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Originally posted by: bwvianna

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Shruti,

Update after update.!! Loving it! 😃 Brilliant chapter. I really liked the quote at the start.

Part 1: This part reminded me of how a child cries "Mummy Mummy, mujhe yeh nahi woh khilona chahiye!" and Prince Lakshya is portrayed exactly like that. A spoilt prince who wants what he wants. 👏 Really loved the conversation between the four elder Maheshwaris. Fantastic portrayal of Ram Prasad here. Annapurna's retort was awesome! Made me smile. The fruit never falls far from the tree, does it? Really liked how this scenario played out.

Part 2: It was filled with pity. For Swara, for Ragini. Both doing what they must as duty requires. That is possibly the worst thing about being royalty you know. Having no choices in such matters. They should have had some honour to say 'No' And holy crap! Sharmishtha is Janki's slave. Oh fantastic twist here! Really looking forward to how this came about. Janki is one smart woman I have to say.

Part 3: Sanskaar and his thoughts about collateral damage - Swara. 👏 Loved every bit of his thought process.

Looking forward to more updates. :)

-V

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Oh what an excellent quote to being the chapter with👏

Prince Laksh...same old predictable Princy🥱 He must have been the easiest for Sanskaar to figure out🥱 And once again we come to the age old question: What does she (Ragini) see in him?😆 Namish has played a loserish Laksh to such great perfection that it is not at all difficult to imagine Princy going all pouty when refused his toy🥱 Somehow knowing that Laksh changed his mind post the fountain scene makes it more🤢 🤢 🤢 CREEP! 😵

Annapurna is a complete Queen! What a slap to taklu👏 So yaha bhi taklu was doing something something on barsaat ki ek raat🤢 I would have used the "He ruled the seven Kingdoms but was ruled at home by his Lady wife" line but then I would never insult Lord Tywin Lannister that way🤢 (Forgive my multiple ASOIAF references. I just cannot help it in this SS😆) RP is fabulous as always, using the exact words which he knows will affect his brother. I am also reminded of Sujju saying in one of the previous chapters about how she is closer to Laksh & AP to Sanskaar. It shows! 😊 Like mother, like son😊

Janaki's reasoning is so sound. Much as we hate the concept of bigamy today, in those times it was a lot more common & first wives did think this way. You have written Janaki's acceptance of her & her daughter's situation very well. Ragini's tirade against Swara is also quite understandable when we see things from her POV. She HAS had to share too much with Swara & now losing Laksh is the final straw. Swara ain't happy either but isn't left with much choice. Like Janaki said its either suicide or marriage. But then when the marriage seems like a suicide what does one choose?😒 That is no choice at all then

How true is that line that people often treat mad people as if they were deaf & dumb too. Sanskaar is resolved. He feels no pity for Swara...or at least he is in denial of feeling anything, even pity, for her. What remains to be seen is what else goes up in the flames which he plans to kindle soon😆

Originally posted by: maaneetfan

Hii Shruts...posting this comment for chapters 2 and 3 ...haven't read part 4 yet as I have to comment on these before I read that one!

U have taken us into that beautiful era of the 1800s with ur detailed description...really hats off for doing ur homework with so much background work!

I simply love this Swara of urs...she is the delightful mixture of innocence and internal beauty tht comes naturally so tht anyone is attracted to her...even the disapproving Annapurna feels there is something to her tht evokes affection even tho unwilling...then how ever would bored Laksh stand a chance when Ragini is so typically everything that his mother and aunt are tht he is so used to. Even in the old days men have fallen for beauties tht weren't conventional...

Sanskaar's plan here to trap Laksh isn't clear to me exactly...that fountain splashing scene was sensual and it wrought the exact effect tht I thought sanskaar wanted ...tht laksh gets more and more attracted to Swara so tht he rebels against the family and then plots with Ragini to remove Swara from laksh's life so why did he feel his plans vanishing in thin air?

Whatever was described here about Kavita frankly I didn't like her character...she seemed too shallow and superficial and probably even involved somehow in the betrayal of Sanskaar though how would tht be possible since she was killed in the process is still not very clear in my mind. Her mother Kaveri tho seems a positively shady person to me...I'm not even 100% convinced of laksh's involvement in this betrayal coz tho he seems carefree he doesn't seem devious to me ... So some more mystery involved here

Annapurna is totally the Rani here...who has so much control of whatever is happening in their kingdom...she even disposed off the women involved in the betrayal of sanskaar...does she then believe sanskaar is innocent of treason??? How did she dispose of them tho...Kaveri is dead??

I love how sanskaar is already getting so affected by Swara tho his intention is tht laksh falls in love with her but at the same time he hates seeing how laksh is getting attracted...tht wet Swara scene where sanskaar wants to take her away and wrap her in a blanket was so cute...wonder when the Warrior prince Sanskaar will realize tht his heart is being lost slowly and gradually to this adorable minx of a girl!

Now I will proceed to read chapter 4 which is like an unopened surprise gift for me tht I cannot wait to unwrap!!

Lots of love
Tas

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

RES - sneaked time from office work to read 😊

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Chapter 4 - you had me at the title itselft (actually the way you name the chapters never ceases to amaze me) - there is a song by U2 - Pride (In the name of Love) and the lyrics fit the characters actions in this chapter to a 'T'.

And how the characters live up to the title: Lakshya giving up his duties for his 'love' Swara, Annapurna and Sujatha capitulating to Lakshya's demands for the love of their sons, the sisters surrendering for their love of parents, their mothers asking them to sacrifice (emotionally blackmailing them with their love), a veiled reference to Durga Prasad's less than honourable actions in the name of love, the acceptance of Janaki and Sarmishta of each other, and fnally Sanskaar, who, albeitly indirectly in the current scenario, would be causing the maximum damage - Oh the things we do in the name of love!!

And how true - most people do tend to dismiss mad people as blind and deaf too - so Sanskaar would capitalise on this factor!

Ragini's insecurity clearly emerges - she seems to be seeing a 'conspiracy by Swara' in everything that happens to her - yes indeed - she is just a spark away from being set ablaze!

Swara appearing as if Sanskaar 'conjured' her -love the 'cosmic connection'

Nyna

Originally posted by: chandanagimsy

Amazing woow..no words..sry for late comments...but yaar no words...plzz update soon...aww sanskar aldready has feelings for swara..but not recognising.. And swara has doubts about sanskar..and the way you showed between janki and shomi amazing..draupadi and subadhra.. What an analogy awesome..and poor kavitha was betrayed by laksh.. Is it really laksh or any other plzz update soon..loved it

Originally posted by: a_uma

Shruti .. its Fabulous...⭐️ ... don't know how I could have missed this..

But its good that I did.. read the chapters 1 to 4 all together today.. its dazzling writing... words fail me..

You have combined all my favourite genre in this FF ... history, romance and mystery... 😳..

Sanskar as the dark prince and Laksh as the pampered, shallow one .. Ragini as the demure yet dark princess and Swara as the golden hearted one.. beautiful depictions.. love the intriguing mystery about the map and treasure.. and also the soul connection between the dark prince and the golden princess.. ... loved the small introduction at the beginning of each part.. 👏

Can't wait for your installment.. please do continue and want this tale to take a looongg time with many, many chapters.. 😳

Originally posted by: sujoyricky

Awesome update 👏
Pm me next time pls
Hi i am sujay

Originally posted by: indrani7495

Shru...🤗

Thank you for ol the pms dear!! read all the chapters in a go!!!! N i loved it so much...this is such a different setting of swasan story...but awesome...!!😃 loved every bit of it...starting from the rajputana elegance...to d undercurrents...from how sanskar had been falsely acussed to d innocence of swara where she gets drenched !!:) even loved the bond between shomi and janki with reference to draupadi and subhadra!!! luking forward to the upcoming story n m so excited about swasan will fall for each other here...n even curious about what actually happened to the key!!😲 continue soon!! 😳

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

interesting and intriguing updates..👍🏼