SwaSan OS-- 'Fire' - Page 5

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Vijjjiii- 🤗. When I saw you had posted this, I was so happy. Since I read "Water" I have been really excited about the next in this elements series. Right up my street in terms of both concept and execution. I love the fact that it starts with Water and this signals Swara's break (mentally and emotionally) from Lakshya and now we get the next stage of the battle she has to fight- with Fire. However the master stroke for me is the fact that AP is the antagonist in that sense. I am so impressed with the way you thought through AP and fleshed her out. To me, she really has the potential to be the archetype of "the hand that rocked the cradle ruled the world" but I feel in the show we don't get that sense through as yet in detail. I am not sure whether the writers have spent as much effort on deciphering her or whether they are saving her as a potential next villain when Ragini is played out. I certainly see the capacity in her. Also- fab research on the background of the Ranas etc and then perfectly linked to her- she really does have a regal aura and it felt so right to have that as part of her upbringing.

Re SwaSan- what can I say? Their connection, their bond, their soul mate link- all so lovely. I loved that Swara's feelings have transitioned and she now truly appreciates Sanskaar the way he should be - exactly as we hope to see in the show.

Cannot wait to read the next one and I hope we will also get Air at some point- I see Ragini and/ or even Lakshya quite suited to be the key character there! Just a thought 😃

Originally posted by: ros_aavir

What a brilliant piece.👏

I never have enough words to describe how much I enjoy reading your work and it frustrates me.. I'll just leave it at that! 😛

Originally posted by: bips

didn't like it at all ... na da ... not a bit ...

... Are you freaking kidding me! why is this a one shot ? ... seriously forget swasan, i just want to stay in annapurna's head ... its going to magical, manipulative, scheming place ... eee !!!!! why why why ... why do you write pieces like this and end them abruptly ... this deserves a full length story

Seriously, you need to stop writing OS and write a novella ... i want to stay with your characters ... I have been on this site for 8-9 years and have read a grand total of 10 FF .. but you have me hooked ... in fact i think part of my interest in the serial is because of the "possibilities" you write ... bec the actual tv writing is patchy at best

Next - EArth! .. SANSKAR!!!! ... you better make it long viji (supervises with a belan in hand) ... if you are going to make us wait for 10 days then pls pls make it extra long ... And pls do PM me, i'm leaving the forum for a while - have exams coming up but will pop in to read what you write

... bah! ... i hate talented people .. they give me an inferiority complex .. *sticks out her tongue*

Originally posted by: Smilelicious

Viji 🤗
This was simply outstanding 👏 *bows down*
You writings are such an inspiration Viji 😳 The way you analyzes the characters and all is something marvellous 👏
Loved the way you describe AP's character, something new and refreshing which i really appreciated 😊
I never want you story to end, seriously 😊 It always seem as i'm reading a book
Eagerly waiting to read the next part 😳

Originally posted by: Lifez_Beautiful

Ahh gal... u jus make me clean bowled every time with ur pieces! And for a change I must say I loved your take on Annapoorna more than swasan this time! Seriously a very beautiful character analysis! 👏👏👏

And as for the quotes... as usual LOVED THEM!🤗

And yeah, I guess it was an intentional mention of the 'left thigh' but it did give me a really gleeful joy on reading that! A huge fan of Indian mythos u see! 😉

Originally posted by: medhasarkar

yup..got it😉. I'll go with saying the name of the person starts with S...but there are after all two S's in MM. I'd be happy if it were the less obvious one. but then its your story to tell. so you will tell it...i will be content to be amazed when you do.⭐️

and Mrs boynton the ex warden...thought about her...and then lennox and his wife...nadine...but by then i had already finished commenting...and had to go back to my office presentation.😆

nd viji...i have learned one thing...no matter which ingredient of the dish stands out the most...ultimately it depends upon the chef...that which dish will be the most palatable. So AP or whoever, its you who are the star of the story..the writer.👏

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Shruti...thanks so much for this comment 😳🤗

So glad you liked my portrayal of Annapurna. I had really wanted to bring out the layers in her character, the "grayness" as it were. She just seems to have such a regal aura around her, I planned in my mind to give her a background of friendship while growing up, with a royal family. 😊 I am a HUGE fan of Jodhpur, the Mehrangarh fort and the Umaid Bhavan palace have so much history and the "feel" in those places is just awesome.

Yes...Swara and Sansku are soulmates, aren't they? Totally meant to be! 😳 You know, I sometimes feel I am crazily obsessed (not Ragini level though!) to care so much about a fictional couple! But maybe, they exist in some parallel universe created by all our words! Fiction can sometimes feel so much more beautiful and evocative than fact, isn't it? 😊

Originally posted by: dundumol96

No words to say u r an amazing writer

the way u described AP was fantastic clearly we see that he is partial towards her children where as sanskar cared her as much as he cared his maaa


but we cant blame her either every maa wants herchildren's happiness



lets see what will swara's view on AP's proposal