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Posted: 9 years ago

#201

hi Shru i had goosebumps while reading wat trauma u portrayed of a girl who has beared all such things i really wish that all women of this world stay safe forever ...

waiting for next update

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shamina

@Sakkiyah

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Posted: 9 years ago

#202

My friend Shruti...

First of all sorry for my late reply.

But after reading this update I am speechless. The update was really heart touching one. All the swasan moments were beautifully written. Each sentence had it's importance. All the sequence in this update was awesome.

After that incident swara was shattered. It was a bad experience and forgot that incident was not possible for a woman. But swara's pain was clearly visible in sanskar's action. He was lost in her thoughts. He knew her. She was strong and intelligent. But this type of incident make her weak and the wounds in her heart was bleeding badly.

Sanskar is blessed with a friend like pawn. He understood his emotions. From his eyes he understood it. True friendship is a gift of God. Because in this world only few people is blessed with such a beautiful gift. True friends always read our eyes and they understand our situation.

The reunion of pawn will help sanskar into his plan.

Pawn was attacked by the robbers and he was badly injured, but he escaped from death...

And the last few sequence made me cry. 😭

The pain of swara and sanskar's helplessness...

Swara is pure soul, who always want the happiness of others. She was betrayed by her own sister, and this horrible incident, she was not ready to meet her eyes with sanskar. They avoid the eye contact.

Sanskar was crying and was asking forgiveness. And swara realized his feelings. The understanding between them is amazing

They can feel the pain of other.

And they try to heal the wounds of other. That sequence was beautifully written. 👏👏👏

But I wanted to punish Devendra for his doings. I knew after seeing swara's wounds sanskar will gave punishment to him for his doings. He deserves it.

And the title of this update was really nice.

Eagerly waiting for your next update.

Thanks for the pm

Edited by Sakkiyah - 9 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#203

Originally posted by: rashidhingra
Finally, I get to reply ❤️
Sorry Shru,couldn't comment soon, phone was not working and I just cannot make myself write short comments on such an amazing chapter!
I actually ensure that I read the chapter in total solace so as to no one disturbs me and I can grasp everything properly, the same justice needs to be done with the feedback as well!
So here I am, with oodles of free time now and a long comment :P

Hanji, let's begin *_*
Are these both characters real ? Can they make me go drooling over them even more ?
What an epic chapter!
The start, the wrath of sanskaar , the way he demolishes every person who comes in front of him to protect that beep beep devendra.
Well written 👏
The transformation from a practical general to an absolutely *I'll destroy anything and everything that comes my way*👏

How many times have I told you that you have probably crafted the best swara, the best one!
So feisty , selfless yet rationale. Inspire of the assault she went through which was way too ferocious,she still has the rationale to think and care about sanksaar. It's just sanskaar written all over her mind and heart.

The moment she utters 'Sanskaar' and crumbles, the hero is back to hold her from falling dropping his sword and his revenge against devendra. Swara is the topmost priority for him. This act spoke volumes.

Aha! Pawan is here.
I doubt quite an intriguing story to this character (thanks to the subtle hints you drop in your comments to othwr people) let's see what you have in store, you always throw some really pleasant and surprising twists ;)
I liked that part when pawan noticed swara's condition. I think it further showed how much swara went through. It was the most painful yet the most beautiful written para.
Oh so the best friend notices the changes :P Nice! I would love to see how swara and sanskaar appear to a third person. Expecting the third eye in subsequent chapters :P

The end to first part ❤️. How sanskaar is holding swara to protect her from falling apart and providing his support and comfort to her via the hold and forehead kisses.👏
I'm waiting to see how these two support each other and get each other out of this nightmare. The reasons are however very different .

Uh oh. Shekhar
I've always had a pretty biased view about him. Thanks to the plot in SR. Though your portrayal is justified to an extent, I still feel the words he spitted at Shomi and the words he used to apologise to Janki shows how shallow his thoughts and will are.
Janki well has a different aura to her. Commendable.

Aha! So the next part is swasanlicious na ?
*fingers crossed*
Take your time! I know you'll come up with a brilliant chapter.
Waiting for it ;)

My dear Rashi 🤗

Please don't do the formalities of sorry and all- mmmwah. Your lovely comments make my day and whenever you send them, I am very grateful 😃

Awww- really? You try and find quiet time to read DK? 😳😳😆

I so love these two, each time someone says they fall more in love with them, it really makes me feel so warm and fuzzy!!

I wanted a real Viking berserker, going mad and destroying and killing everyone and everything in his path so am glad most have liked that side of Sanskaar being unleashed. Thank you for liking!!!

Ahhh- you don't know how happy you make me with your comments on my Swara 😳😳. I knew I could more or less write the Sanskaar I see- I am madly in love with him- he isn't fiction anymore for me, but its more finely balanced with Swara as the one in the show sometimes isn't given proper treatment so this to me is my way of painting a heroine the way I like her- a mixture of so much and yet a perfect blend, a true soul mate for someone like this Sanskaar 😳.

Sanskaar is so attuned to her too- they are literally two bodies but one soul. I wanted to show them through Pawan's eyes to really highlight the power and beauty of their bond.

Haha- you've picked up the little bits I throw around eh? 😉 Well yes, Pawan is very interesting I think 😉. As for twists- there are plenty left in DK! The 3rd eye will be part of future observations no doubt and maybe other interactions too 😃

I am so glad you liked the end to the first part. If and when you read 19, the healing process you allude to will have begun and hope you will enjoy reading it and yes, the reasons are both very different but the pain is very much the same but then again the treatment is too 😳

Shekhar - hmm, yes, he is a hard character to like- rather like Lakshya I think. Not bad but not good enough either IMO! Janaki is truly special.

Next chapter of course up and hope it lives up to expectations!

Thanks so much for this and will await more views.

Lots of love,

Shru xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#204

Originally posted by: simsen23
Shruti...🤗

Beautiful update dear .I love the way you have portrayer each and every character.Sanskar's reaction to swara's condition was so genuine .Poor swara,she had to face too much humiliation, but Sanskar is capable to heal her.

Comparing her with the Gita was so respectful for a lady and Sanskar did that.He had already fallen for her a long ago,so her pain is paining him too.Pawan and Sanskar's bonding is praiseworthy.

Two broken souls are comforting each other without confessing their love,but they are already madly in love with each other.

Waiting for next update.
Love,
Simi

Hey Simi!

Thank you for your quick comment- it made me feel very happy you liked this so much and love all the characters 😳. I just wanted both of them to be there for each other but of course Swara needs a rock to rest again and who better than Sanskaar huh? 😃. I really wanted to show how respectful Sanskaar truly is about Swara, hence the Gita reference. Totally summed it up with your penultimate line 👏. Thank you again!

Lots of love xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#205

Originally posted by: Sakura24
Res...I have five chapters to catch up *hides* Will unres as soon as possible dearest Shru, meanwhile I just love the healing process ❤️

No worries Saku dearest, take you time- will await your views whenever. Glad you liked it! xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#206

Originally posted by: Zephyr8
The one word that can best describe this update and even the last one is overwhelming. The surge of emotions, the trauma, the grief, the pain, it cuts so deep. That horrible feeling Swara had about herself...It was tragic and yet real. Sanskar as her refuge, her shield, her comfort felt just right. He was honest with her and just them together felt...just right. You've written this chapter beautifully. There is so much they've said between them here without actually saying a lot. I always look forward to reading this story, It is one of my absolute favourites. Looking forward to your next update and thank you for the PM

Dear Sagarika 🤗

It means a lo t that you share views here and also take time to PM me 😳. I am so pleased you liked this so much. I had a lot to try and bring out so was anxious to ensure I did my best. Yes, with Swara- as misplaced as it is, victims of such abuse often feel that way- heartbreaking . I loved you saying it felt just right- that is EXACTLY the effect I wanted 😳. I always like less said in such situations, there is more impact with the feelings and actions. And whilst a lot of people put a lot of emphasis on flowery confessions, to me something like this is way more meaningful:). You made my day saying this is your absolutely favourite story- am humbled and touched 😳. I'll try to keep delivering as best as I can!

Lots of love xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#207

Dear friends, I have finally caught up with all replies on 18 (phew!) and have just made a start on 19 too! I have a work event in a short while so will need to stop but will carry on tomorrow etc, but in between reading all the comments and floating through my sleep deprived daze 😆. Thank you!!

Love to all xoxo

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Shuchi2013

@Shuchi2013

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Posted: 9 years ago

#208

OMG!!! This was AWESOMENESS👏.Loved Loved SwaSan Chemistry.!!!On fire.Then the show decides to give us a scene somewhat similar(in different circumstances)...How beautiful you described Swara's PTSD,her apprehensions,her fear,her pain and everything she felt.And Sanskar was able to gauge her and bring her out of it.Looking forward to the next one..

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#209

Originally posted by: NitaReid
Res. off to read now. 😊

Hi Shruti 🤗, i thought i had to wait till Friday for the new one and was plesantly surprised to find Chapter 19 on the title . Ofcourse i had to read it ASAP. Awesome update dear👏. I was so waiting for this one Sanskar taking care of broken Swara. And you did such a splendid job that i am so happy once i finished reading it.😃

Sushena is alive and he let them know about Swara, So two tents . Such a thoughtful loyal warriors are on team Sanskar, the way they had tried to add feminine touch to Swara tent was so awesome. Also i loved that you explained how Pawan reached there in the right time since while i was happy he reached there on time, i was curious on the how and DP spread the rumors he died to scare Sanskar army . That was so mean😆 . Glad to have pawan and Sushena alive😃.

I dont have words to express how beautiful heart wrenching it was to read about Swara and Sanskar, the way she shouted that she is dirty , i literally had tears in my eyes, such an pure soul faced with such an horrible events😭 . And i love how Sanskar assures her that she is the purest person in the whole wide world and i completely agree with him . He arranged a bath for her because she wanted it and gave her the privacy while bathing in ice cold water for himself. I love how he shows the utmost concern for Swara while not caring a inch about himself ,such an awesome person .⭐️

I loved the inner turmoil of this both, it was so painful to see Sanskar blaming himself for her state and thought she will never forgive him for letting her face such an horrible nightmare and swara didnt want Sanskar to look at her in disgust or pity.

And when Swara refused to let him touch her and Sanskar thought it was because she blames him. The his painful words & apology and finally him Sanskar who never breaks down when faced with all the worse situations breaking down it was so heart breaking to read .

I loved how inspite of being so broken Swara held his hand and didnt let him leave, they both need each other only they both can heal each other. Not just the Physical wounds but the wounds in there hearts too . I loved how they both treated each other and finally Swara breaking down in his embrace.

And the last para was too good to describe in words . I loved it so much . Thanks for updating today Shruti , it really made me so happy. Cant wait to read next chapter .

Dearest Nita 🤗

Ah yes, it was going to be Friday but I decided that sleep could wait again and managed to pull another almost-all-nighter and here was the result! You had Res'd so quick, even before my PM- you made me very happy. Thank you so much for that and for the lovely comments too Nita!

Well, Sushena is alive but barely so . But yes, he managed to pass on the important messages, bless him. Re Durga Prasad- ah well, not as amazing as Sanskaar as a leader but he is an experienced and able King so I thought it only realistic that he had a few of his own tricks to play in the skirmishes being fought 😃.

Awww- thanks for your praise on the breakdown scene and then the SwaSan comforting each other. I am so touched you liked it that much 😳. I just wanted to show how traumatised any woman but especially one who has been rather shelter and is really so innocent would have felt at that horrific assault especially barely understanding evil intentions of people like Devendra. And of course then there is Sanskaar- he would, like he said- lay his life down for her 😭 And he does really worship her- nothing would make her any less in his eyes, but of course she wouldn't know that. I wanted to show the rather natural cross connection there- with each thinking the other would be disgusted but of course even there, they were just about each other and not themselves. Exactly as you say- they both need to heal each other, only that will work for them and I wanted that to happen for them in a meaningful way. I am so so glad you enjoyed it so much Nita- I hope you will like what comes next!

Lots of love always, Shru xoxo

PS: I have to comment on your update too- please bear with me; I'll do it soon! X

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#210

Originally posted by: piccola1
Thank You Shru..was waiting to read this next ! An overwhelming read..so powerfully intense and yet so soothingly healing ! ⭐️
You weave magic with every word...👏
Res for now..as off to work.

Thank you so much Pic 🤗 Glad you liked it so much and no worries- comment whenever you can in detail, would love to read your take and thanks for taking the time to let me know! Mmmwah xoxo

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