DARK KNIGHT- A SwaSan FF-T3-DELETED- AN-PG 1 - Page 16

Originally posted by: bones123

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Chapter 18

Hurrrayyy for all the blood...*wait does that make me seem disturbed and weird ? :D*...I love Sanskaar in his full beast mode ! All though this is Sanskaar pretty much does not hold the same gravitas as THIS IS SPARTAA ...that's pretty much what the emotion I've channeled into my reading of S in this chapter...

I really liked how he made sure they were safe, and used the confusion of the soldiers and troops best to his advantage ! Yes, he was not the clinical warrior here...but hey...looks like Beast On is also working quite well for him...so full steam ahead...toot toot !! Even with the increase in the number of troops he seemed least concerned, and actually egging them on !! They seriously didn't know what hit them*

PAWAN...Pawan...Pawan...*in case you are wondering what that is, it's my cheer for him*...I know you love HP...and seriously everything about him is giving me a wonderful Sirius Black feel...loveee the description !

Side note : Aakhir Pawan aahi gaya...I can now stop channeling some rakhi from Karan Arjun 😆 *mera PKJ aayega*

Louveee the easy going banter between the besties !! ❤️ In a battlefield of corpses when their humour runs high, I can't wait to see what it will be when away from all of this gore ! Me loves well done Bromance !! Pawan is exuding all the right cues...loyalty, friendship, brotherhood, perceptiveness...he really seems like a part of Sanskaar's being !

Swara 💔...the poor thing...In the beginning of the chapter I guess she's still dealing with the present and Sanskaar's chandika avatar...her mind and his mind are only dwelling on the well being of each other...sigh !! He's decimating an army alone because he wants her safe...and wants to make it all fine...and She's holding on because she doesn't want to crumble right now !! Can these two be more perfect !!

Her scream embodied all her fears and was an amplified reaction to the possibility of losing him :-( gut wrenching :-( Sanskaar's reaction to it is so amazing ! He lets it all go and is by her side, giving her the assurance that she needs...his priority only her... !! And you've put that across so well...whether it's how he acts in front of his team *hurray for merry men appearing as well*, or lets Devendra go much to Pawan's surprise...all Sanskaar is currently about...is Swara !!! Her safety and wellbeing his utmost concern !! *melt*... *him still giving precise commands to his team is something that only the best can do, and I love how you retain that facet of Sanskaar's character*

PKJ slaying Bagri...👏...pestilence is rid off in the best way possible :) and that brief communication he has with Swara is so well done...

So they are offf on their way...to the base...where the emotional unravelling will begin 😭...he's in control now because his goal is to get her there...holding on to the last vestiges of sanity !! ...but the two of them have a tough task up ahead !! as you said in your response...will be equally tough for you to write !! Wishing you luck !!

And even though Devendra escaped...i will wait for his horrendous death and toot the horns then !! btw..he turned otuu to be such a paplu...one facial gash and he's incapacitated...tsk...anyway his vile brain still lives...so i'm sure he'll plan something horrible to avenge his disgrace...eeewww !!

Part 2

Love how Janki is so regal as always...and Shekhar...uff !! I mean i get his heartache, but so quick to give up on his daughter ??!! Disappointing !!! But the best part of it was the turmoil it's caused Ragini again...will be interesting to watch if she ditches that as quickly like she did the last time...or if it causes her more sleepless nights :)

Whatayyy update Shruuu...full package entertainer ;)...and Sanskaar is back with map...horse *yahooo Veer*...weapons...and girl !!! Cannot wait enough for 19...and the coming weekend will be better for it !!

mwwwaaah... 🤗 🤗 🤗 🤗

U take care Shruti and rest it out...

Have pm'ed u my reply for the last 3 chapters...do read when u hv time

Originally posted by: maaneetfan

U take care Shruti and rest it out...

Have pm'ed u my reply for the last 3 chapters...do read when u hv time

Thank you Tas dearest! I'll be replying to your PM after my meetings mmmwah and you take care too xoxo

Chapter 18

Oh so our Ragini is seeing some sense after all..😡
She is finding her victory as hollow and meaningless..huh🤪🤔

Sanskaar..Sanskaar..Sanskaar...What can I say about him yaar.. Demigod..you are right Shru..I just love you for creating this angel of a man..!! 🤗

The way he fought..❤️ Oh my god..!! And thank god Pawan made an entry..ha ha ha..I had not expected to be so soon..😉 It was a real surprise..a real seeti- worthy one..*me whistles*😉😃
and he even killed that Bagri..👏👏👏 waah waah waah..taaliyan

Pawan already understood that Swara is the first priority to Sanskaar now..

Poor Swara, she was shocked beyond measure and she just collapsed when it all ended..😲😭 Sanskaar, who was about to go after that wretched brute, Devendra, turned his entire attention to his beloved..😳 He even covered her body from the prying eyes of the men around..I just love this man, Shru..

Shekhar is a real hypocrite..😡😡 How can he scold Sharmishta saying Swara was her daughter..I have no words for this man..!!🤢 I really loved Janki here..👏

Originally posted by: Sakkiyah

My friend Shruti...

First of all sorry for my late reply.

The update was really nice.

The first part of the update was a action film for me. Sanskar was just awesome. He was a real warrior.

He was fighting with the soldiers with a spirit.

He was in a fighting mode.

He was killing them and he was bathed in their blood.

Swara was already shattered and she was seeing the condition unbelievably.

And I must say you beautifully wrote it. It was just awesome, I have no words to describe the sequence.

The entry of pawn was unexpected.

While reading the update I just hope that the character of Devendra will be end in this update. But he escaped from sanskar's hand. But I am sure his death will be painful.

Sanskar wanted to trace him and he ordered to pawn that take care of swara.

But swara just called his name and the sword from his hand dropped there. He just ran to her. Consoled her. He knew about the situation and tried to calm her.

While reading the sequence the thoughts of pawn was same as the reader. After that scene we saw a another sanskar, who only wanted to protect her from all the evils. He just forgot about his aim. He just wanted to calm her.

Like pawn I was Also surprised by sanskar's doings. But I felt a strange happiness. They complete each other. They know to treat the wounds of other.

In the part two the shekhar's angry was visible in his dialogues. Sharmista as a mother tried to protect her daughter and janaki also tried to handle the situation.

Ragini was there and she was not happy with the victory. Because she snatched the happiness of her sister and tried to kill her. She is selfish.

Now in this update sanskar got the two parts of the map.

What will happen next?...

Eagerly waiting for your next update.

Thanks for the pm

Originally posted by: nut-kut-86

Res unrea.aap jitna tym lena chahti hai break k liye plz lijiye aur sorry mat kahiye chap 17and18 padke mujhe kya hua hai who dekhne k baad aap par kya beet rahi hogi main sirf soch sakti hoon.samjh nahin.ku ki main likhti nahin.aur aapko tho aage likhna hai.tho u need it and deserve it.and nxt update.kab bhi aapki update aapke kahani padne walo k chehre par muskaan lati hai.ab 18 chappy .who kitna aacha laga k itne kasauti k samay bhi sanky ne pehle swara ki safety dekhi.and den who jis tarh se jab sabko maar raha tha aisa laaga jaise koi sher aapne samne annewale har prani ka khatma karraha ho.kitna accha aur majestic lagraha tha who scene.bichaari swara abhi thode din pehle uski jindagi khushiyon se aur ranngo se bhaari thi aur ab use devendra jaise loogon se palla pada.aur who itna khoon dekh rahi hai yahan waha.par thik hai isse uski samjhdari aur vyaktitwa aur nikhrega aur ap aur janki ki barabar khadi reh payegi. Aur ab yeh pawan ki entry achanak se .pehle mujhe usse milne ki bahut hi jyada jaldi thi par ab uska yun achank se aana mujhe thik nahin laga .khair pawan ki aur sanky ki dosti achi lagi.aur who dialogue you left me a few .aisa laga jaise khaane ki chij ho.aur pawan ka swara ki halat ko dekhkar saar niche jhukana ache hone ki nishaani hai.waise hi shusena ne gusse hone par bhi kuch reactn nahin di thi.isliye tho who dono sanky ke saath the .jaise BIRDS OF SAME WINGS FLY TOGETHER. Par abhi bhi pawan ka loyal hona tair nahin hua. Aur ab aapne dev ko chod diya.aajib laga par .ab who jab tak nahin marega tab tak gusse aur dar mein itna ghutta rahega ki who jee nahin payega.aur mouut hi use santi de payegi.aur pawan ne notice kiya ke sanky dev ke piche jaane ki bajai who swara ko sambhal raha haj.shyad pyaar ho shayad farz ki baat ho ku ki shayad sanky samajhta ho ki swara ki yeh halt ka jimeedar who hai aur use bahar lana uski jimeedari ho .ab aapne kis tarah se likha hai who bataiyega.aur who bagri ka maarna pawan ke hatho shyad yeh hi likha ho uski kismaat mein.aur ispar rone ki bajai mein khush hui.aur horsie ke liye big wala hug aur thank u.ab ek aur baat kehni thi uske baad jarur 19 ke baad hi bolungi.promiise pakka wala.serial k villan ko tho act karte dekhte hai.aur shayad har roz tab jaake uspar gussa aata hai.par aapne dev ko likhkar hi uski taraf nafrat bhar di.shayad yeh hi kalam ki takat ho.ha yeh linee yaha kuch thik na lage.par umeed karti hoon main jo bolna chati hoon who aapko samjh main aaya hai.okes bye njoi ur brk.

Originally posted by: geetkumar

Hi Shruti,

It is said that fire destroys but people often forget fire also purges and purifies in its demonic beauty. "Anger is like fire. It burns it all clean." Maya Angelou

Kala Bhairava, is a Hindu deity, a fierce manifestation of Shiva associated with annihilation. Bhairava in human form, addressing this Klabhairava as "Lord of Time-Death" (kla) for he shone like the god of Death: "You are called Bhairava because you are of terrifying features and are capable of supporting the universe. You are called Kla-Bhairava, for even Time-Death is terrified of you."

Sanskaar reminded me of this.

I am extremely sorry. I know that I am very filmy person (can't help myself😒. What to do?) But I have been squealing with glee when I read what you have written. So finally he unleashed the beast. Good!!! He needed this purification.

Devendra escaped. GOOD!!!! You don't know how happy you made me by this. Because Sanskar would have annihilated him with one single stroke in his fury. And I did not want that. I want Davendra to live in terror of Sanskaar coming for him. And I want a cool and a collected Sanskaar who would cut him off piece by agonizing piece.😡

Finally Pawan made an entrance and what timing!!!!!!!!!

He is more of a brother to Sanskaar than Laksh and Adarsh, isn't he? Just one look at Sanskaar and he understood the magnitude of his feelings and how precious Swara is to him (A warrior who dropped is sword at the middle of the battle to console his woman). How blessed Sanskar is to have such a friend. Baghri is dead. I rejoice!!! 🥳

Swara... I still don't know what to say. I am still dreading and waiting with bated breath for her to react.

Coming to Shekhar. We as children put our parents on a pedestal and often forget that they are humans with thier fair share of failings and short comings , and become judgmental when we realise that they could also have feet of clay. That was my initial reaction when I read Shekhar's part. But no. I am sorry for being so judgemental. He is just a simple man. He was just reacting to what was presented to him and could not see beyond the face value. I am sure he is going to regret for the rest of his life when he would come face to face with the truth.

Ladies of your story, they command respect. Each and every one of them 👏

Waiting for the next chapter quite eagerly. Till than will go and read the chapter again.❤️

Originally posted by: foresight

Finally I can peacefully comment on both part 17 and 18 now.

When you said there were going to be some gruesome scenes in part 17, i was a bit worried at how gruesome this was going to get, but what you have put in there is absolutely justified. Devendra had made his intentions clear already. Sanskar saw through them. Swara was too innocent to realise it. He was planning to abuse her in front of Sanskar i expected that from the character that he is. I am happy though that it didnt go beyond what happened. As you have rightly said, both Sanskar and swara are going to be scarred for life because of this though. swara's innocence is bound to take a dent. As a woman, what she went through is not something that can leave her memory easily. For sanskar, his helplessness as preventing this from happening to swara will prick at him always. i don't think he can get away from that either. i guess that will make him a lot more protective of her (as we have seem in parts in part 18)

I liked how swara realised who bagri was having seen the welts herself. she got a sense of the deviousness of both men then...and probably also the resilience of sanskar (if she hadnt already in part 16)

Devendra revealed his true nature and it makes so much sense that he would have wanted to get his hands on the wealth and supplies that the map revealed. it wouldnt have been unlikely despite his family's alliance with maheshwaris. he seems to have ambitions and plans of his own which i am sure even his father is not all to aware...hence the need for this pseudo army.

i am glad pawan proved to be alright and came to help sanskar. i guess you will reveal soon how he found out where sanskar was as well. it was interesting the way you put in that part about pawan noticing that his friend and general wasnt the same as what he used to be earlier. while he hadnt become less effective...his first priority is clearly swara. in a way it makes it clear doesnt it, that sanskar never felt this way about kavita as well. something that we were aware of...but now it is out there for his men to see as well. they never saw this version of their general before.

i wasnt sure which way this would go re the maps. it could have very well been the case that devendra managed to snatch them as he ran away making sanskar go after him for the maps (and not just to avenge swara)...but i am glad about the way you have shown this. now when sanskar goes after him, there will be no doubt why he is doing it. it will only be for swara.

i guess next chapter will be pretty emotional for both. they need to hold on to each other and give each other comfort. of course swara needs it more. i wonder if that will finally change their equation.

coming to the palace...fractures seem to be coming in the gadodia household. i guess ragini despite being willing to do what it takes to get her prince and initially being happy (i am sure she must have been) about getting sole attention from both the mothers and her father and her husband, wasnt complete aware of the extent that this would go to...nor was she prepared for it to prick her when it did. i don't think things will change for anything sooner, but at least that prick is there in her conscience. i hope that helps her finally when she gets a change to admit her mistakes and try to redeem in some form.

now finally the one question that is still pending (i am putting the tower person on hold for now😆). who helped devendra and his men get into sanskar's army camp. because there is no way that his army would have been blind to another group entering the camp ...even if they were from alliance team...and not alerting their general about it. i also feel that while they would have turned blind eye to kavita's presence at the camp...they wouldnt have turned a blind eye if she let devendra's army into the camp. so the question remains, who from sanskar's camp, colleagues or maheshwari family made it possible for sanskar to be attacked and implicated in the theft.

sorry again for the delay...and in case it wasnt clear...i loved both parts and loved the way the story is progressing. i am always looking forward to what you will throw at us next 😉

🤗

Originally posted by: hp_2006

Chapter 18

Oh so our Ragini is seeing some sense after all..😡
She is finding her victory as hollow and meaningless..huh🤪🤔

Sanskaar..Sanskaar..Sanskaar...What can I say about him yaar.. Demigod..you are right Shru..I just love you for creating this angel of a man..!! 🤗

The way he fought..❤️ Oh my god..!! And thank god Pawan made an entry..ha ha ha..I had not expected to be so soon..😉 It was a real surprise..a real seeti- worthy one..*me whistles*😉😃
and he even killed that Bagri..👏👏👏 waah waah waah..taaliyan

Pawan already understood that Swara is the first priority to Sanskaar now..

Poor Swara, she was shocked beyond measure and she just collapsed when it all ended..😲😭 Sanskaar, who was about to go after that wretched brute, Devendra, turned his entire attention to his beloved..😳 He even covered her body from the prying eyes of the men around..I just love this man, Shru..

Shekhar is a real hypocrite..😡😡 How can he scold Sharmishta saying Swara was her daughter..I have no words for this man..!!🤢 I really loved Janki here..👏