SwaSan OS:UNSPOKEN - Page 4

Originally posted by: bgscribe

Hmm.. having mixed feelings. When I first saw addressed to Kavita, I felt like a privacy intrusion. But then this is Swara who is reading. So not so bad..

Then the way he talks about Swara to Kavita, like she is the only one he can open up to: that part part was heart wrenching.

Originally posted by: NAVI55

Beautiful👏

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Brilliant Medha. Just amazingly brilliant. This is one more of your pieces which reduced (or maybe elevated?) me to tears. It was so poignant, so moving, so full of pathos. Just as with your "Letter from Sanskaar to Swara", I started swallowing hard to clear my throat and had quite a few tears rolling down my cheeks.

And my dear, let me assure you, I am not a cry baby 😊. I am a Cancerian all right, emotional and a bit crabby at times, but I don't cry at the drop of a hat while reading something. It does take something this special to get me started! The last time I boo hooed while reading (before your 2 works here I referred to), was for Kite Runner and A Thousand Splendid Suns by Khaleid Hosseini (both of which left me with a bittersweet melancholy for days on end...)

What I really loved in this piece was, in between all that melancholy, there were nuggets of dialogue which were sparkling and witty as well. Made me smile through those tears of mine. ""both the sisters need psychiatric therapy. One is a murderer, another has a built in guilt and greatness complex". Truer words were never spoken, Medha 😊

And this one brought out Sanskaar's tragedy perfectly: ""Even when she acknowledges that I'm her sole support and her best friend..she still has never tried to return the favour Kavi. Defend me yes. But that she does for everybody.

I am still everybody to her Kavi. I am nobody. Yet we are married. Told you its funny.""

It is funny, Medha...it really is, in a morbid way...I don't know why I cried the hardest when I read that though...

And apart from the pathos, there was so much desperate loneliness, which you portrayed so well. The supreme irony is, that Sanskaar was able to climb out of that morass of bitterness and pain and hate at Kavita's death, because of Swara. But instead of being able to move on with Swara to happier times, he is now stuck in limbo, turning to his dead first love for company, while the love of his life seems to be willfully ignoring his feelings in the interest of the "greater good".

You just nailed that utter sense of isolation with these words ""I wish you were here Kavi. I want to talk to a friend again. My wife may hear..but she won't listen. She won't understand. Me and her are galaxies apart, even in the same room. Its suffocating..the space between us.""

That para will haunt me for a long time to come, Medha. I hope you would understand, when I say that I might actually prefer to forget those sentences...😕 but your writing is so powerful, I won't be able to.

Am just so glad Swara came to her senses, and the ending portrayed them being happily married for 3 years, with all this behind them. That was a lovely touch too, you saying that Sanskaar had not made any journal entries after this one, since his wife had, finally, reciprocated the intense love he felt for her.

Kudos for this piece, my dear friend. Always keep writing so beautifully.

Originally posted by: medhasarkar

I keep becoming very happy when you say i made you cry viji😃

I almost became dehydrated when I read those two novels...so samepinch. Mom finally had to snatch them away.😆 She had absolutely no idea as to why I would wanna read something which made me act like a human hosepipe.😃

Thank you so much..and I'm so glad you liked it.

Yes, it is ironical that he has to, in desperation turn to his old, dead love..because obviously nobody else came close to deciphering him.

I seriously hope Swara does someday. Well, nobody completely understands a person in the course of a few days..it takes a lifetime. they need time to fall in love.😳

I am going at snail's pace replying to everybody..because darjeeling has like terrible Wi-Fi everywhere. Won't be back before Saptami.

Originally posted by: gayu6

Really awesome. U have described sanskar's feeling more which made us to cry. Its really emotional. He want his love his friendship he want hope understaniding and peace. Finally she will give more he deserve.

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Oh and I forgot to put in my comment yesterday that the end really lifted my spirits up. After feeling so moved and upset for Sanskaar I felt the hope and happiness that it had worked out for them and silly goose Swara now fully appreciates him like she should:) Perfect! Sorry on mobile otherwise would have amended by previous comment! X