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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#221

Originally posted by: ssh57
Wah thi aur Hum

After reading so many sad ones it was nice to read a humorous one. Shows your versatility. Lovely poem.Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

I had to na... write soemthign to cheer warna u all woudl have assumed readign my work is getting a tissue ready beside😆 so wrote few of thse to brign that smile..naughty one feels better😉😛.. glad u liked these small bits of poems.. versatility..aaa i dont know how well i can..but i tried.. and thanks for appreciatign whatver little attempt i make in writeign these verses.. poetry i am calling them but they r mere thoguths..

luv u too..

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Kaisi Meri Grahasti

The age old fact of oppression of women beautifully expressed in this poem. Women have progressed in all fields today but they are comparitively a very small percentage. Th vast majority of the women are still like the woman in this poem. Good work. Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

Yes domstic violence is so much at large and many of the situation i have mentioned ehre r taken from reality .. i have seen atleast two of those for sure.. and it pains my heart o know the men in most of the situation were hightly educated.. how can such educated people behave in such a way..the woman too r educated but they cant find situation route to come out.. and with no family support we really cant blame them.. i guess somewhere such incidents shodul be noted by the neighbours but thts not ht esolution as well... hmm its a painful state as a woman u know how they live... how mcuh difficutl it is..

u r right progress in many fields and sitll many things just not decreases esepcially domestic violence and molestation...

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#222

Originally posted by: ssh57
Tumsey karu baatein

Tragic but true. This has been the outcome of many love stories.But can't judge who is right. Parents feel children are immature and do not have the experience of life. So they do what they think is best for them. but children seek the freedom to make their choice.
Another nice issue taken up.
Love ssh57.

Hi Shardha,

i guess when religion is diffeent u can understnad but when in same religion subcaste u talk abotu it become s abit too mcuh in this time with everyone havign goen place be it from any caste of creed.. whatevr rules were there were with the job entitled to keepgin the caste in mind..but here all caste people do differnt work times have changed btu may be some mentality havnt.. i guess good education, decent family background , respect , coruage , earnigns seems better points to see..but many many death for honour killings take place...and its really sad.... here the love was cute true but death also coudlnt do them apart.. souls r together even now... sad but hope the poem gave otu tis message whchi feel it did.. thanks for reading dear...tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Rishta Bin Naam Ka

Another very important issue tackled beautifully. I can never understand how any woman can fall for a married man. If he is not faithful to his wife, whatsoever the reason, how do they expect him to be faithful to them.And then they say love is blind. Its not love but they who walk into such relationships with their eyes and conscience shut. Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

U r so right so correct and its really difficult to understnad why why woman trust such men...😕 i really cant understnad as well..in the end what they get is social boucott and even blames, lonliness stays on....but men who cheat , tell fake stories r no less idiots... and woman need to read the hwole situation before gogin for married man.. their is always possibility of hurtign many many emotins.. The man got everythign.. and this woman lost more than she had.. her love, her belief her confidence and more pain cam ein her lap.. With compeition, pressure and nuclear famileis, even such relationships r rising and they become family brakers if they do get married... i guess The man is no saint as well... why not give him a name along...???

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#223

Originally posted by: ssh57
Chehra

Very true but it cannot be denied that its a pretty face that makes us turn and have a second glance. The heart can be understood only after knowing the person. But in this case the person was already known so it is unforgivable.Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

I tried this one to show when after lovign a person if something happens to the face .. it shows love in mere attraction cant sustain.. i belive face can attract but can u fall in love with the attractive face only ..no u need ot know feel much more to fall in love.. and face cant be loved ..its the person u have ot love... if face is loved all actors u see u like become ur lovers.. they rnt..as theri face of soem other charcter they play.. in real love is in the person ..in his/her personality/ feelgins /emotions.. u memoreise her face less..but the situtation more after u fall in love..

glad dear u read and commente on each one.. really so sweet of u ..i appreciate u for reading, replygin each one and letting me know how much u liked or wanted to encoruaged me...thanks a heap..tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Hai!!! Kya Hua...

Another good attempt at humour. Love ssh57

ehheh ya tried this one aswell...sweet of u to read this oen and comment on it too...luv u Shardha..tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#224

Originally posted by: ssh57
Khushi Ka Pal

A sweet romantic poem. You have created a special style for yourself by writing all our poems in first person. It sounds more personal that way.love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

Yes, I tired to do that and am glad that worked for u and u coudl relate to ti more.. thansk for likgin the poem.. u felt it was romantic..aww thats cutee to know.. tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Reet ya Preet

A really beautiful romantic poem. But I wonder if the long run age difference especially such a huge one wouldn't cause any problems.love ssh57

HI Shardha,

yes i agree with u .. in long run who knows.. but then in most marraiges these days its a question of who knows if it will work.. personally even i cant think or feel its compatible...thats why here i didnt end iwht they marrygin, the girl says no and the boy says he will wait..and its individual sometimes age differnece really doesnt matter atleast in soem cases celebrites its aceptable but in noramla genrla public surely its not easy very very tough to make people understnad the bond....

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#225

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Originally posted by: ssh57
Zindagi Kabhi

A very beautiful description of life and it uncertainities. you weave magic with words. Love ssh57.

Hi Shardha,

Awwwww 'weave magic with words' that made me to 😳 blush.. i dont know i feel i am still not ready to be called a poet..nor my written these work literaly can be called poems.. i am not skillful in this but yes i am confident abotu my thoguths and want to brign them out.. if it touches anyone i feel my work is done.. thansk for encoruging.

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Sukh

Many don't realise contentment is the secret to happiness. The more you crib the more unhappy you become. Be positive and you'll be happy.
Love ssh57

Oh My God, Shardha.. u commented one ach one ... 😃 Sooooo Soooo sweet of u dear.. i am overwhelmed by ur response to each... really touched .. thanks dear.. u r right happiness is in so much small little tiny things..we just dont want ot define happiness in them but run after money fame and then when u achive later try and search for the real happiness... for me happiness just happened readign ur comments u see😃😃😃.. I am happy ..hope u too happy.. so keep smiling always.. luv u

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#226

Originally posted by: ssh57
Kahe Jo mera Dil aur Dimaag

Of all your poems which I've read so far I liked this the best. Very realistic and down to earth.Very beautiful thoughts. Loved it. love ssh57

Hi shardha,

Oh God.. u liked this one.. aww there is a child in u I must say... this i am saygin by what u liked in thie collection of peoms.. i feel u r much much younger than ur age by ur choice..😉... kidding.. i am glad dear that u liked this one.. its written with least time..just what all i felt liked and udnerstnood wrote and it became verses poem... and see i get ur ocmment on it..and am happy with it.. a smile on anyones face and i am at content.. thank u so much.. for loving my wrk and encouragign me so mcuh.. luv u dear..

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
Bacchi kahey

Hey Bhoomi, This one brought tears to my eyes. Such a delicate topic so aesthetically handled. Hats off to you.God bless u. Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

Awww abhi i was sayign keep smilign and i made u cry... i really cant see tears in my readers eyes.. even if any of my work made them feel emotional..i dont want to see tears but i wnted ot share this and discuss the issue.. touch the issue.. it stays on my mind as a woman abotu hwo much such thigns r common , most girls have gone thorugh and maximum dont ever complain to their parent sbut surely it takes abway the inocen from a child..in todays time the extent of this has increased and level of abuse has goen high..plainful to see children growing up too soon..

good ot know u felt it was written aesthetically ..comign from u such comment makes me feel awesome.. luvu

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#227

Originally posted by: monikaseth
Mere Dil ki awaaz yeh kahati hai,
Ab bhi tu Meri har saans mey basati hai.👏👏👏👏👏 Pain with love awesome Thank you for great poem bhoomi you are amazing dear . mind blowing words ,each word describe all emotions so sweet and nice .👏👏👏👏👏.👏👏👏👏👏

..............Bhoomikauttam For You......👏👏👏👏👏.👏👏👏👏👏.👏👏👏👏👏.👏👏👏👏👏.👏👏👏👏👏
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Hi Monika... gosh so many applause.. so sweet of u dear.. areey my work is liek beginners..phir bhi u have applauded me soo much.. awww u are a sweet heart i know that but really always touched by the way u make me feel special with my work.. thanks for readign it and commenting..u liked and felt hte love and the pain made me feel good... keep readign and hope u love the remaign work i post.. i am happy to get soem wonderful friends liek u here to cheer me and my work thoguh i am still learngin..

luv u

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#228

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Awe....Bhoomi.....me feeling so dam sad!!! Wo kisi aur ki ho gayi??? Thats really very sad.....but the metaphors/ xamples....watever they r.....its just awesum!!! Bilkul taal me chali....wah!!! Just feeling sad.....that it didnt hav a typical happy ending....but then love is still there.....and it itself is a happy feeling!!!

Anyways, loved it as usual dear. Gr8 work again!!

Hi Sumaiya,

U feeling sad??? yeh to maine theek nahi kiya..tumhe dukhi kardiya..areee re.. 😕 but kya karu.. soemtiems the poem bhi na mujhe majboor kardetey hain to end them liek this.. But glad dear u liked reading it and felt the words... U liked my work so much that pleases me a lot.. ya true love never ends.. it stasy .. and glad u felt that in the end..

lvu dear and scholl reopened.. enjoygin ur time..keep smilgin.. 😃

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#229

KYON?

Kyon Tum Sahati ho,
Aur Kuch Nahi Kahati Ho.

Kyon Apney Aap Mey jalati ho,
Aur Roshani Bekherti ho.

Kyon nahi khood ke liye jeeti Ho,
Dusaroo ke liye Mittati ho.

Kyon Sarpe Sara Boojh leti ho,
Aur Doosroo ki Kamjhoriyaa Chupati Ho.

Kyon Tum Itna Pyaar karti Ho,
Aur nafarat ko bhi pyar mey badaldeti Ho.

Kyon Saya banaker chaaya deti Ho,
Aur Khood to Dhoop mey tapati Ho.

Kyon Har Kadam Sath deti ho,
Magar phir Do kadam peechey chalati ho.

Kyon Tum Khudko Kamjhor Samajhti Ho,
Aur Doosaroo Ki takat banati Ho.

Jaanati Hoon Is Kyon? Ka koi Jawab nahi hai,
Kyunki tumharey jeevan mey Dene ke Baad paney Ka Hisaab nahi hai.

...........Bhoomikauttam

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Sri

@RadiantTreasure

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#230

hey bhoomi

great one..

i rememebered my mom after reading it..i dont knw who u thought when writitng it..,,its really good..especially these lines..

Kyon Apney Aap Mey jalati ho,
Aur Roshani Bekherti ho.
Kyon nahi khood ke liye jeeti Ho,
Dusaroo ke liye Mittati ho.
Jaanati Hoon Is Kyon? Ka koi Jawab nahi hai,
Kyunki tumharey jeevan mey Dene ke Baad paney Ka Hisaab nahi hai.

some people just know to give never to take..they are too good ,,,,n mother is one of the foremost one..

good wishes

sri:-)