SwaSan SS - FITOOR - Snippet #3-PG 37 (25/3/17)

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Aheli

@iam_aheli_98

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Posted: 8 years ago

#201

Originally posted by: iam_aheli_98
Res for part 5 Lucky. 😳 But I need time to unres coz my exams r going. 😭

Unresed. 😃
OMG! Why is Sanskar running away from love?? 😕 Did u mentioned the reason before before Lucky?? If yes then plzz tell me the chapter number so that I can give a quick read to that chapter, again. 😳 And if no, then reveal soon. 😉 Swara's FB part about her and Sunny at Mantra was nice. 😳 SwaSan moments at GM was superb! How Sanskar managed to convince Swara to meet him at Gulmohar. 😛 SwaSan moments at Gulmohar was very intense. 😳 Sanskar not ready to accept his love for her and Swara not ready to give a chance to him bcoz he lied about his identity! 😭 Both SwaSan suffering, missing and living in each other's memory, but still not ready to budge from their decision! 😕 Swara's shooting star FB about them was nice. And at present, they r wishing for each other in either's life, unknowingly. Loved this part so much!! 😳 I loved this chapter!! ❤️

Update soon. 😳 Thanks for the pm. 😃
With love,
Aheli.

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Aheli

@iam_aheli_98

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#202

Originally posted by: lucky.m

🤗
Aheli Sweet Heart

Don't worry ..Take you time .. do well in your exams .. Will wait for your comment with loads of emos😉

Love
Lucky

Unresed above. 😳

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#203

@ Aheli🤗

Sweet heart ..Thanks for such a lovely heart and lovely comment as well😳 ..Why sunny is running away from love you will find in first post ..Synopsis .. Its because he lost his mother at age of 6 and he suffered .He is scared ..If he loves someone and if they leave him .. he can't take the pain ..Its his way of shielding 😊

Hope your exams are going good🤗

Love

Lucky

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Aheli

@iam_aheli_98

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#204

Originally posted by: lucky.m
@ Aheli🤗
Sweet heart ..Thanks for such a lovely heart and lovely comment as well😳 ..Why sunny is running away from love you will find in first post ..Synopsis .. Its because he lost his mother at age of 6 and he suffered .He is scared ..If he loves someone and if they leave him .. he can't take the pain ..Its his way of shielding😊

Hope your exams are going good🤗

Love
Lucky

Yeah now I remembered. 😳 Thank u for making me remember the reason again. 😳 Yes, my exams r going well darling. Thanks for all ur god wishes. 🤗 And I'm glad that u liked my comment as well as the heart pic. 😳 Love u loads!! ❤️

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Juanita

@BlurredLines

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Posted: 8 years ago

#205

Originally posted by: lucky.m

Take you time 😛🤗

Yep i am taking my own Sweet time..😭

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 8 years ago

#206

Originally posted by: lucky.m

Replied above darlin🤗

Lucky

Lucky 🤗

I will be back after lunch with my further take on the electrifying chapter, and smoking hot Sunny boy. 😉 😆 Thanks for the warning that we will need a stock of fire extinguishers for the epilogue. 😉 ☺️ Now I am sure its going to be white hot! 😆

Will be back later today.

Love,

-----Viji

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lucky.m

@lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#207

Viji🤗

I am all waiting😊😳

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 8 years ago

#208

Originally posted by: lucky.m
Viji🤗

I am all waiting😊😳

Lucky 🤗🤗

I am back. 😳 🤗

Firstly, I was so, so, so thrilled reading about that guitar which Sunny gifts Swara. The Gibsons one. 😊 This is such an uncanny coincidence, long back when I was just rough drafting a fic on SwaSan (completely an AU one), I had thought of a cherry red Gibsons' guitar which a young Sunny (this was something of a friendship grows into love story which I was toying with at the time), brings back for Swara when he visits home in between his semester break in his US college. 😉 I didn't continue that fic, one of those drafts just lying in my comp incomplete. I was literally so immensely thrilled to see the Gibsons here, I was like chalo, I got to read of the guitar in this lovely fic. 🤗 Was the one Sunny got for Swara cherry red in color? Say yes na, please. 😳 😉

The intensity all through was so palpable yaar. I already told you how electric it was...literally could sense the electrons and protons whizzing around. 😉 You have sketched Sunny's traits so very well here. The way he feels so powerfully for Swara, the way he feels that he would bear any punishment from her for hiding his identity, would be willing to endure her yells and castigations for causing her to cry----but would never be able to accept that its over between them. He loves her with such immense passion---but he cannot bring himself to accept that he 'loves' her. So passionate and yet so vulnerable at the same time. 😳 I SO loved the way you made him reveal his feelings, all meaning that he loves Swara, without ever once saying the word love, even to himself. 😆 😉 But he certainly wanted to hear her say that she loves him again, didn't he. 😉 Though he also was angry at himself for feeling that way. God, this dude---he loves with such intensity but is reluctant to give a name to that emotion with an almost equal intensity. I wonder when the volcano will erupt? 😆 Imagine---this is Sunny holding back from his full realization, of what he really feels for Swara, And as it is, he says that he is so completely crazy about her, he would love to show her one day. 😳 ☺️ 🤪 Now when he realizes, no holds barred, the extent of his irrevocable, intense emotion for her----then what will he do? 🤪 Ahem! The mind boggles! 😉

The way you made Sunny say that 'Its not over between them'. in such an impassioned, decisive declaration of his feelings. That whole scene was so redolent of the feels and the amazing intensity of 2 unforgettable SwaSan scenes---one where he cages her between his arms when she is trying to avoid him (post her clearing him of the fake molestation charges), and the one where she accuses him of playing along with the 'forced marriage' plans, because that was what he supposedly secretly wanted, anyway. I don't mean the exact scene as such, because this one was completely different---what I mean is the intensity, the sheer palpable emotion inherent in him saying 'I won't let you go unless you listen to what I have to say'. 😳

This is somewhat non linear, but I must say I adored the thought process you sketched at the beginning, when Swara confesses to Sunny that she loves him, but all the same, she is so angry he lied about his identity, and that its over between them. (Because she loves him and he sees no future or value in love or commitment---at least, ostensibly). The way Sanskaar felt a jolt of the old fear going through him at the mention of 'love'--his instinct was to take cover since he has schooled himself for years into thinking that this pyar-vyar ka chakkar would only hurt him, and make him weak and vulnerable. Having lost his Mon early, seeing his Dad become so cold and aloof; had made him dread love in a sense. But he is already head over heels in love with Swara, he just needs to realize and accept the fact. Ragini was wise enough to cotton on to that fact---I just adore her in this fic. 😉 And Sunny needs to realize that it is being apart from Swara that is going to tear him apart, make him feel weak and vulnerable. Not being with her, acknowledging his love for her and hers for him. Where is the vulnerability in such a powerfully potent mutual love, after all? Swara will convince Sunny soon enough, no? 😉

Which brings me to the very worthy heroine in this fic. Yaar Lucky---👏 👏 Kudos for making Swara in Fitoor, so very sorted, sensible and with a solid head on her shoulders. It hurts her like hell, having to make the decision she did. She knows that Sunny does love her, she knows that he did not intend to hurt her, and the reasons he gave for hiding his identity----while not being very fair or palatable---actually do make sense in the overall arch of his intentions to get to know her as just a regular joe. He did not want her to have these preconceived notions and barriers against him for being the scion of the Maheshwari lineage, he just wanted Swara to get to know him as he is. Simply Sunny. 😉 But though she logically realizes all of that, she also knows that for her, she needs to celebrate the love and the bonding she feels with him. For her, their commitment is the logical culmination of that serene sense of belonging, that amazing tenderness as well as passion which they share. But while she can sense Sunny does love her, it is so very obvious in the way he gazes at her, his every gesture screams that out loud-----he hasn't realized it at all. And she is perhaps justifiably worried that he never would acknowledge that, either.

And so she takes perhaps the most difficult decision of her life. Despite wanting to hit him left and right, scream at him but then rush into his arms 😃 😉, she says it is well and truly over between them. Leaving them both burning in the agony of separation. Sunny wishes that she would just call him, tell him that she ants him back----since it was she who ended things between them, he was only following her decision. But for Swara----why could she go back on her decision when the one thing that would give her the most comfort---Sunny himself----is also the one thing that causes her so much pain. No, not because of unrequited love---which might be, perhaps, easier to get over? Because then she could console herself that things were just not meant to be. But here, she knows that her love is not unrequited, not in the actual sense of the term. Sunny does love her. But it is the immense love, of a man who intensely does not want to believe that he is in love. How can she reconcile herself to that pain? 😭 That is a very difficult kind of love to be the recipient of, isn't it?

Somehow, Sunny does need to arrive at a realization of sorts. Unless he lets go of his reservations, Swara will always keep hurting. And he will keep getting hurt, seeing her in pain. Waiting so very eagerly for the next chapter in this enthralling piece. And many---ahem!---😛 😳 more electrifying scenes. You have promised us that Sunny will keep up his guarantee to Swara, in the epilogue? That he would show her how crazy he is about her? 😉 A dozen...perhaps 2 dozen...Asanskaari/ Sinskaari ideas leap to mind. 😆

Loads of Love (and with lots of anticipation for Fanaa & Fitoor)

----Viji

P.S: Did you watch Ae Dil Hai Mushkil? There was a dialogue there which made me smile and think about you and your fics so much! Alizeh (Anushka's character) says about Ali (Fawad's character)---"Main uspe Fidaa ho gayi, aur woh apni music pe Fanaa" or something to that effect. Only Fitoor was missing---but then I guess Alizeh becomes Ayan's Fitoor. 😉

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#209

Viji🤗

Darling ..I have no clue if I would be able to do justice to that insightful, analytical and a lovely comment of yours ..but reading in your words really makes me feel good about what I write ..I go back wondering and re read the whole thing ..I adore your knack of analyzing the characters across any fics and your indepth comments which really offer us better insights .. I am in awe of same .😳⭐️

Sometimes Jus to get your long comment I feel like penning down updates .. They keep me going to a large extent and I keep growing greedy of them😳..

Thank you for always being such a staunch support .. All I can say in reply is Love you

I am running back to read it few more times

Love

Lucky

PS ; Cherry Red ..Free to imagine .. I didn't mention a color😉 and that fic you ere talking about .. god that sounds so cute .. Any chance we get to read it sometime down ..I told you I get greedy😉

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 8 years ago

#210

Originally posted by: lucky.m
Viji🤗
Darling ..I have no clue if I would be able to do justice to that insightful, analytical and a lovely comment of yours ..but reading in your words really makes me feel good about what I write ..I go back wondering and re read the whole thing ..I adore your knack of analyzing the characters across any fics and your indepth comments which really offer us better insights .. I am in awe of same .😳⭐️

Sometimes Jus to get your long comment I feel like penning down updates .. They keep me going to a large extent and I keep growing greedy of them😳..

Thank you for always being such a staunch support .. All I can say in reply is Love you

I am running back to read it few more times

Love
Lucky

PS ; Cherry Red ..Free to imagine .. I didn't mention a color😉 and that fic you ere talking about .. god that sounds so cute .. Any chance we get to read it sometime down ..I told you I get greedy😉

Lucky 😳☺️

Now you are making me feel all 😳. It's always a pleasure to read and comment on fics by you, Nynu, Saku, Shru and a few others...and I can't resist analysing at times. 😳

Now I am just waiting for Fanaa. Am sure I am going to weep copiously. ...but bring it on. 😳 Pathos has a beauty too...when one knows that there is a happy ending round the corner...or upcoming, even if not just around the corner. 😳

About that earlier fic...no yaar, I don't think I would be posting that, hadn't done much work on the draft. And I took some portions of that draft into other OS's of mine...Meraki for example. So now it's going to be Games People Play after my break...and then Memories of Midnight 😉

Lots of Love

Viji

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