'Mom with U' ' Maa Oo Maa'page 80 - Page 25

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

di!

wow!

i loved this poem to bits.......

it reminds me of my mother and father........

both take care of me........

they r my life.......

i can never live without them.........

and this poem goes for ma very easily......

i think that u kept this in mind while writing this poem.........

its brilliant........

ur ma gave u a hug for writing this..............isn't it?

i mean its simply beautiful.........

u always touch my heart..........

awesome!

and the answer of this kyun is love....

she loves us so much that she does that...........



i totally loved this poem.......

grt!

love,
Mahak

Originally posted by: Divya_kaldivya

Bhoomi... I would be lying if I say that this Poem didn't touch my heart.. This is for you...

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Originally posted by: KehanT

Bhoomi I loved it ...
the only thing i cud imagine while reading this is"woman"

no body can be as strong as a woman
great work once again

Originally posted by: ssh57

Hi Bhoomi,
If I've commented on each of your poems you have taken the time to reply to each one of them individually.One thing I agree with you cent percent, is that I am very young at heart. Even my daughters and their friends tell me that. And I want to remain like that forever. I believe you are as old as you feel.So I'm forever sweet sixteen.😃
I'm so glad to see so much social awareness in you (a lacking in many of the younger generation) and a wanting to address each issue. You may not be a professional poet but your thoughts are fresh and your selection of words convey the exact feelings of your heart. And without any compromise on all this you are able to present it in the poem format.You could have just written it down like an essay. But the poetry form adds to the beauty. So in my eyes you are an excellent poet, by far the best I have ever interacted with.
Basically I love poetry and have loved poets like William blake, R. L. Stevenson and of course my favourite Lord Tennyson. But I couldn't exchange views with any of them could I????
God bless u. Write many many more poems and PM me everytime you do so.Ever thought of publishing them?
❤️ ssh57

Sapno ka Bharat

Jahan na ho bhedbhaw ka batwara,
Jahan na ho brahshtachar ka andhiyara,
Jahan ho andhwishwas ka mitwara,
Jahan ho gyaan ka ujhiyara,
Jahan insaan se bada na paisa hoga,
Mere sapno ka Bharat to aisa hoga.

Hum jahan na kewal jan sankhaya badhaiaa,
Hum jahan balki jan ko saksham banaey,
Hum jahan sneha, prem ki fasley lehrayen,
Hum jahan mehanat ki kushboon mehkayen,
Jahan rahana to swarga jaisa hoga,
Mere sapno ka Bharat to aisa hoga.

...........BhoomikaUttam

Hey Bhoomi.. Another PEARL from your OCEAN OF POEMS...... This is MY INDIA I would like to see.. and you know wht, I am flying to the US next month.. So, even before flying, I have started missing my country.. So this message came from you at the perfect time!!!👏

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

di!

i am so happy to be able to comment first!

*touch wood*

thank god is baar main pehle comment kar paayi.........

varna aajkal main online hi nahi aati hoon......

i just come to read updates........write updates........and especially to read ur poem.....

Yipeee u came first .. wow!! am hapy for u as well.. and kya timign i must say within few minutes i see so many replies and i am like how fast have u all read and reserved ur comment.. absolutely sweet of u dear.. i am touched for sure... and u coem to read my poem in the little time u come online..awww u r a sweetheart for sure.. thanks for givign me that special space n place in ur heart..

well let me remind u in case u have forgotten that......u have to write a romantic story.......u had told me that when u were writing "confused about the numb pain"........so i wanna read that too.......coz i am waiting for that.........as i loved "together by chance"........it touched my heart and made me blush......smile and do anything........so write on that too......

hahaha I have to i have it incomplete and gues what i am been reminded of it somany times, i myself do but i just can tget my mood to continue from wher ei left .. i hope i get that mood in these two days when i am havign free tiem on hand so can write in a flow..i will keep ur request in mind and hope i push my mysefl to coem out of this lazy bone feeling... ehhe romantic.. hm i want to as well..lets see.. all up to my mood.. too moody i am now u must be knowing..

now coming back on the topic,

i loved this poem!

actually i always want to do something for our nation.....

of course i have no intentions to go into army.........

but i wanna become a doctor.........

and help everyone........

my main aim of becoming a doctor is not to earn money.........

but to save lifes...........and prevent our nation from corrupt doctors who only take fees.........

i don't wanna earn money..........i want to earn blessings.........

i wish our nation to be free of corruption..........evils.........and money minded people......

i too think that people only increase the population rate while dont take any measures for our country.........

Hum jahan sneha, prem ki fasley lehrayen,
Hum jahan mehanat ki kushboon mehkayen,
Jahan rahana to swarga jaisa hoga,
Mere sapno ka Bharat to aisa hoga.

these lines r too good........



i simply love this poem.....

well i always love ur poems......

mujhe to lagta hai ki research karni padegi for searching new words to describe ur excellent work........

but i seriously did loved it........

i mean this is our dream India.........

my India.........

a place where i want to live..........

a place for which i can give my life.........

i salute my INDIA!!!!!!!!

JAI HIND!

i know u must be thinking that i am just 16, then to i am thinking this much......

i think age does not make anyone mature.........

i am already mature.......

love,
Mahak

U are right Mahak... and so good to know at this young age u want to think abt nation and not just enjoy party and leave it thinkign its just too much drama .. Patriotism has to be in very blood and good ot know u feel for the country and want ot earn pride for the nation and for urself but not money and fame..i do salute ur feelings...and JAi Hindi awesome i felt i missed that .. U made me to feel proud of my country mroe over with a fact that u too are a PAtriotic youn girl who loves her country..

glad MAhak u liked the lines.. i really wish our dream comes true..and there is less corruption..really hope we have young leaders to lead our country in future withotu dirty politics and murders governign and takgin our nation at ransom.. luv u tc

Bhoomi