Originally posted by: vaishnavi77
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Viji🤗🤗
This piece is just BEAUTIFUL! ( I know, the word beautiful seems so cliche, but , despite an array of synonyms to the same, my mind just refuses them! Simply because, this is just Beautiful!!!)
The current track of Swaragini...naa Swar hain naa Raag hain..sirf Bakwaas aur Lakshya hain!
Stupid Swara..* No adjective can probably describe right* Lakshya and Astute Ragini, makes me skip the sheer torture!🤢
This piece is like the first drops of rain that provides hope to the barren land! Something, i am very sure, the entire Swasan fans are eagerly awaiting!
Loved the intro part where you have voiced what most of us are feeling and what we want to be , instead feeling and ofcourse, hands down on the Swasan kids dedication! I truly appreciate your dedication regards this (in either ways, u take.😛).
PART 1- An amazing flow of emotions and full of nostalgia.👍🏼
* The description of the Sun rise, i could visualise the gradual change of colours and magenta seeping in!
*The different words to blue. 👏 Blue happens to be my favourite as well😊
You teach us so many words along with your beautiful writings! Vocabulary enhancer as well a thorough pleasure, your works are.
*I truly wish Swara on the show could be as absorbing and observant with her brains intact!
*In any other man, perhaps, the final emergence of his formerly barricaded heart, would have accompanied with the unreasoning, mindless need for the one who made his heart beat again. - How I wish, this simple fact could pass through to even the most brainless!
* Lines like - For Swara, he was a die-hard loyalist; ...his potent adoration for Swara, was destined to his salvation and damnation, both; ...He knew one thing, he could cleave himself into two... Transpires the depth of emotions that a heart deep down carries!
*Loved your tea references and melancholy case of the blues...Just the way u draw an entire scenario that befits your character description👏
PART2- The mending of relations, in true sense!
*Sujatha's lips curved in a derisive smile-- Jiji's "Sundar ,susheel Marwari bahu!" - How Sujatha's it is..I could read that in her animated way 😆 . And her attempts to be a ruling saas, getting sevas from bahu..😛
* Hands down on writing my most favourite part of the story- "Scalding of Lakshya!"😉
Here, you have kept your Swara a little mellowed..I wish she was more outrageous u know, like probably spilling the hot milk entirely on his body..not just the face!
His assumption on "NO" meant "Try harder" - So typical a mindset of people like Lakshya!
Reminded me that, maybe, Lakshya is entirely not a fictitious character.😲😡
PART3- The true colours arise!😊
Very well written, dreamy and creamy (soft and gentle)
*The romance is seen from the very beginning. I have always been a fan of subtle romance and this was just a treat for me!🤗⭐️. The way Swara reminisces about Sanskaar and waits for him to the emotions evoking her heart when he hugs her. (Like Swara and Sanskaar, I too just chose to ignore Lakshya😆)
*The amused tolerance of the Maheshwaris.😳 Wish this scene plays out in the serial , as well, someday!
*..."He held his whole world within his arms" - It felt so satiated to read that!
*The sun choosing that very precise moment to break through the clouds just the way warmth seeps in to their hearts!😊
*"Sometimes,after all, the most powerful things are the ones you can say, without really saying anything at all..."- I loved this line, Viji🤗
The way u have written this piece as a realisation of Love and how it has been voiced out without words and Yes, 'I love you' would be on the way ,but, till then let us leave them to bask in glory of their new found colours!
An exceptionally heart-warming piece⭐️. So subtle and yet clear! Also loved how your titles were not just apt, but, were rhyming as well👍🏼. My favourite was "Green eyed goons and scarlet wounds"😆
As always, keep writing more and more and many more!
Anupamaa
Iss Pyaar Ko Kya Naam Doon
