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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#161

Originally posted by: lucky.m
Hey shruthi🤗
whoa ..what an action epi .👏👏.sanskaar's unleashed fury..that was some killing
and whoa pawan is here with sasnkaar's troops..😊 but that devendra grrr escaped😡 😡. never mind he saved himself ..or else I can totally imagine painful death he would have got in state which sanskaar was fighting ..and it was all swara ..gosh I can feel the intensity of sanskaars feelings for swara ..only she can stir this kind of emotions in him
I will wait for confession but I know its going to be epic
and how can he be so many at once ..one min the warrior, next min his concern for swara..I loved it ,like totally loved it when he dropped the sword and rushed to swara , again back to strategy of placing his men on all sides..I mean I love dark knight..thats all

shruthi ..I loved this part .🤗.I keep saying that every time😆with every update may be time to brush up dictionary to find some awesome words for this awesome knight..cant wait for next part where sanskaar would be with swara tending her

Love
Lucky

Dearest Lucky 🤗

Thank you so much for your comments! So glad you loved this! I wanted a maddened Sanskaar who would truly inspire fear but awe too! And yes Pawan is finally here! Devendra- not time for him to be dealt with yet- we are not done with him yet unfortunately. I wanted the post event to be about Swara like the fight was so did not want it tainted with dealing with Devendra and anyway, it was meant to show how Sanskaar would leave everything for her!

Oh confession- hmmm, delayed as of course they have so much now to cope with but sometimes there is confession and then there's confession no? 😉 I know I am making everyone wait and being cruel but there is a reason I promise 😃.

I love your love for the DK- cannot thank you enough for this! It really touches me each time! And you don't need new words- the sincerity shines through and I am so blessed and grateful. I will try not to disappoint you with 19!

Lots of love,

Shruti xoxo

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Swasanian

@Swasanian

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Posted: 9 years ago

#162

My dear Shruti,
I am sorry I am late in commenting-but you know time is so unrelenting.
And as for the update-oh my God. It looks like we're heading to dangerous territories now? The SwaSan bubble of the Haveli is long gone. Now they have to face the real wrath of their lives-the bare truth of where they stand.
Honestly, Shru, I don't want Sanskar to give up on his love. The notion that he possesses-of himself not being worthy enough for Swara, it is SO not true. He is beyond perfect. And he needs to see that. And now I'm sure its our beloved Princess who is going to show him that-now that she has started to feel too.
I know I am talking about a faraway future-but sorry I couldn't resist 😆
And as for the present situation, trust me if I could somehow manage to murder that wretch Devendra-I would myself do it, for the way he has treated my beloved Swara. But I am again not worried about that-I am sure Sanskar is going to punish him way more brutally than I can even sit and imagine.
I am positively happy about the fact that Pawan is here. Sanskar needed moral support-in some form. For the turmoil he must be seething with-of an impending separation from the woman who was his very pulse. It is not easy.
And I loved the way Sanskar forgot everything when it came to her-his beloved sword, his own condition-she was his first duty. Awww
To be honest, I myself am very anxious about what is to happen. Though I desperately want SwaSan together-but I know they have a lot to surpass before they can even think of being one. That is probably why Sanskar believes they have no future together. But I KNOW they do. And there are millions of in-between barriers, but one thing I believe is that love that is obtained by fighting against the world is true, pure and pristine. And if he has to fight any no of wretches to get her, he must.
The chapter was amazing-a pretty goosebumps giving chapter.
And I have nothing to say about Mr Shekhar Gadodia. I sort of marvel at the man's ability to be unreasonable. Though he may somewhere be justified, but I still refuse to even consider his sayings as anything worthy. Much like our real Shekhar in the show.
Anyway, that is all I have for now.
Waiting for the next one SO eagerly. Like I do always 😛
Lots of love,
Anu

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Mallika-E-Zain

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Posted: 9 years ago

#163

Unres pg 13

Sowwie!! Please I know I'm too late😭

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#164

Hey guys, I know I still have some responses to make and I'll reply once I get onto my laptop or in desperation the iPad:). Thanks in the meantime for the comments coming in- so heart warming to read!! Lots of love,

Shru X

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Sajiie

@Sajiie

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Posted: 9 years ago

#165

Hi Shruti ,

Sry again for being late ..the last three chapters were gripping to say the least ..awesome job dear 👏

So finally in chapter 16 u introduced the actual traitor and DKs main villain ..we were speculating about Laksh and adarsh and u gave us a jhatka 😆. And what a creep he is ..devandra and he immediately recognized Sanskar too ..that was a surprise in beginning but later u explained well it was ought to happen as they knew each other pretty well from childhood...so this monster has some serious sinister plans..he tied Sanskar as he knew his valour and our prince won't bow down .

I was so worried for chapter 16 as I thought given a situation sanskar will gave up swara for her safety ( if the stranger who came was adarsh ) and I am relieved as that doesn't happen as I am carving some more scenes of these together and looks like that is in the offering ..

This devandra is sharp as he didn't even come in Sanskars suspect list ..he might have done some clever planning ..but our hero was sure whoever has crossed him will come to him coz of the elaborate plan he weaved by setting the false trail .hats off to master planner ..will u give some explanation why Sanskar didn't think about the possibility it is someone other than Laksh ..as he must have known he wouldn't be capable of this massive planning knowing him from childhood ..or did he think someone is behind Laksh . I knew when devandra was mentioning Sanskar friend he was mentioning pawan as Laksh also mentioned him in an earlier chapter ..so pawan eventhough disliked Laksh kept an eye on him for Sanskar and they both saved him from devandra a no of times ..

When he took swara my heart was literally on my mouth but I knew this has to be done with..the helplessness and pain Sanskar felt seeing swara with devandra was so well explained .swaras main aim was to free Sanskar and although we knew she won't succeed she did try her best ..the disturbing content when devandra was mauling swara was so painful ..but it is heartening to know that Sanskar will be there by her side to heal her ..

For the first time shru one of my guess was correct ..when devandra was saying about the man i guessed it's none other than Bagri..

The way swara showed courage even at that state to free Sanskar was commendable ..and I loved that Sanskar truly respects her courage ..it was like he was giving her strength to fight back and she did what was needed ..the relief when he finally took her in his arms and that awww so sweet kiss to calm her promising her he will make everything right was so amazing ..

The last chapter 18 showed the ferocious Sanskar who literally went on a rampage ..he was hurt , angry ,revengeful as he was forced to witness swaras humiliation that too with the hands of devandra..he roared and loved it ..I specifically liked the words u used to describe him ..Demi God , superbly precise and coldly efficient ..I got goosebumps reading that part ..luv u for that ..

Devandra escaped ..don't matter at all..I hope u will give him a painful death by Sanskar or swasan together ..he deserves that shru..I loved the presence of mind Sanskar displayed to take the maps and also marching his troop out to safety ..

The way pawan entered ..don't know why I am putting him in the same league as veer ..these two awokes the same feeling in me..the smile that broke out on their face was so poignant .he knows Sanskar inside out and was quick to notice his feelings for swara and how deep it is..seeing the way he fought to avenge the wrong committed to her ...

Only one word was required from swara to stop Sanskar in his tracks to pursue devandra as she matters most to him ...I loved what all he did to swara to keep her from falling apart .even his soldiers were amazed at his new avatar as they also came to know how precious swaRa is now for him ..

Veer finally came to his master ..it would have been traumatic for him too ..Bagri is finished and pawan did the deed ...such a relief .

Eagerly waIting for next when Sanskar will take care of his princess ..now it is his turn to heal her ..

Lots of luv

Saji

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qudz

@qudz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#166

i m new to forum i have read all the parts in one go its was really amazing

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#167

Originally posted by: MusicAddict
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Sheesh Shruti!! I know I've broken all records of late unres and trust me I'm really apologetic. But the net wouldn't work properly only!! So sorry sweetheart and today that its working I've got end no. of posts to unres. So starting with you for chapter 18-

PART 1-

Sanskaar alone fought the men just like a Knight in a shining armour. He wouldn't let those men even come near his Swara. He was alone yet he was capable and strong enough to protect his lady love and also fight all the statue men out there!! Huh.. And that brute!! That filthy treacherous cheap wild animal. HE ESCAPED!! Ugh... Shru, please do me a favour. Sanskaar HAS TO KILL THIS VILE MAN. PLEASE!! And the death should be as painful as the punishment received by Prometheus, and he should DIE by Sanskaar's hands only.

Shruti, THATS NOT FAIR!! You let Bagri being killed by Pawan. I so wanted Sanskaar to KILL him. That man without a heart, that wretch, that RAKSHAS, he used to whip him day and night and Sanskaar couldn't kill him!!! That's injustice!!

Oh my! Swara was so broken. So hurt and shocked just as if its the dooms day for her and she's already lifeless. And then Sanskaar ran towards her for support. That Devendra!! I wanna say so much shit about him but this is a public forum not to forget!! Poor Shona.. which takes me to the next part again infuriating me.

PART 2-

Shekhar!!! This kalank on the name of a father. Oh God. Shru this chapter again got me swearing hard. But thank God there weren't any city buses here. Janaki is such an amazing character. She has such a royal aura and a feel of superiority that won't allow any wrong or stupid discussions around her. Just like Annapurna. These two ladies are too good. And both care for SwaSan so much.

So now, there has been injustice with Janaki uh? Such a fickle minded man, who is totally outta his senses. Bl***y idiot. Janaki is such a sweet lady with a golden heart. Totally Swara's Maa. And Shekhar ji is just as pathetic as Lux ji as he is only apnaoing Ragini.
Anyways again Apologies for the late unres.
Will be waiting for chapter 19
Love ya
Sakshi

P.S.- Thanks for the dedication Shruti *overwhelmed*

Sakshi 🤗

And now- 😡😡😡 How many times do I have repeat the- "no need for apologies" and "there is no late replies" rule?! 😡 Am I clear? 😆

Sanskaar was a literal one man army there and his rage and grief at what happened to the love of his life made him truly terrible for the enemy. Devendra had to escape as surely people didn't think I was going to write something so predictable that he would do this and then in the very next Chapter- he would be dead? 😆 I don't yet know what Devendra's ultimate fate is- have some ideas but there have been endless demands and the gist of ALL is- "painful death"- which I have duly noted 😆😆

No, no- Pawan had to kill Bagri- I wanted Sasnkaar only focussed on Swara (hence even Devendra was allowed to go) and anyway, there was a nice ring to his best friend killing the slime with Sanskaar's sword no? See Sanskaar killing everyone- those multiple men, Bagri, Dev- is all rather cliched no? Or I thought so anyway and I wanted Pawan to have a grant entry chapter too 😃 Sanskaar didn't need to dirty his hands- it would hardly be a fight with the mood Sanskaar was in no?

Yes, the whole aim was to show how Swara will now be breaking and Sanskaar must have his full attention on her only and indeed, she deserved us to feel sorry for her but also to be incredibly proud of her no? 😊

As for Shekhar- he isn't totally as unjustifiable as in the show but he is still very disappointing and it is shameful that as a father, he simply starts allocating Swara to her mother due to this crisis. Typical of weak characters- exactly like Lakshya as you say- not really evil or "bad" but just weak. But such is human nature and life huh, not everyone can be as incredible as SwaSan or even as formidable as Annapurna or Janaki, an even Shomi in her own softer way:)

Welcome for the dedication and thank you so much for your comments each time honey. Have made a start on 19, will work on it Friday!

Lots of love always,

Shru xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#168

Originally posted by: DivineDarkness
You updating???!!😔

Not till Friday hon, am working 12-14 hour days and trying to write but it's a very long and hard chapter again - sorry!! Will be as quick as I can and if I can finish before will post! xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#169

Originally posted by: qudz
i m new to forum i have read all the parts in one go its was really amazing

Hello! Welcome to the forum and to our SwaSan family! 🤗

Thank you so much for reading my story and wow- you read all the parts in one go? Am so glad you liked it and hope you'll continue to read and support DK:). Do share your name if you feel comfortable enough doing so:).

Best wishes
Shruti

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rashidhingra

@rashidhingra

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Posted: 9 years ago

#170

Finally, I get to reply ❤️

Sorry Shru,couldn't comment soon, phone was not working and I just cannot make myself write short comments on such an amazing chapter!

I actually ensure that I read the chapter in total solace so as to no one disturbs me and I can grasp everything properly, the same justice needs to be done with the feedback as well!

So here I am, with oodles of free time now and a long comment :P

Hanji, let's begin *_*

Are these both characters real ? Can they make me go drooling over them even more ?

What an epic chapter!

The start, the wrath of sanskaar , the way he demolishes every person who comes in front of him to protect that beep beep devendra.

Well written 👏

The transformation from a practical general to an absolutely *I'll destroy anything and everything that comes my way*👏

How many times have I told you that you have probably crafted the best swara, the best one!

So feisty , selfless yet rationale. Inspire of the assault she went through which was way too ferocious,she still has the rationale to think and care about sanksaar. It's just sanskaar written all over her mind and heart.

The moment she utters 'Sanskaar' and crumbles, the hero is back to hold her from falling dropping his sword and his revenge against devendra. Swara is the topmost priority for him. This act spoke volumes.

Aha! Pawan is here.

I doubt quite an intriguing story to this character (thanks to the subtle hints you drop in your comments to othwr people) let's see what you have in store, you always throw some really pleasant and surprising twists ;)

I liked that part when pawan noticed swara's condition. I think it further showed how much swara went through. It was the most painful yet the most beautiful written para.

Oh so the best friend notices the changes :P Nice! I would love to see how swara and sanskaar appear to a third person. Expecting the third eye in subsequent chapters :P

The end to first part ❤️. How sanskaar is holding swara to protect her from falling apart and providing his support and comfort to her via the hold and forehead kisses.👏

I'm waiting to see how these two support each other and get each other out of this nightmare. The reasons are however very different .

Uh oh. Shekhar

I've always had a pretty biased view about him. Thanks to the plot in SR. Though your portrayal is justified to an extent, I still feel the words he spitted at Shomi and the words he used to apologise to Janki shows how shallow his thoughts and will are.

Janki well has a different aura to her. Commendable.

Aha! So the next part is swasanlicious na ?

*fingers crossed*

Take your time! I know you'll come up with a brilliant chapter.

Waiting for it ;)