Undone- A SwaSan TS- The Comprehension Series, Part 3 (Final)

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: SONAL30
Hey shru
So soo sooo beautifully written👏
Loved swara's journey
They way she has discovered her true feelings fir sanskaar
sanskaar's anger was also justified it was needed to tell swara ki she is taking him for granted n he is also a human who has emotions...so his outburst was justified
Loved their small sa separation...it helped swara to understand her true feeling n finally she had crossed that line whichvshe has drawn between them...the line between frdship n love❤️
She also told lux ki now she has moved on
N she had arranged a dinner date to confess her feeling...aww so cute but sanskaar is great he ruined her surprise
Loved her confession n his taunt pta hota toh pehle ho chala jaata🤣really sanskaar
So finally SwaSan became one
Loved it shru🤗

Sonuuu 🤗

Thank you so much for these lovely words- love reading your analysis on my writing! I so want Sansku showing some remoteness in the show- Swara needs distance to realise! I wish she could jhapaat Lux! I also wanted to make a joke about the kheer but it was getting too much 😃. And yes Sanskaar and his sarcastic humour- had to be done! So happy you liked this Sonu xxx

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CarpediemRose

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Posted: 9 years ago

#32

Wow Now only ,i read ur second one and the time ,I saw ur third one and landed here to read it,I am completely mesmerized,it was just so very sweet👏👏👏

Lovely piece of writing dr,I was lost in reading ur amazing artistic works that tends me to call Sanskar as Pretty than handsome as per Emma the novel ur work made me love Sanky more than anything,literary works are my favourite ones as it turns out to be my hobby to read books as my study is concerned with Literature of the English language as a lit student ,I am dead sure ur work is one of the promising literary works that could be engraved in the history for it's majestical outlook and awesomatic progressive splendid thread making of the protagonist characters,just loved it a lot👏👏👏

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DarkPhoenix93

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Posted: 9 years ago

#33

What a wonderful writer you are! You had me speechless after reading this OS!

The way you wrote about Swara and Sanskaar's pain and turmoil is beautiful. I loved the last couple paragraphs where Swara was sure she has lost her chance with Sanskaar and Sanskaar's burgeoning hope.

Loved the P&P quote at the end. P&P is one of my favorite Jane Austen's books closely followed by 'Emma'. Sanskaar does remind me of Darcy now that I think about it and Lakshya reminds me of Bingley due to his weak mind. Ragini, however, is nowhere as nice as Jane.

Loved reading this and am eagerly waiting to reading more!

Edited by bloomnskyrules - 9 years ago

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Smilelicious

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

Shruti a big hug from my side to you for this marvellous piece of writing 🤗
As i always said you are so good at describing the inner feelings and turmoil of every character in your story 👏
This separation was needed for both of them, but especially Swara. Sometimes distance lets you know who is worth keeping, and who is not 😳
Swara was finally able to declare her love to Sanskar❤️ And Sanskar ne sahi kaha, his trip and distance made her realize how much Sanskar mean to her, to wo pehle hi agar chala jata to yeh sab na hota 😆
You are so talented Shruts, keep writing 😳

Edited by Smilelicious - 9 years ago

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a_uma

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

totally awesum... loved the final part of your series.. and I have to say I want more, more, more... of swasan's story.😳.. please keep writing.. 👏👏👏

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: kubare
Shruti darling...do I need to say anything...like really because there truly aren't enough words to say how much I loved it...and what a beautifully fitting end indeed to it all...

Love love love how you are great in detailing their respective emotions and thought process...awesome that ...and the subtitles ...Perfect!!!

Loved loved loved my Sanku baby...and you truly get him...you do...those letters you wrote in his lieu...had made you closer...

His trusting her but hurt on her behalf...so him...hate seeing her hurt...ruining her life in the games her sister and his bro have got her involved in...hate seeing her not living her life for herself...his selflessness...love...that's him...that's love...

Loved Swara getting in touch with what she Truly truly truly wants...not for her family..his family or her sister but for herself...her happiness...loved loved loved that alot...the unravelling...of her emotions...well done...

Coming undone indeed...both of them...

Her damn bursting...with his...words of ending their relationship...his being skeptical...and then...bliss

The humour you bought into that scene loved it to bits...it was so them...

Sanskar...does gave a touch of Darcy but..he's Copperfield too...Heathcliff too...

Then your ending with that quote from "Pride & Prejudice" sigh...one of my all time favourite book that I must have read a million times... Was the frosting on the cake...

Such an apt quote to use on them..

Krishna my sweet! 🤗

You are too sweet and kind to me- thank you hugely for your words- am touched!Yes, Sanskaar is the perfect combo of various amazing heroes and sanskaari indian style in addition! Thankfully not the destructiveness of Heathcliff with Swara though- I really don't like Heathcliff- morbid fascination is how I describe my endless interest with Withering Heights! P&P- yes, my fave book too and I just felt those words were so applicable to both SwaSan in this story. Thanks again for this xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: rerose
Wow Now only ,i read ur second one and the time ,I saw ur third one and landed here to read it,I am completely mesmerized,it was just so very sweet👏👏👏
Lovely piece of writing dr,I was lost in reading ur amazing artistic works that tends me to call Sanskar as Pretty than handsome as per Emma the novel ur work made me love Sanky more than anything,literary works are my favourite ones as it turns out to be my hobby to read books as my study is concerned with Literature of the English language as a lit student ,I am dead sure ur work is one of the promising literary works that could be engraved in the history for it's majestical outlook and awesomatic progressive splendid thread making of the protagonist characters,just loved it a lot👏👏👏

Jenny 🤗

Thanks so much for this sweetie, you liked it so much? Really glad. Ah- you are an English Lit student too? And as for my work being literary- 😆, most published authors would freak out but thanks for the compliment, really hope to finish my TV show script I have been working on with a friend and maybe write something else too one day that will get published 😳.

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules
What a wonderful writer you are! You had me speechless after reading this OS!
The way you wrote about Swara and Sanskaar's pain and turmoil is beautiful. I loved the last couple paragraphs where Swara was sure she has lost her chance with Sanskaar and Sanskaar's burgeoning hope.
Loved the P&P quote at the end. P&P is one of my favorite Jane Austen's books closely followed by 'Emma'. Sanskaar does remind me of Darcy now that I think about it and Lakshya reminds me of Bingley due to his weak mind. Ragini, however, is nowhere as nice as Jane.
Loved reading this and am eagerly waiting to reading more!

Sapna, thanks so much yaar- what can I say, your making me 😳. Yayyy- another Austen fan! Oh God- you find Lux like Bingley too? A bit weak, not essentially bad? Although in the present track Lux is behaving like a cad a la Wickham 😡.

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: a_uma
totally awesum... loved the final part of your series.. and I have to say I want more, more, more... of swasan's story.😳.. please keep writing.. 👏👏👏

Thank you so much Uma. I want more and more of SwaSan too so you will get more stories as soon as I can write them, never fear 😃