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Nice update

Originally posted by: RAONE8

Nice update

so as expected Laksh in his usual bratty way has put forth his wish to marry Swara n then went on to threaten his parents!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

loved Swara's bond with both mothers

lets see whats in store for us

cont sooon

Thank you and glad you liked this chapter:). Yes lakshya behaved as he had done in the show. It's really nice to see people take to the 2 mothers angle I've got here:). More will come soon!

Best wishes,
S

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

Shru. I'll reply to all three chapters in one go! Sorry couldn't reply to them before. You've been too fast this weekend😆. So here goes Chapter 2-
Ragini having the Veena and Swara with the Sitar was a good change. The fact that Swara is equally talented if not more, was something I wanted to see. It appeared as if she's playing through her heart. Being a music lover, I can say that the best notes escape the mouths when sung by heart.When you are totally lost into the divinity of music, that is when you dislay all the elation of your heart and the song becomes so pure and mesmerizing by the same. This is what I felt by reading Swara's performance as I could imagine the same and her notes and music was so beautiful and pleasing to the years that even Sanskaar seemed affected. That was my most favourite part.

I knew it! Lakshya fill definitely find Swara more attractive and will fall for her. This had to happen. I'm sure Annapurna's always preference of Ragini over Swara will fall soon. And Shru, I don't know what is our lanning but please don't let Swara fall for Lakshya like she did in the show. That is just what I thought, now it's your wish! Anyways now coming to Sanskaar!

Durga Prasad is very horrible I tell you. He kept his own lad imprisoned for years and brutally lashed and whipped him day and night. He's Gadha Prasad!😡😡 Sanskaar is such a hero😳. He is so amazing. He was such a devotee towards his family and was such an able warrior. I'm so proud of him!😳
Loved Chapter 2! Commenting on the other 2 now!

Hello Sakshi dear! Xoxo

Apologies for my late acknowledgement but as I mentioned yesterday I wanted to respond properly and not whilst I was talking more gibberish than normal 😆

If you with your music taste and love like those parts of the veena and sitar, I'm happy! Your so right about the respective performances- Swara was truly pouring her heart and soul into it and had no thought of how she was been seen by others in doing so and in that sense she had more power to move her audience. Ragini was calculated in her effect and that I was trying to show somehow reflected in how that translated across. Swara calls to something very fundamental in Sanskaar and even her music was an extension of that, so he did not like it as he doesn't want or need that he thinks.

Lakshya acted as predictably as everyone thought he would:). Like you said it was bound to happen, he didn't even try to give ragini a real chance- the magpie was attracted by the shine and wanted the diamond. In terms of Swara's feelings for lakshya, I wouldn't worry too much, you will see what will happen soon enough, In fact in the next chapter I am already writing perhaps 😉.

Haha! Gadha Prasad! Tee hee. To be fair to him, he isn't an evil man. And the evidence was compelling against Sanskaar and there was already rebellion brewing by the prince as far as Kavita was concerned so when presented with what he was, Durga Prasad had to think like a king. As for the whipping, whilst it doesn't absolve him, he didn't expressly order torture of that form. But Sanskaar is branded a traitor and there are other forces who wanted him broken so things escalated.

Yes Sanskaar is a hero just falsely labelled a villain but hopefully he will get his justice and his reward one day:).

Thank you and will comment on your other reply shortly too:). Love,

S X

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

Now with Chapter 3-

Woww!! This chapter revealed so much! Sanskaar was never wrong! He'd been brutally and inhumanly punished for the sin he never committed. And I think even Lakshya isn't a traitor. I don't know why, maybe I'm wrong but I feel that even Lakshya din't betray him, it's someone else. That is to wait and watch! Kavita and Sanskaar interaction was more like adolescent lovers you know. I hope I'm not taking it wrong. Like a teenage infatuation. This Kaveri seems to be the main villain.
Will be waiting for SwaSan love story to start!😳

Coming to the present! I didn't get why is Sanskaar acting like mad here? Is it for coming in the Maheshwari Palace from the inhuman prison he was in? He has suffered too much for the mistakes him never did. I feel so bad for him. *praying that Swara falls for Sanskaar* To right something so brutal really requires that imagination. Shru, you wrote it so well. Sanskaar's pain goes straight through the heart, thus showing how brutally yet beautifully you wrote it. Fab job!👏

Lakshya is too immature just like the show. He doesn't realise the difference between love and attraction. Ragini's jealouy was obvious. And she ain't wrong here. Her fiance giving a flower to her sister would be such a painful stab! Lakshya is soo stupid!

That fountain incident was unexpected! Lakshya is soo chhichhora! Eyeing to be saaliji like that. As if his eyes are gonna pop out!😡 My jaan, do wrap up Swa----Lak soon ok?? I trust you! Love ya🤗

Sakshi xoxo
I was smiling reading your comment above re Sanskaar as I thought you'll see in chapter 3 what really happened and it would hopefully help put things more in perspective as far as Sanskaar is concerned. So you too think lakshya just doesn't have it in him to do the deed? Ah well you may be right or sometimes people may be particularly skilled at pretending to be simpler than they are? Wait and watch:)

Kavita and Sanskaar had a very young love, until that tragedy struck them it was not tested and so yes adolescent is right but to Sanskaar it doesn't make it any less a powerful memory. Kaveri- she has a role and it isn't the last we have seen of her.
Sanskaar is one who takes the opportunity and does what is needed. He was brought out because he is believed mad so he knows that whilst he stays mad, he can be given sanctuary and it got him out of prison. He of course wanted to be out and has a mission in mind, the being mad was an easier way than somehow trying to get him out otherwise. Thanks for liking how I wrote Sanskaar's pain- I find beauty even in that, the heartbreaking kind.

Chichora lakshya lol!!! That made me laugh! Yes lakshya lives in the moment and doesn't think overmuch. Haha I'll see what I can do to relieve you of the Swara and lakshya angle that you hate so much love!! Give me a few epis and whilst I can't rid us of lakshya I can help mitigate the pain but giving you something else you might like to focus on:)

Xoxo

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

Here goes Chapter 4-

I knew it! Lakshya was totally and absolutely immature just like any teenage guy who takes haste decision without thinking about anyone else. That's what he's doing. He fell in love with Swara in just a day or two and wants to marry her now!😡 Idiot!

I loved the relationship between Janki and Sharmishtha! No negativity. And Janki seems really a beautifully lady at heart who's quite understanding and mature. She loves Swara and Ragini eqully and has no typically soutans wali problem with Shomi. This positivity is something that I wanted.

Ragini's gonna go evil I'm sure. Poor girl. I do feel bad for her bcuz she has had much wrong but she hasn't done any. Similarly Swara, who's being forced to marry to keep the honour of the her parents.

Sanskaar inside feels pity for Swara but still wants this havoc for hsi revenge and is thsu making himself steel. Will be waiting for SwaSan confrontation regarding this!

I know the reply is short, but I gotta go and I'm really sory for the delay in reply!

Finally at your part 4 comment Sakshi dear! I think lakshya was as predicatable as everyone knew him to be so I didn't disappoint any readers there. You like the 2 Gadodia women? Unusual no to have both who understand each other and stay happy with each other? As for ragini, I tried to explain her POV but I am afraid I don't agree that she's deserving of too much sympathy. She's a victim as she wants to be. Swara could have hated the situation even more so as she was the one neglected for years and still only lives on the fringes of respectability but she takes it all so positively. Ragini on the other hand is filling with jealousy and misplaced rage. You might change your mind soon about her:). Sanskaar yes, he is conflicted and his head and heart are warring so it remains to be seen which one wins:). Pls don't be sorry, big thanks for your lowly comments. Lots of love like always xxx

Originally posted by: Meself

Chapter 2

Beautiful pictures, no matter how enchanting they look, are lifeless and momentarily fascinating. They can be adored and adored but after a pregnant while they will be forgotten and the beholder would set his unwavering gaze on someone full of zeal and life. This particular saying is true where the Gadodia sisters are concerned. Ragini is a beautiful face, she can invoke varied degrees of feelings in a person thereby unleash storms of superlative orders but after all that she subsides and falls flat because people tend to forget her. Swara on the other hand is a lively embodiment of all that Ragini pretends to be. Much like a vast, endless ocean that absorbs the river in itself engulfing its true identity and making the beholder forget that a stream was in existence once. Its maddening on one level and enticing on the other that depth and shallow should exchange themselves so intricately that at a superficial glance one often mistakes one for other.

So Ragini, like a diligent would-be-daughter-in-law is following on the footsteps of Rani Bai saa...maybe because she is trying to adapt herself to a role that she thinks she will fulfill in the suture. Poor her for she knows not how swiftly the fate is changing its design. During my tenth grade I had read a book called Sringaar or maybe something like that in my school library. The author there spoke how a true queen, among crowds of princesses were chosen. A true queen was one who could take decisions out of her own understanding; the one that needed training was not a queen material. So far Swara and Ragini, two fairly well bred and innate good princesses have made their entry in to the Mahesh Mahal. One needs to be trained to bear the burden that accompanies a crown while the other is ready.

I see Sanskaar has read between the lines intricately and this pretty much is the reason why he is tactfully avoiding Swara. She can mess up with his plans big time.

And of course the cluttered equations between Swara, Lakshya and Ragini begins. Lakshya is a very two-dimensional character. He switches between black or white as per the situation demands, boring to the hilt...Ragini is no different...she too, moves to black or white quadrant according to her wishes. Swara is different she is bordering on grays much like Sanskaar and I can see how frantic he is for his plans...whatever they are, are at a risk of exposure. Part of me thinks that Ragini's happy acceptance of Sanskaar friendship was not because she was naturally inclined at helping this mentally sick boy-man but because she wanted to show how much she was like Annapurna...full of warmth and compassion to people. And partly also because of the fact that Lakshya loves his brother.

Lakshya too has chosen to work on his stand so well. In front of these Raaj Ranis he engages Ragini as a fianc should and without the scrutiny of steady gazes he has his eyes set for a far more precious gem. I loved how you have described both the sisters. One is deep stream and other is a bottomless, unfathomable ocean with depths beyond the simple understanding of Lakshya who lacks the dash to understand either. I can see the subtle hints that you have begun dropping. Ragini is definitely not the docile girl she pretends to be. There is core of cold hidden somewhere while the other is not all sunny and bright. She too, hides a raging fire somewhere deep within.

I loved the fact that Sanskaar her is acting like those spotters that accompany a sniper. He is both but at the moment he has taken a role of the former and is so brilliantly catching the fine nuances of these women is talk. He has somewhere seen what both are beneath their respective cloaks. I can see a very shrewd mind at work. He has found an accomplice and an enemy at once.

The musical performance has to be the cherry on top of this delicious, delicious cake. Ragini was soothing in her performance. People appreciated those notes she strung on her "Rudra Veena" and added how goddess-like she looked. But Swara instigated fiery passion in the hearts of those present there with a pluck on her "Sitar", forcing them to surrender their inhibitions to her, similar to how you surrender your all to a goddess. This is where the masks on the faces of both these women are beginning to come off. One is not as perfect as she seems and other is not as flawed as people claim her to be. Sanskaar's reaction is an imperial stamp to the same.

P.S. I loved the reference to both the Veena and Sitar. The Rajputs had strong ties to the Mughals, especially the Aamer Kachwada( as Harkha Bai married to Akbar was a princess to this estate) still the royal musicians were forbidden to perform on Sitar most of the times. Sitar was considered an unholy offspring of Indian Veena and Persian Setar. In fact in some highly orthodox Brahmin families girls are discouraged to learn playing Sitar for the very reason. Maybe Annapurna's prejudice stems stronger from the seed that Ragini chose the traditional amenities and Swara embraced the influence of Mughals who in Rajput chronicles are addressed as "Maleccha."

P.P.S. I'll be back with more but before that I gotta sleep, so good night sweety!

res...will put in a proper comment tomorrow. sorry for the delay. read it and loved the part.

Chapter 4...so it happened exactly as Sanskaar had planned...Laksh falling badly for Swara and even in tht era of meek submission and duties to the kingdom he decides to offer for the elder sister...I think it doesn't matter about the era we are in but men have always had a kind of superiority where they can decide over the major decisions of their lives and women can't...at least not always and in all circumstances even in today's modern age...and in Swara's case definitely not in the 1800 though it is rather commendable how she protested. I kind of felt Ragini's pain tho I know she is very likely to turn negative soon and may even physically harm Swara but to have ur dream snatched away from u however petty or silly it may seem but in tht day and age marriage to a suitable man was to be the general dream of all women and here she is a princess and he a prince much above her status so if she feels Swara is usurping her position and happiness I wouldn't say she is wrong...only tht obviously Swara wasn't doing it deliberately or even willingly...she probably never realized tht her inherent sweet and carefree and bubbly nature is so attractive sply to the opposite sex...heck even Durga prasad likes her better than Ragini!

Sujata will be Sujata as I said before ...hahaha...however it's really nice to see Ram prasad to actually quieten her as well as offer his opinion so freely to his elder bro...

Aah Annapurna is being wise by giving in to laksh's demand as she doesn't want another Sanskaar created...but does she really have any idea what and who the true Sanskaar is???

Coming to the gadodias ... So I expected Janki to encourage Swara to accept the proposal of laksh ... She is a wise one too and knows very well how women have to bow down to the whims of men ... She having done so for her husband too...her position I equally feel sorry for as Ragini...how can she help if her husband loves another woman...in this modern society they would hv just divorced and spared a lot of pain but in those days polygamy was not unheard of but in fact quite common...I'm bit surprised this Rana DP has only one wife???

I'm wondering if Swara will bring herself to like laksh in tht way since she is now resigned to her fate?? Or will she try to convince him tht she doesn't love him and he should marry Ragini?

Now what I'm really waiting for is what will Sanskaar do next ... Instigating Ragini seems the most logical thing as he is always looking for his Dulhan dost...but how and in what way will they plan their evil acts??

Loving the mystery and yet its similarity to the basic plot of the actual show...beautifully written each part!

Lots of love and waiting for the next one
Tas

Res