Maelstrom- A SwaSan One Shot

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Razia Ajmal

@raaz19

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Posted: 9 years ago

#71

Wow that was just beautiful and it cleared so much of the confusion they must have felt at the time...nicely written as always...

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IAdoreYou

@IAdoreYou

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Posted: 9 years ago

#72

Hey dear Shruti 😊😊.

Hope you are fine now 😊.

Coming back to the OS , another masterpiece by you .😊👏👏

First of all , I loved the title, perfect one to describe your OS.

I loved your entire OS.

Especially some of the lines ,

"Both of them kept stealing glances at each other ,when they assumed the other one was not looking ,But both were so conscious of each other,that it was an exercise in futility,each was aware of the other's slightest movement"😳😳

"He wished he could slam the door on his once loved face and banish from both his thoughts and their lives "😉😉

"Ofcourse you cant though",A voice within him taunted.😭

Really well written dear and loved the way you have beautifully brought out the turmoil and love within Sanskaar. 👏👏👏

Loved the jealous Sanskar.

Loved the para after Sanskar decided to leave them alone.

"Swara couldn't understand what on the earth sanskar was playing at.

How dare he suggest leaving her alone with Laksh ?😡

Had he gone mad?😡

She felt like she had been punched in the stomach.

She couldn't understand the thought of being alone with laksh seemed so distasteful to her ,

But every instinct in her cried out that Sanskar should not leave"😭

And then she stopped him saying,

"Sanskar tumhe kahi jane ki jaroorat nahi hai , tum mujhe yaha akela chodkar nahi jaa sakte "😳😳.

Wasn't she exactly sounding like a typical wife who was asking him that he cannot leave her alone.😉😉

Superbly brilliant one.👏👏

Stay blessed dear Shruti😊

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