parts it was heartbreaking but hattsoff to u you always brought such a ugly truth of our society in such a wonderful way 👏👏👏 Both SuKor have such an heart wrenching past now just waiting how to story unfold

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Thanks so much Smita for your analytic comment 🙏🙏

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Part 4B:

Just finished this one . Another heart breaking, painful update Sumi 😔 😢, you have very realistically presented Chakor's past 👌 So her father's mistreatment of her mother was the reason for her hatred towards men, quite logical. Mr. Khetri was such a kind hearted gentleman, agreed to sponsor Chakor's education, Chakor was so fortunate, getting such guardian. Really poverty sometimes becomes a curse in people's lives, so many like her mother have to die without minimum treatment 😔 😢 😢 . It's quite reasonable to break the relationship with her despicable so called father & non using his surname 👍👍 & wishing to write her mother's name in place of the surname was appreciable 👏👏, though it was not granted by the college council, sad but at least they accepted her without surname, that was enough for her 👍. Sudden closure of sending fees from the sponsor, made her in confounded state but it's good that her studies were not interrupted due to her brilliance . Mr. Khetri & Chakor's many attempts to meet each other were always unsuccessful & she didn't know about Mr. Khetri's sudden death & sukor were not aware of him chosen them as future mate of each other. But destiny made them meet each other ❤❤.

In gala function her feeling lonely was so sadistic but her speech, her gratitude towards her sponsor looking at the sword book mark, then her tribute to her mother's soul, saying she kept her promise, looking up, remembering her mom, all were so heart touching 😢 😢 , so perfectly written 👌. That moment made me so emotional & proud of her too 😢😢👏👏. Her decision to serve the impoverished people, working for the municipal hospital was so commendable 👏👏. So her truthfulness, protesting against injustice ,the attitude of not bowing down to the wrongdoings were the reason behind her repeatedly transfer.

The last part was so promising, they're realising each other's agony, unknowingly extending their hands towards each other 😊😊 quite interesting. The precap was so exciting, may be they eventually realize their actual acquaintances. Over all a fantastic update with a nice ,auspicious precap . Thank you

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Originally posted by: 77nikita

Another dhamaka flashback......very realistic though I must say... heart wrenching👏👏👏

How many in real life too must be facing such situations na!! And not everyone is lucky to get a Mr. Khatri!

So now hands have met!!! Finally......😅😅😅

Ok now that I have read and loved this part, I am all set for the next....just saying😜😜

Niki🤗

I am not hearing anything what you are saying... ta ta

c ya on Sunday!

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Sumi dear🤗🤗

its heart wrenching to read the hardships chakor went thru.. both sheding tears at last, immersed in the sorrows, and finally both hands met each other, aww i can imagine the scene and atmosphere. I am awaiting to see their journey from here.

And again intriguing gripping precap..awaiting for it to unfold. keep going.👏

thanks Uma so much...🤗

yes heartwrenching.. it wrenched me to write too..

thanks for always encouraging me..

Chapter 5

The first shoot………..

She cried….I don’t trust men, especially those who run away from responsibility…. Those who breaks the trust….

Both the hurt souls looked at each other……………..slowly realizing the past years of agony….

They both sat quiet trying to understand how they had been tangled into a puzzle.

Coming totheir senses, unknowingly both extended their hands when for the first time their hands met.

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It was very silent….

The day was growing dark…

They did not know how to react or act…

But one thing was clear that without their knowledge or willingness their lives had been silently tangled.

So… that bookmark which I saw in the hospital is yours??… He asked breaking the silence.

I could not see it completely then, can I see it…..hmmm she said very softly.

She always carried a book in her bag wherever she goes.. in all the chaos she did not leave her tote which she was carrying which had fallen in the jeep.

She went up and brought it and gave it to him… he held it very preciously with his left,going over the drawing with his right…the drawing drawn by his father… he held it close to his heart with tears rolling.. slowly kissing it…

He slowly said looking at the drawing……my father did not shun his responsibility, neither I, as I did not know about this, about your education……….. she extended her hand to hold the drawing while he lifted the drawing and unintentionally their hands collided…. To avoid dropping the drawing both held it when their hands held each other holding the drawing. The first spark came about. Just few hours back he grabbed her head and she held his collar and he indeed lifted her but nothing evoked any emotions… but now……

Neither she is a teenager nor he to have an adreline rush. It was indeed serene for few moments. If not anything, there was an air of friendliness, a sense of comfort in that hold.

They quickly got back moving back their hands… she asked but why the lock? Too many things going through their minds.

Lock is our prime business and as my father wanted or felt you……… urr…..me……. us…..no …yess…. but…. He could not complete the sentence..

Both looked up with tears…. She said… I am sorry for I thought… she gulped…but thanks to him but for him I would not have come this far..……….. she felt very emotional…He quickly he came to his natural self… its ok he said… but you fought your battle all alone…. And you too she said.

But….suddenly she asked… Ajay???

Oh god!! my phone is dead…. so is mine… both looked at their phones which did an excellent role of switching off so that they could switch on.

Suraj Sir Come in ….. Suraj sir…please come in!!! the walkie talkie was beeping….. he heard it as their minds were calm. He quickly grabbed it. Yes Suraj here, Roger… I am coming…

The next moment they just hopped into the jeep…

The jeep which carried the Khadoosh Jodi was carrying back the Khatraa Jodi…

They didnot talk much as both were into many emotions… they could not lay their hands on it to say yes this is it…..both were feeling relieved…. as though their burden had been drifted down.

He was talking on the walkie talkie while she just was holding the bookmar kunknowingly soothing the lock beneath where he was holding, looking at him lost in his face but quickly lowered her head.

It wasbreezy and for few minutes she closed her eyes in calmness when he turned to look at the left mirror and his eyes fell on that face. For the first time he took few minutes to see her, with the strands of hair on her face. He did loose himself but quickly came to his sense…

The jeep screeched into the hospital, both ran inside to the special room..

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The other hospital

The parents of the two had been informed and they were at the hospital, crying not understanding whats happening with their children..

The doctors were looking at the reports with bewilderment.

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The district hospital

Tanu camerunning to Chakor …where were you? Where did you go?….

How is Ajay…she asked.

She took them to the special room..

Ajay was onthe bed, with a bandage.

He opened his eyes and smiled at Suraj…..

The Dr got into her action, quickly checking him for the vital parameters. He was indeed good. She was surprised, for what had happened he was really good. She saw his shoulder which was bandaged and put on a sling.

The Chief walked in…he is fine.. he will be perfect for some physio after a week. The bullet had removed the flesh on top of his shoulder blade and breezed through.. No fracture.. just loss of blood. Looking at Suraj he said, Officer I must appreciate your calculation and your aim was perfect not above nor below.

Chakor was indeed surprised as for the magnitude of the chaos Ajay was indeed with a bit heavy bruise and nothing fatal. She looked at him while Suraj was calm going to Ajay.

I am sorry he said…that too firm no emotions…(well that’s he, the Devil Officer)…………. Ajay smiled…holding his hands he said, please … Suraj I trust you……

but…. Suraj said…

When you trust someone you don’t question them!!! And I knew when you looked into me I knew you were calculating Kasib…said Ajay.. They hugged. His hug was so mechanical… Thank you… get well soon! I cannot wait long…

Yes Sir..Ajay said!

But how ? Chakor asked looking at him. Ajay said Suraj knew that Kasib will try to take revenge so I fell prey to him. He had the motto to kill me before Suraj and blow himself up as he was having a bomb fixed to him as he knew if Suraj catches him he will skin him alive like that was done to Garv. Chakor scrunched her face…

Suraj continued….so yes when I saw him holding Ajay with the same hand along with his knife unlike holding with one and aiming with other, I knew there was more than killing Ajay as his left hand was inside the jacket pocket so it was evident it would trigger a bomb killing many innocent lives there in the mall. So to save many I had to shoot Ajay.

But, if you had missed it asked Chakor.

Hmm may be we would be standing at his funeral now said the Devil…

No! said Ajay. His aim never fails.. she was inspecting his cardiac function…

I shot him in the right shoulder just to peel the flesh and he understood so he held Kasib and his hand so that the knife does not pierce him, Said Suraj

Her eyes widened… ohh.

Yes! I need him fast on his feet so I cannot give him the luxury of being in the hospital bed for long.

He got a call and moved passing her when she mumbled indeed Devil to herself, which did not go unnoticed by Suraj.

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The evil’s bungalow

It was late night

The evil was fuming.. Deeraj, now Kasib also has been encountered. We need to get into action… we have to meet the business needs. Get someone…

Deeraj said… no boss lets wait for few days, the media is still all over and as one ofthe social person HE is being interviewed.. so lets stay calm for few days.

Bhero thumped.. getting impatient.

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The Gokul Lodge

What happened you did not come yesterday asked the lodge manager to Aditya.. kuch kaam so stayed at work. He went up to his room on the third floor and was looking down.. through his window.

It was calm he took the cover from his back pack and saw it. It was the other footwear of Asha which he found near the fence. So she has come to the lodge but what happened

He wore his hooded jacket covered himself and went down once all slept. He saw a room locked at the basement near the lift of the lodge.

It was dark, he slowly went around the fence towards the out house..

He went inside the outhouse by pushing rattling one of the closed windows… it was very old shabby and had all the old furnitures and broken stuff with full of cobwebs and a staircase leading underground. He saw footsteps on the dusty stair. Tiptoeing he followed the footsteps and he reached to a room which made his eyes grow wide. He looked around grasping everything. The room was big with nice interiors and with a big bed in the centre…the false ceiling was lit with many focus lights. He saw something glittering and he quickly picked it . It was a gold cufflink. Avery expensive one.

The room had another door opposite side…He tried to switch on his mobile and to capture a pic but could not as some signal was interfering his phone.. He heard few voices so he quickly returned back to the outhouse and came back to the lodge to his room and during the dawn went to the hospital.

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At the hospital

He came to see the Chief to check about Asha…

He went to meet Ajay when his eyes involuntarily was looking around.

She is not yet in Ajay said.

No I am not looking for anyone he said quickly turning his head.

Hmm.Encounter specialist is now becoming Lie Specialist. Said Ajay.

Shut up, I think you are fine so get out of bed, Suraj said.

Oh my god you are indeed a devil the Doctor walked in ….Cant wait for him to get on his feet kya……without turning around his face glew for a second but quickly changed shade. … Ajay smiled.

Good morning she said…. Good morning…

How is he and when can he get back to work…

He needs atleast a week rest she said.

He went out as he got a call. Talking walking down the corridor he stood infront of Asha’s room.

She checked Ajay and followed him to Asha’s room.

How is she?he asked. She is getting better but… she saw his brows scrunch.

Whats it she asked… What he asked. Why are you scrunching .. Oh within himself he realized she was noticing his minute changes and an unusual happy feeling. But…next moment he did not want it as he felt if it was because she was helped by his father? He did not want a forced payback….

He sat in the chair beside Asha.. Dr… he called her… call me Chakor.. Thanks… .. Asha mentioned to me powder I am trying to decipher it but unable to… being a girl from the village is it to do with any face powder or any herbal… when Chakor said.. powder?? Why should she talk about face powder to you?? Hmm you have a valid point he said.. they came up with various permutations and combinations when she unintentionally holding his arms turning him.. pointing her left index finger…said…Officer… powderrrr hmmmm is it to do with drugs… brown sugar…heroin….something like that… He jumped,locking her index with his and said, yes, yes you may be right…. for the first time both smiled. Hey thanks …. That’s a good clue… they came to sense and quickly released their entwined fingers…

He got upto leave when he got a call from an unknown number… Officer…she called. He turned. That’s my mobile number she said very softly.. incase you want to call…. His brows lifted …. I meant if you want to check about Ajay or Asha. He nodded… thanks… Saved it as AL. She saved as DO.. She had noted his number when she was calling from the hospital landline earlier.

He got into his mode of thinking….He replayed what he saw at the outhouse but could not get the hang but for sure something to do with drugs.

He got a call from the control room saying the boy and girl admitted are gaining consciousness but are not remembering what had happened to them.

What is it she asked….

If what I think is true then I will for sure kill everyone who are behind it, he said.

Our society cannot have this, our young generation cannot be preyed upon. He briefed her. She was dumb but, what was making her more shocked was that the way he spoke without any amount of emotion…with eyes fixed firm… she for one realized he has hardened terribly. Its very important that Asha speak up fast, he said.

The greed of money and the want of psychic pleasure will make sick minds do anything ..

He started to leave when reaching the door he turned and said don’t go anywhere alone and please te..lll….. me…(in a very toned down voice) if you are going out.

Hmm.. . she said…

He went out calling the control room. He got into his jeep, she saw from Asha’s room window… for the first time someone is worrying for her… the same Devil which spoke without emotions few minutes ago spoke with concern… Why? Whats this?.

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Mr. Kabir’s bungalow

The media was calling the owner of Gokul Lodge Mr. Kabir Nath seeking his opinion as the boy was staying in his lodge and had been absconding and was found in a dazed state. One of the media guy with a red cap along with the cameraman was capturing everything. Kabir said he was shocked that a resident of his lodge has got into drugs which is a parasite to the society. Kabir came along with two others who supported that we should raise against drugs.

He said he is against such practices and the media also told him since the two could not remember anything they will not be able to help the police in nabbing the culprits so they will soon be sent to their villages but true both are in state of shock. The media guy did not fail to capture the sense of sigh in one of the two who was with Kabir and he closed in on them…

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Is she being nice because she feels indebted???

Is he being concerned because he feel he is responsible…

Are they bookmarked to be locked…?

He was surrounded…never expected…..

She slowly opened her eyes…..unveiling the horror……….

No tears from her, the Devil will butcher you all.. she spoke firm

Bring him to me………let the officer bring him….

He walked with him into the Den.

No don’t….she cried… I don’t want to be your weakness…Please kill me.

The beard fellow laughed………….. ha ha you tried his weakness…. He turns his weakness into his strength…………and raise Hell for he is the DEVIL.…

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The story is going great, love how the case is slowly revealed and the pace of the progress in Sukor's relationship is perfect.

3B

Action packed! Suraj already cares for Chakor, he's curious about her and very protective and Ajay teasing him 😆, good friend.

It's clear that Ajay knew what Suraj was doing and that Suraj knew where he was shooting Ajay to free him from the goon.

4A

Suraj's story was heart wrenching and his father's too, all his fault was trusting the wrong people, Suraj sharing the story with Chakor, shows that she's special for him but he hasn't realized it yet.

4B

Poor Chakor, she and her mother suffered a lot, so Suraj's father was her sponsor and she's the bride he had in mind for Suraj, now Suraj knows that too 😉.

5

Loved how you wrote that their burdens have drifted away once they shared it.

Suraj getting flustered explaining that his father wanted him to marry her was cute and funny ❤️️.

The first love sparks have already started , love how they got lost in each other, the stolen glances, how they're always aware of each other's presence, his face brightening hearing her voice, she giving him her number, he asking her to take care, it's beautiful 😍❤️️.

Smart Chakor, she helped him figure out the powder mystery.

Seems Chakor will be caught by goons 😮

Eagerly waiting for next part.