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piccola1

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Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Wow Medha..this caught MY heart and squeezed it, you have written it so beautifully !👏 Your oneshots are so excellently written, you can literally SEE them roll out..wish wish wish this could be the screenplay the serial folks would pick up and use !😳

I love the way you have depicted Sanskaar..so needy of His desire to comfort and love Swara, so insecure of their future, so resigned to Swara not loving him..and so frustrated with Lakshya.

And Swara...her confusion, her being torn between ehat she knew of herself and what she is still to know of her current self, absolutely spot on !

Lakshya -can u just leave these 2 together please !

Can I request you yo make this a TS and give it the dream climax it sooo deserves? Pwetty pwease?😳

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shumna007

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Posted: 10 years ago

#12

very nice writing. Look forward to reading your take Shruti. Please do write more often. ⭐️

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Lumos_18

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Posted: 10 years ago

#13

Okay, I'm gonna assume that this was what had actually happened 😳

It would give my crazy, swasan obsessed mind a lot of peace.😃

As usual you nailed it. It was really beautiful, especially Sanskar'a thoughts. 👏

Sanskar's monologues are something I never get tired of reading, and something I haven't attempted to write yet.

He seriously scares me with all his layers and shades. But you always write Sanskar to perfection.

Hats off for that. 👏

Please do write more. It's always a pleasure reading from you. 😊

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The.Lannister

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Posted: 10 years ago

#14

It is gross, isnt it? You could have planned n plotted the next day. Pretty presumptuous of lux to unmask everything tonight now that HE finally suspects something is wrong.

Sanskaar is in so much pain 😭 they could have easily incorporated all these things into the episode, varun could have shown all these emotions quite well. But of course all they concentrate on is more drama. Really a heart wrenching description of what sanskaar is feeling.

Edited by The.Lannister - 10 years ago

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SantaClaus

@SantaClaus

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Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Hello 🤗

I am new to this forum , (and the show too 😛 ) , and had been reading the fan fictions in the forum tirelessly , over the weekend 😛

I must admit , this forum is full of so many gifted writers .

I always felt that the quality of TV shows are deteriorating because the writers are over-worked due to deadlines and all . But you guys , although busy with your own work , come up with such master pieces , then why cant the so-called creatives come up with such ideas, instead of catering the same old story over and over again? 😕

Ok,enough of my ranting 😛

I wish something like this happened in the show 😊

If you dont mind me saying this , please continue this OS into a SS or atleast TS 😛

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naina

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Posted: 10 years ago

#16

I loved your os..it was awesome..👏👏👏

sanskaar's inner turmoil was wonderfully portrayed..

and loved the way you wrote about swara's feelings..

please write an ss on how swara and sanskaar's relationship will move forward in the serial..would love to read it 😃..i know u would do full justice to it..😊

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medha

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Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Shruti,🤗

I loved loved loved this os. Thank goodness today is a Sunday..I can read this in peace.

All of the reactions were captured so nicely...and powerfully. I liked sanskaar's descriotion best...although Swara was not far behind.

This can be my canon of a missing swasan scene..because its most certainly never going to be shown in the show.

The old flame returning...and the husband's possesiveness...as well as the fact that the new love is blooming between them, which happens to be way more powerful and deep than the one before...all of it was expressed in your usual detailed manner.

love--

Medha.

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Jalebi bai

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Posted: 10 years ago

#18

I LOVED THIS ONE! <33

I really liked as this was mostly based on sanskar's point of view, on what he feels with this current things going on. Really liked how you potrayed a bit of his jealously after laksh entered the room. <3 Emotions are feelings-Literally. When i was reading this, I felt emotions in my body as tingles and muscular tension😆 Tingles coz the way sanskar wanted to Punch laksh right away but unfortunately he can't. He loves swara so freaking much. And tension coz i was bit afraid on how swara feels for sanskar. Glad she told sanskar not to leave her alone in the room with laksh.😳

Do write more.x

Love and kisses for you, from my side. 🤪 🤗

Edited by Breezy- - 10 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 10 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules
An awesome fic! Loved how Sanskkar wanted to protect Swara in the beginning and loved Swara's thoughts at the end about Sanskaar being her anchor. If it's possible, do continue this please. Otherwise please write more SwaSan fics

Thank you for liking it! I'll see if I can extend this to 2-3 shots more or maybe do another OS soon once we see what is happening on the show:) I have a few other stories written, if you wanted to read them? I can scrap you links or they are also added on the SwaSan AT page? Thanks again!

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 10 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: inlieu
Oh Wow! Awesome! I can totally picture this happening in the show, but don't know if the CVs will have the sensitivity to show this kind of thing the proper way.

Thank you ji! Ha- on the actual Swaragini SuperFast Express as I call it, the CVs are too busy showing endless drama with twist after twist, they don't have time to explore nuances:)

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