Undone- A SwaSan TS- The Comprehension Series, Part 3 (Final)

medha

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Posted: 9 years ago

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I deleted my entire inbox. Had to stalk your posts to find this one out.😕

Shrutu🤗,

I felt like hiding behind the couch when I read the argument portion. Felt like eating chocolate when I read the confession portion...and felt like flying when I read the realisation portion.

Exactly, in future Sanky will go on business trips whenever he needs to manao his wife😃 aise hi maan jayegi. Great idea.😉

I loved how this Swara came off her high horse and firmly told the villain duo to back off. I loved how Sanky firmly told her ki mujhse nahi dekha jaata ki tum apne worthless behen pe life barbaad karo...and showed her finger in the eye...that if she does not harbour feelings for Lucky any longer..and feels anything in the romantic genre for him...then she will have to do something about it. He can't be Friendzoned any more.

Brilliantly written Shruti. Loved the dialogues especially.

Love--

Medha.

PS: and the Darcy quote.😃 Boogie Woogie awesome fit.

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Zephyr8

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Posted: 9 years ago

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I loved your story ..beautiful

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Sharon

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Magical and truly romantic!! No more words. 👏

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Hey Shru...😊
What a nice way to start getting over jet lag😉Read this first thing as I woke, still grappling to adjust back to home time, and it really was a treat, Shru.

As always, your very detailed descriptions of what both Swara and Sanskaar are thinking and feeling, was spot on. I really respect the amount of effort you put in your works. Writing, as you know, is a passion for me too, and it is a joy for me to see it being treated with so much dedication. Hats off to you for that, dear.😊

I particularly liked your chapter sub divisions, "more unraveling " ; "more of the unthinkable" and then finally coming to the undone.😊Those little imaginative nuggets sometimes stick in my head long after I've finished reading.

And the P&P reference👏👏I dunno if you remember Shru, we (you, Shruti (Lannister), Pic and I) had this discussion long time back on which character from a novel would best describe Sansku. We were kinda agreed on a combination of Darcy, Captain Wentworth and the Count of Monte Cristo😉As for Mr Darcy, the quote you referred, is SO Sansku. Echoes of his unforgettable dialogue "pyaar kab kyon aur kaise hua, pata nahi! Tumhi se kyon hua, pata nahi! Iss pyar ka koi manzil hai bhi ya nahi, pata nahi!!"

I still get goosebumps when I remember that scene😊Keep shining Shru. Reading Medhu, Niki and your works always brings me a ton of joy.

Viji🤗

Bet you are glad to be back to base?! Glad you read this as ever and left me your much sought feedback too:)

I have just decided to accept that I do detailed and not beatmyself up over it- somehow thestory has totake full shape in myhead and reading your kind words about that made the hours spent sitting with my back cramping worth it😃.

Oh those sub-divisions- itwas getting long and so Ithought to split it and that just came to me. It issort of reminiscent ofyourexcellent chapter splitting in some ofyour work:).

I very much remember the P&P and other memorable heroes discussion Viji! We had so much fun na?! And yes that line is Mr Darcy but here I thought it finally fit both of them, as at least in my mind I could make Swara get to where we want her! That scene was epic- still love it.

Notsurprisingly my list of people's fictions to must read is identical to yours but with my name swapped for yours😃

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Mallika-E-Zain

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Man Shruti I'm speechless trust me!
This whole series is a masterpiece and u have en carved it with total perfection, beauty and elegance seriously!
Loved it from the core of my heart!
Thank u for this one yaar

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naran1986

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Hai..beautiful.My swasan confessed their love in such a sweet way.
beautiful story with a absolutely wonderful and satisfying ending.kudos.

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: trisha09
Speechless... No words to say... It's just awesome keep writing more... Love your work

Thank you so much Trisha dear x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: manasie23
I cannot fix on the hour, or the spot, or the look or the words, which laid the foundation. It is too long ago. I was in the middle before I knew that I had begun." Pride & Prejudice- Jane Austen

Well Pride & Prejudice, one of the first book I've ever read. And well this quote is one of my favs.
To begun with your Oneshot it was well thought and penned down, though reading dialogues in hindi sometimes makes it too cheesy but nothing expresses better than our Hindi language dialogues.
And I do hope that our Swara in serial also realises her love as soon as the one in your writing.
Well one thing to be precise we all want Sanskaar to vent out his frustration in front of Swara but in the serial he is bottling them up which is indeed frustrating us. Wish he vents out his feelings soon.
Shruti please do keep on writing & writing forever.😳

Manasi 🤗

You started your reading journey with Austen- you can't go wrong then! P&P has some amazing quotes, I know loads of them by heart, given the no of times I have read it 😆.

Thank you for liking this series. Re the hindi dialogue- I find it so much easier to write in English. I have self taught myself hindi as my mother tongue is Gujarati and we learnt English from day 1 plus Swahili as we lived in Kenya. So whilst I am fluent in Hindi, writing dialogues in it is quite hard work but for some reason, when I think on the story, I have to imagine the dialogues as we would see/ hear them on screen, hence the hindi 😊. I so wish we see Sanky growing distant from Swara to make her realise and hope she doesn't take too long now as I am impatient!!! Thanks again M, of course I will write more and harass you all to read! 😉 xoxo

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Sanavi

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Perfect ending to a perfect series.
I loved the fact tht only SwaSan were the characters here. U shown other characters in flashback. Throughout SwaSan only.
Plz write more

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sonal

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Hey shru

So soo sooo beautifully written👏

Loved swara's journey

They way she has discovered her true feelings fir sanskaar

sanskaar's anger was also justified it was needed to tell swara ki she is taking him for granted n he is also a human who has emotions...so his outburst was justified

Loved their small sa separation...it helped swara to understand her true feeling n finally she had crossed that line whichvshe has drawn between them...the line between frdship n love❤️

She also told lux ki now she has moved on

N she had arranged a dinner date to confess her feeling...aww so cute but sanskaar is great he ruined her surprise

Loved her confession n his taunt pta hota toh pehle ho chala jaata🤣really sanskaar

So finally SwaSan became one

Loved it shru🤗

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