SwaSan OS:UNSPOKEN - Page 2

Ahhh the pathos- so perfectly put and each word is rapier like but totally 100% effective and true. Swara is captured in this letter so accurately, it doesn't lose or diminish her essence but as per the current very frustrating track, this says it all that should be said! Ironically, I wrote a letter from Sanskaar to Lakshya and then read it- it has managed to calm me down a lot. It was cathartic for me- thank you!

Beautifully written medha👏

Medha, my dear...😃.

Hmm.. having mixed feelings. When I first saw addressed to Kavita, I felt like a privacy intrusion. But then this is Swara who is reading. So not so bad..

Brilliant Medha. Just amazingly brilliant. This is one more of your pieces which reduced (or maybe elevated?) me to tears. It was so poignant, so moving, so full of pathos. Just as with your "Letter from Sanskaar to Swara", I started swallowing hard to clear my throat and had quite a few tears rolling down my cheeks.

And my dear, let me assure you, I am not a cry baby 😊. I am a Cancerian all right, emotional and a bit crabby at times, but I don't cry at the drop of a hat while reading something. It does take something this special to get me started! The last time I boo hooed while reading (before your 2 works here I referred to), was for Kite Runner and A Thousand Splendid Suns by Khaleid Hosseini (both of which left me with a bittersweet melancholy for days on end...)

What I really loved in this piece was, in between all that melancholy, there were nuggets of dialogue which were sparkling and witty as well. Made me smile through those tears of mine. ""both the sisters need psychiatric therapy. One is a murderer, another has a built in guilt and greatness complex". Truer words were never spoken, Medha 😊

And this one brought out Sanskaar's tragedy perfectly: ""Even when she acknowledges that I'm her sole support and her best friend..she still has never tried to return the favour Kavi. Defend me yes. But that she does for everybody.

I am still everybody to her Kavi. I am nobody. Yet we are married. Told you its funny.""

It is funny, Medha...it really is, in a morbid way...I don't know why I cried the hardest when I read that though...

And apart from the pathos, there was so much desperate loneliness, which you portrayed so well. The supreme irony is, that Sanskaar was able to climb out of that morass of bitterness and pain and hate at Kavita's death, because of Swara. But instead of being able to move on with Swara to happier times, he is now stuck in limbo, turning to his dead first love for company, while the love of his life seems to be willfully ignoring his feelings in the interest of the "greater good".

You just nailed that utter sense of isolation with these words ""I wish you were here Kavi. I want to talk to a friend again. My wife may hear..but she won't listen. She won't understand. Me and her are galaxies apart, even in the same room. Its suffocating..the space between us.""

That para will haunt me for a long time to come, Medha. I hope you would understand, when I say that I might actually prefer to forget those sentences...😕 but your writing is so powerful, I won't be able to.

Am just so glad Swara came to her senses, and the ending portrayed them being happily married for 3 years, with all this behind them. That was a lovely touch too, you saying that Sanskaar had not made any journal entries after this one, since his wife had, finally, reciprocated the intense love he felt for her.

Kudos for this piece, my dear friend. Always keep writing so beautifully.

Really awesome. U have described sanskar's feeling more which made us to cry. Its really emotional. He want his love his friendship he want hope understaniding and peace. Finally she will give more he deserve.

Originally posted by: princess_tara

lovely OS

Originally posted by: Sakura24

I've been breaking my oath of silence repeatedly these days😆

Can't keep myself from commenting😳

Don't worry Sanskaar's charm will surely work in the end, Swara has to fall, the hardest the best😃

Oh and I forgot to put in my comment yesterday that the end really lifted my spirits up. After feeling so moved and upset for Sanskaar I felt the hope and happiness that it had worked out for them and silly goose Swara now fully appreciates him like she should:) Perfect! Sorry on mobile otherwise would have amended by previous comment! X

Originally posted by: RK-ki-Kaneez

Beautiful and heart touching I actually felt sanskars pain through this his pain of being neglected and ignored by the person whom he loves great work