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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

res

part unres

Pssst Shru - this is Nyna's mind sneaking in to let you know that the full unres will let take a couple of days. Her heart has thrown a massive tantrum and is currently still bawling in some corner of itself


I tried to reason with it - it is only a story and the end will be a happy SwaSan-licious one and got beaten to an inch of my sanity. Nyna has also spent a couple of sleepless nights on this account. I will attempt to get her heart to see some reason and then we will completely unres.

I am thinking you are fully recovered - tantrum throwing hearts are difficult to handle - trust me, I know

thinkingly yours,
Nyna's mind
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Complete Unres

Dear Shru,

Trust that you are feeling much better. Please take rest and care.

Dearest Nyna 🤗

And onto Chapter 26 - INFERNO - truly a burning chapter (my heart is still smoking slightly😡)

I did set a fire huh? And not of the nice kind either 😉- that I hope I saved for 27! 😃

"The path to paradise begins in hell" (Dante Alighieri) that was the what the ending portrayed - as Sanskaar decided to battle for his love on receiving the news that perhaps it was a little too late for him and Swara. Not that he thinks that way - for he is a man who would prove true the saying " A man who has not passed through the inferno of his passions had never overcome them" (Carl Jung) - Battles forecast! But then I am getting ahead of myself and so will start from the beginning.

Perfectly drew in my title to the man who wrote the work 👏 and how appropriate for parts of DK! I think you will have seen from 27 that your fears were unfounded and that Sanskaar never thought it too late for them at all? Although the rest of your para made me think you were on the same page after all? 😕

The opening scene was mindblowing- in sheer majesty of settings and the underlying messages it carried: the assured warrior and finest archer who is almost casual about his abilities and lights the fire on the first try; his seeking of Swara's pleasure being the only reward he sought, the symbolism that lighting of the torch was only reserved for those who were or would be king (does this portend a future declaration of Sanskaar as King or is it a mere coincidence???)

So glad you liked the opening sequence! I love archery as well as other forms of medieval combat and couldn't resist "showing off" Sanskaar again 😳😆. Ah there were clear mentions of how that honour is usually a sign of kingship so let's see what happens here- does that perhaps not go down well with everyone perhaps? Not the time to say for sure yet! 😉

Durga Prasad had been determined that Sanskaar has the honour of lighting the torch in the light of his achievements irrespective of what everyone else would read into his actions. The interaction between him and Sanskaar; Sanskaar accepting the former's public apology gracefully but quickly so as not to protract it and actually rejoicing when his army of men were elevated to an elite status. Truly a mark of a man - to be happy and proud when due recognition is awarded to those whom he considers his own.

I am glad you saw good in the interaction between uncle and nephew- I myself thought it sweet in its way. And high time some good relations were re-established? Of course Sanskaar is the perfect General just as he is perfect in every other way I so love this man!! 😳 Not that it isn't obvious 😆

It was also commendable on Durga Prasad's part to elevate Pawan to a minor Saamvant status, which by official mandate did make him a lord (this might ease at least a couple of hurdles in his unacknowledged and yet uncommenced relationship with Uttara?).

😆 everyone sees how happy Uttara would be with this development. As for this removing some hurdles, perhaps but there are much else that are still very much prevalent!

But the final act of publicly acknowledging Swara - that was the highlight of the event - and the numerous emotions it evoked - Swara was stunned, Sanskaar beaming with joy, Shekhar relieved, and then the women folk - flabergasted. But somehow, I cannot help thinking that his public commendation of Swara was the what started off the chain of the subsequent events - if he had not brought such open public notice of Swara in such a fashion then maybe she might not have caught the fancy of Saamvant Ranjit

You are spot on about the recognition for Swara 😊. I wanted that to happen as felt it only right given what she did. Everyone's reaction was as you say and yes! Very much so- in some ways that threw Swara almost into sharp focus so it made the proposal such an easy "sell" but also sometimes getting good recognition can actually set rumours flying especially when the recipient of such honour is a woman- the lovely world they especially lived in 😡

I agree that keeping in view the time period in which the tale is set, a match from Saamvant Ranjit, despite being a widower with a child and much older than Swara, would be considered desirable by most. Even Janaki, to whom finally Swara confess that she is love with Sanskaar, advocated the match (despite admitting that they had been attempting an alliance between him and her sister, Urvashi); it is saddening but so true of those times (and in some instances even in the current times).

See- this was exactly my point. Matches then were hardly made for any other reason than political alliances and given the situation Swara was in and the rest of their hare brained running around, fighting ego battles and confusion, I felt that this wasn't unlikely.

But then I take heart from the fact that Janaki has assured her that she will not be forced and all is not lost.

She had said that but when it came to it, how much she could really stop anything happening was also doubtful. Once before too they had forced Swara to agree to marry Lakshya 🤢

Sanskaar has also confessed his love for Swara to Annapurna, and surprisingly her reaction and pain are similar to Janaki- both are pained at their inability to help their beloved children as they are effectively tied down by the dictates of society; both of them admit their helplessness and while sympathising with Sanskaar / Swara's impossible love, caution them to tread with care. So while Swara sinks into further helplessness, Sanskaar prepares for a battle that would be bigger than any he has or would fight; the battle for his love and life.

Looking forward to the battle!

Yes indeed, Annapurna too- bound by queenly pressures which whether we like it or not, were so much a part of their psyche and lives they have to work in that ambit even if they break out time and again 😊 If it a love worth fighting for, fight you must huh?

Finally thank you for the scene where Sanskaar climbs through the window to meet Swara - though it was fraught with tension of unspoken confessions (I felt like screaming - how long does it take to say "I Love you, you idiots' but then I guess it is easier said than done, especially if the one speaking is a non-existent character in the tale 😉) and softly expressed concerns amidst fear of being caught together, it was a dreamy scene.

Glad you liked the window climbing and what it implied. As for the speed of them confessing, I take the entire blame for that 😆. I feel things had to get to a certain point to make it all that much more meaningful and I'll await your verdict on the next chapter in this respect 😉😃

lots of love,
Nyna

PS: I think the above post is not a very structured one and that is because I was feeling so wretched when I first read this chapter that my mind sneaked off somewhere to preserve its sanity. My apologies for the more than usual ramblings. 😭

It was very well structured! And I am really sorry for having caused such aggro and pain I hope the later sequences will make some recompense 😉 And please don't apologise! These are not ramblings, they are the gems that keep me going with the story! 🤗


Nyna dearest,

Replied in blue above. Hope the heart and mind both will be much happier in the next set of comments 😉

Lots of love,

Shru xoxo
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: dilwali

Hi Shru first of all so sorry for late comment got very busy so could not I hope u ll nt b angry with me
now coming to update it was as usual ur brilliant way of expressing pain n love of swasan which impressed me again as always. I really got worried after reading that Shekhar is fixing Swara's marriage with someone n I am eagerly waiting for next updates n my fingers are crossed that it will not happen ( By the way I know u wont make that happen u r also a mad swasan fan like all of us still worried thoda sa you never know what writers can do...hehehe ). I am also surprised how Ragini is behaving. She is still behaving as if she has done nothing but again I know you must have thought something for her. I really got impressed the way DP honoured Swara. Eager to read coming updates
Loads of love n take care of urself

wrongly posted at third thread earlier


Hey Kawal dear 🤗

Of course not! Why would I be angry? I am just grateful that you all make time for DK despite the other pressures and am happy to read comments whenever they are posted. Thank you!!

So glad you loved 26 despite the angst it contained! As you know you were absolutely right in being relaxed that Swara would not have to get married to anyone else- her knight would see to that 😉 And haha- you know me too well! I would rather have no SwaSan than have them with anyone else! Ragini- you will see some more of her soon 🤢 but I try not to overload her 😆. I know you have liked 27 and hope you will enjoy the next set too!

Loads of love always,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Chapter 27:

Shru 🤗

Lanny my love 🤗

You seriously need to work on your timings Shru. How do I always end up reading all your work (with such content that too☺️) when I am in a crowded train?! Balancing myself with one hand is difficult enough but to shield the phone so no one can read what I am reading & understand why I am blushing to the roots of my hair is another herculean task. Now of course like a grown up person I can just bookmark the thing & go back home & read but utna sabr bhi nahi hota na!!!🤔 And naturally I wont blame myself😆 so let me blame you😆 😆 But I love you so much 🤗 What an awesome mindblowing chapter and I do not mean just the ending😉

😆😆 I couldn't believe you read this one too on the train!! I remember this had happened to you on Zenith 😲😳. I pass blame straight back on to the time difference 😆. But I love the excitement to read it and if you think it was so good my month is made, have been floating at your reaction!!! 😳😳 Thank you so much!!!

OK so shuruwaat se shuru karte hai...

Swara too is wearing the dress he chose for her & the bangles too😳 How does she really plan to stay away from him? Does she not realize it would be impossible for her Exactly, it's like why either of those two even bother huh?! Ragini had been silent for way too long. I did wonder about that...now that she has spewed her venom my mind is at ease now😊 Though why is she unhappy? I refuse to believe she is scared of Sanskaar's accusations. She is too thick skinned to be much affected by mere accusations. And then there are enough fools there to side with her😊 Some moh moh problems maybe I am so happy Swara shut her up & in what a way👏

Ragini- I had to unfortunately deal with her once more- as much as I want, cannot keep me and us all in SwaSan bubble all the time . She is unhappy of course as she is burning. Her mind is so confused. The little flashes of remorse or sibling feeling which comes in is soon overpowered with her own selfishness and jealousy . She fears I suppose that Swara as a Maheshwari DIL would never do for her! And yes I so wanted Swara to give some back 😈

I do not like seeing Ranjit in the same room as Swara. Don't look at her. She is not yours. She is Sanskaar's! Look away NOW😵

😆😆😆- that's all I will do here.

Now you know how much I hate tamashas. I sincerely believe that things should be resolved by talking in a civil manner instead of resorting to theatrics or cheap antics which our show loves so much. Hence though I wanted to see Sanskaar fight for his right & love I dreaded the moment equally. I just did not know how he would resolve this issue without creating a big tamasha. But he did ...my Prince!! Could he be any more perfect. He did it all: politely asked for Swara's hand in marriage, let everyone know how serious he is about Swara, did not budge when every single person in the room was trying to make him see "sense",, set a concerned mother's heart at ease, shut up his own mother, stood firm in front of the entire Rajput clan...but but but cherry on the cake was when he allowed Swara the ultimate choice😳 It reminded me of an old story I had read about King Arthur's knight where a witch had asked him a question no one could answer "what does a woman truly want." The answer was she wants the right to make her own choices😳

As you know I too hate cheap tamashas 🤢- exactly what we get in most shows. But I was adamant here that this had to be public done but done with dignity and class- things I believe seeped into Sanskaar's very psyche. So I did what I thought he would do. In Sanskaar's way- firm but not "nautanki"- his own power makes it all the more dramatic. He didn't need t throw a tantrum like Lakshya had done. He just stated his purpose and as you say he made it happen, dealing with all the attendant issues. I LOVE that example. Have always been fascinated by the Arthurian legends by the way:) And perfectly put- so important for a woman especially in that age! 👏👏

And Swara will never ever let him down. That is the best part of this story that they BOTH are in love, that they BOTH care for one another, that they BOTH fight to be with one another. Sanskaar literally just handed her his heart & pride when he gave her the right to choose. And she chose wisely. I am so proud of her 🤗 Ranjit was never even an option. She would have chosen to remain single...and that too just because she thought that would benefit Sanskaar in some way, but as soon as the choice is between Sanskaar & another man her reply is unequivocal: Sanskaar! Always!😳

Absolutely spot on! On one hand he took a risk, especially as she had rejected him various times and so firmly BUT his heart knows her at a much more fundamental level and they have this connect. She won't disrespect Sanskaar. Even when they were on the "outs" as such she travelled only on Veer with him, that slight deference to him, not because he is a man but because he is HER man is what I see in them 😳 Just as Sanskaar gives in to her so much- because they both put each other first. And yes, totally! There was never any choice! She just said no before because she believed it better for him but when it came to it, even if she thought her parents didn't want it, she chose him 😳

It is so good to see a couple so well matched & so worthy of one another. They are a rarity, an almost extinct species😆 But they sure have the good sense to understand what they have found in one another & aren't just throwing it all away carelessly as we see happen most often with the truly blessed.

Yes indeed- a truly soul-twinned couple no? But they do I like to think recognise that and their own good fortune in having found this 😃

So Ranjit wasn't that bad huh? I hope he stays this way & doesn't do some douche stuff by going & making fraandships with Dev🤢 How surprising nai that people like Dev. Ranjit, Pawan, were able to understand that SwaSan love one another just by seeing them together but Swara's own Pitashri doesnt get it? And how lame is he looking to Janaki for guidance in everything?! How come men like him are only able to man up when they are cheating on their wives😡 I felt so bad for Shomi today...those lines spoke volumes of how her life has been with Shekhar...always on the fringes blamed for the mistake of the son of the house And Laksh siding with Sanskaar😲 Ye ho kya raha hai? Wifey is gonna be super pissed off😆 Jo thappad padte nahi wahi sabse jyada lagte hai...Ragini ko kya jhannatedaar chaata pada hai aaj Swara ne acchi khaasi sunai, fir pati ne naiyya dubaai & end mein Sanskaar ki sarcastic smile😈 BURN! You deserve much worse😡

Bechara Ranjit- seriously the hate the man received even before he did anything. Ah very interesting observation about him linking with Dev! Very acute given how things in DK do change as do alliances and people's actions 😉. Oh yes, anyone with half a brain can see the love between those two for sure! But Shekhar? Need I say more? And well he is rather spineless hence seeking guidance from the woman who should be the ruler of his lands I do feel for Shomi too actually and hence very deliberately made her say that. Aha Lakshya- he is perhaps making amends too in his way? Has finally found (or he thinks) the right partner and sees the love too between his brother and his ex fiancee? Let us see. Oh yes of course wifey will be and was super pissed but at least it shows he is over Swara! Ragini- between a rock and hard place 😆 and how well you described it!

That whole scene with the water gardens lit up with tapers & candlelights & moonlight reminded me of the Jalte Diye sequence from PRDP😆 It was so romantic Shru I have no idea why you were unsure about this sequence. It was ethereal in its beauty. Surreal almost. Finally everything is cleared up between them. Both know that they love & are loved back with equal measure😳 Swara's dialogue about having to be both Janaki & Shomi reduced me to tears. If only parents realized how much their behaviour affects their children & influences all their future decisions Would parents be more careful then? But chalo all is well that ends well & Swara need not fear. She will not be the next Shomi, Janaki, Annapurna, Sujata, Ragini. She will be the one about whom stories will be written...such will be her love story so complete & so beautiful.

😳😳 I am so in love with the para above and below, I have re-read them so many times, I lost count! On PRDP- 😆😆 It seems those types of water sequences are in films that I think totally blah- that one and then Devdas although as you know Devas toh I really detest! 🤢 But I just wanted that soft romantic focus and it seems you clearly think I hit the right notes so I am thrilled and relieved 😳😳. Absolutely right about the effect of such parental influence on children And the lines about Swara's love story ⭐️

Most never get lovemaking scenes right. Either it ends even before its started😆 or they make it all too cheap to be enjoyed at all. But this one was just perfect😳 since it concentrates more on the love these two have for each other. It is their love which guides all their actions, hence Swara though bashful is still bold, she is willing to try & give free reign to all that she is feeling for the first time in her life, her complete trust in & surrender to Sanskaar so obvious here & naturally Sanskaar stops when he does for these same reasons😳

MORE MORE MORE!

Ahhh I began to blush reading your comments on the scene which sounds funny given the scene but its true 😳. You totally got me- I see their love as very fiery and passionate sure but the beauty of it comes from the unadulterated and sheer love, where it is all about giving and not just taking for them. Their love is beyond the physical but that itself makes the psychical so evocative and powerful and beautiful to me. I see so much beauty in that expression of such a love and of course with such a couple I like to think it would be totally natural and lovely 😳😳 As for more- who knows what we may get?! 😉


Replied in blue above dearest Lanny xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Saba1982

Whoa! Shruti you have managed to stun again. I was bracing myself after 26, thinking you are deriving a sadistic pleasure from making your audience gasp and squirm! But this is pleasantly unpredictable. Thank you and now I will resume reading. Sanskaar and Swara both are so brave in 27. Nothing could come in their way.

Hope you have recovered now.
Ciao.


Hey Saba 🤗

If you feel I have stunned I am really happy 😳. I do like it if a chapter makes everyone think they can see where things are going but the next one takes them to an unexpected direction. I think angst has its role in a story but for me I never use it gratuitously 😃. I am so glad you liked that 27 brought!

I am working on the recovery front as the injury to my ribs will apparently take some time but I am definitely better, only tired from the after effects but thanks a lot for asking and also for the comments!

Catch you again soon!

Love,
Shruti x

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: sneharay

Awesome update..
So finally everything is sorted out..everyone is agree for swasan marriage
Laksh supported sanskaar..its really nice
Lastly swasan confessed their feelings to each other.. Its great 😊


Thank you Sneha! So glad you liked it and the resolution of their confession! 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: NitaReid

I wont Res since i know i am yet to unres on the last chapter too, but the greedy reader in me read the chapter as soon as i saw the PM and i just want to say i love you Shruti and Thank you so much for the lovely update.You made my day and i have a huge grin on my face thanks to your update. Last update made me sad this update made me super happy

When i get time, i promise to give my comments to both the chapters.Till then i am so sorry for failing to do so

Love

Nita


Hey Nita 🤗

Please don't worry, I totally understand. I too have to comment on your latest update so can relate! I love you too hon and am so glad this made you so happy 😳 You comment whenever, am just pleased you loved it 😃

Love,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Helee

I m silent reader of this story. but today I can't stop my self from commenting that how beautiful your story is... 😳 after last chapter my heart was broken n I was so scared to open this one but I m glad that I read this awesome chapter. just loved it. ⭐️ you are too good. 😳


Hey there Helee (assume that's your name? 😳)

I love it when a silent reader comments! It means a lot as does your appreciation for DK! I am so glad you loved the chapter especially after the angst of the previous one! Thanks so much for this and please please do keep commenting whenever you feel like! Would love to hear from you 😃

Love,

Shruti
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: manasie23

I God I am literally dancing right now Shru!
finally the words are out aloud... the confession was so touchy and emotional... loved every word of it
And Saamvant Ranjit sounds like a decent man too for backing off...
seriously I am just in love with this update


Manu 🤗

So happy this inspired dancing type happiness! And yes the much awaited mutual confession was finally there and delivered! I am so touched by the responses from everyone 😳. I am so so happy to read of your reaction 😃

Love,

Shru xoxo
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Kamala05

What was that ? Reading chap 27 was like a roller coaster ride.
The proposal of Prince Sanskaar was the best royal proposal I have ever read.
And the make out scene after the mutual confession , I was praying literally that no one should disturb them in between 😳
Let me reread again .
Thank you Sruti for the PM .🤗


Hey Kamala 🤗

Good to have you back on the thread and am so pleased toy loved 27 and the royal proposal and the rest of the chapter too 😳. Thanks so much for the appreciation Kamala! Do keep reading!

Love,

Shruti x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Thank you Javeria 😃

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