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Posted: 14 years ago
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Final part..contd...

After cooling down of emotions..they both sit on terrace with naina's head rested on daks's shoulder...hands tangled๐Ÿ˜
Daksh; tumhe pata hain naina..jab tum nahi aayi tho, main paagal hogaya tha.. mujhe aisa laga ki tum mujhse pyar.nahi...

Naina keeps an hand on daksh's mouth and stops him from completing sentence..Eye lock..daksh keeps his hand on naina's...silence speaks between them๐Ÿ˜..after few moments both come into the real world...๐Ÿ˜›

Daksh; Lekin tumne mera khat kab pada? Dinner ke baad??โ“
Naina; haan..main phone dhoohd rahi thi..phir tumhaara khat mila..pehle tho mujhe yakeen nahi hua...lekin baad main mujhe ehsaas hua ki mera dil bhi tumhare liye dhadktha hainโค๏ธ..aur mein bhi tumse pyar karti hoon..looks at him puts a hand on his cheek...bahut pyar dakshโค๏ธ

Daksh;(lil attitude)acha.๐Ÿ˜†. agar itna pyar karti ho tho aajati terrace par..pata hain yaha mera haalt kitna kharab ho rahatha..kitna rulaya tumne mujhe..gets up and walks few steps forward
Naina; haan.baba pata hain..lekin.tumhe kya pata neeche steps par meri haalat.bhi.aisa hi tha..
Daksh; turns back at naina; steps par?๐Ÿ˜ฒ

Naina gets up and comes near daksh' F2F and says;;Tumhare letter padne ke baad mujhse raha nahi gaya..main bhag kar tumhare paas aana chahthi thi.๐Ÿ˜›..lekin maine ne dekha ki janaab 11.30pm ko hi teraace par chale gaye...tum tearrce par mera intezaar kar rahe the aur mein steps par tumhara aane ka..office ka kaam tho bahana tha...๐Ÿ˜‰

Mujhe laga ki tum 12.00pm ke baad neeche aajovege..lekin nahi..jaanb aane ka naam nahi le raha the...1.00 bajgaya..mujhe tho itna daar laga ki agar tum kuch aur dher terrace par hi rehthe tho main bhag kar tumhare pass aajati...๐Ÿ˜›

Naina;Holds hands of daksu; I am sorry daksh..mere wajah se tumhe hurt hona pada

Daksh;holds naina's face in his arms( cupped); naina tum mujhe milgaye ho..iss khusi ke aage tho duniya ka sara gham kam padjayega๐Ÿ˜ƒ..I love u๐Ÿ˜ aurTumhe pata nahi ki main kitna khush hoon๐Ÿ˜ƒ...jab se pyar ko jaana hain sirf tumhe chaha..tumhare saath apna poora zindagi bitane ka sapne saja raha tha..aur unhi sapno ki sahare jee rahatha.๐Ÿ˜.aur aaj mere saare sapne sach ho gaye...

Daksh; ( hands in his hair)hey bhagavan. aisa lag raha hain..ki iss khushi se mein paagal ho javunga.๐Ÿ˜ƒ.๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜ƒ.hugs naina and says; I love u naina..I love uโค๏ธ

Naina stands speechless in hug ๐Ÿค—feeling warmth of his love and listening to her name in his hr8 beatโค๏ธ

After few moments both come out of hug

Daksh; acha hua ki tum nahi aayi.teraace pe.warna main tumse apni dil ki baat kabhi nahi kehpata...๐Ÿ˜›
Naina; iss liye..woh sab natak karna pada..aur main tumhari dil ki baat sun rahi hoo๐Ÿ˜.puts an hand on his hr8..โค๏ธdaksh puts his hand on hers

Naina; ek min daksh;She takes out letter and shows it to him.;ye khat padne ke baad main samaj gayi ki mere dil main bhi tum hi ho๐Ÿ˜ณ..lekin letter padne tak mujhe ehsaas nahi hua...mein iss letter ko hamesha sambahl kar rakhungi..first love letter jo hain.๐Ÿ˜†..aur woh bhi Karela patwardan ne likha( smiles)๐Ÿ˜†

Daksh; smiles ...and says; frame karavake doo kya?๐Ÿ˜†

Naina;haan haan kyu nahi..mujhe nahi pata tha ki KP itna acha love letter bhi likh sakta hain (few smiles from both of them)..๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›

Daksh;mujhe khud nahi pata tha. naina...aur maine kabhi socha nhai tha ki mujhe pyar ho jayega aur mein LOve letter likhunga...tum ne mere poori zindagi badaldi naina..I love u..

Naina; Love u too daksh;...tumhara pyar mere liye sabsa bada gift hain lekin mujhe mera gift chahiye..mera gift kaha hain?๐Ÿ˜‰

Daksh; arey ...mein tho bhool gaya( hand on head)..ek min..he gets up and takes ring from his pocket..kneel down before naina and says...

Naina bharadwaj..main daksh patwardan tumse bahut pyar karta hoon.. aur zindagi bhar kartha rahunga.๐Ÿ˜.kya tum mere pyar ko aacept karke mujhse shaadi karoge? pls...pls pls๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜

Naina first shows lil attitude..later smiles and nods her head; haan..๐Ÿ˜›

..With all smiles๐Ÿ˜›,daksh usko ring pehnatha hain aur uske haath ko kiss karta hain.๐Ÿ˜ณ.He gets up,lovingly kisses her fore head ๐Ÿ˜ณ,and naina is about to hug him..daksh stops her.and says..Ek min
Naina; surprised ;kya hua?๐Ÿ˜ฒ

Daksh moves away from her...ab dakshna ke beech kamse kam 6-7 foot ka distance hain..F2F

Daksh;naina.. tumne kaha tha ki mera letter padne ke baad mere paas bhagkar aana chahthi thi...tho...he stands there with his arms wide open.๐Ÿค—.cute trade mark smile.๐Ÿ˜›( as if calling naina to come and hug him)...๐Ÿ˜

Naina smiles at daksh's act and comes and hugs him๐Ÿค—...both share cute and tight hug...joined by moon light..cool breeze.๐Ÿ˜.daksh slowly takes naina's face into his hands and brings her lips closer to his lips.๐Ÿ˜ณ...both close their eyes and share their first kiss...โ˜บ๏ธโ˜บ๏ธ

PS; THO Khatm hogaya..fiction..aur shru hogayi ek khoobsurat love story, jisme na koi villinas hain naa vamps.๐Ÿ˜›.sirf aur sirf pyarโค๏ธ hain aur dakshna...

Hope u enjoyed reading this FF - Mera prem patr

With loads of love
Lucky๐Ÿ˜‰
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Posted: 14 years ago
#32
Wow Lucky mast mast Happy end kiya hai๐Ÿ˜‰... Loved each and every dialogue๐Ÿ˜ƒ ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ‘Red highlight wala tho bahut hi touchy hai ๐Ÿ˜Š
Lucky couple hai apna Dakshna ๐Ÿ˜‰ ek dusare se itna pyaar jo karte hai ๐Ÿ˜› Loved the way Dakshu moves away and tells Naina to complete her wish ๐Ÿ˜† Loved it yaar ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿค—
Simply Awesome ๐Ÿค— No villains and a happy ending ๐Ÿ˜‰ Enjoyed it ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿค—
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Posted: 14 years ago
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This ones for u My dear Friend Lucky for giving us such a lovely FF ๐Ÿ˜›
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Posted: 14 years ago
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lucky...thnku thnku thnku sooo much๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—...
Edited by sweetaish - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: lucky.m

Final part..contd...

After cooling down of emotions..they both sit on terrace with naina's head rested on daks's shoulder...hands tangled๐Ÿ˜
Daksh; tumhe pata hain naina..jab tum nahi aayi tho, main paagal hogaya tha.. mujhe aisa laga ki tum mujhse pyar.nahi...

Naina keeps an hand on daksh's mouth and stops him from completing sentence..Eye lock..daksh keeps his hand on naina's...silence speaks between them๐Ÿ˜..after few moments both come into the real world...๐Ÿ˜›

Daksh; Lekin tumne mera khat kab pada? Dinner ke baad??โ“
Naina; haan..main phone dhoohd rahi thi..phir tumhaara khat mila..pehle tho mujhe yakeen nahi hua...lekin baad main mujhe ehsaas hua ki mera dil bhi tumhare liye dhadktha hainโค๏ธ..aur mein bhi tumse pyar karti hoon..looks at him puts a hand on his cheek...bahut pyar dakshโค๏ธ

Daksh;(lil attitude)acha.๐Ÿ˜†. agar itna pyar karti ho tho aajati terrace par..pata hain yaha mera haalt kitna kharab ho rahatha..kitna rulaya tumne mujhe..gets up and walks few steps forward
Naina; haan.baba pata hain..lekin.tumhe kya pata neeche steps par meri haalat.bhi.aisa hi tha..
Daksh; turns back at naina; steps par?๐Ÿ˜ฒ

Naina gets up and comes near daksh' F2F and says;;Tumhare letter padne ke baad mujhse raha nahi gaya..main bhag kar tumhare paas aana chahthi thi.๐Ÿ˜›..lekin maine ne dekha ki janaab 11.30pm ko hi teraace par chale gaye...tum tearrce par mera intezaar kar rahe the aur mein steps par tumhara aane ka..office ka kaam tho bahana tha...๐Ÿ˜‰

Mujhe laga ki tum 12.00pm ke baad neeche aajovege..lekin nahi..jaanb aane ka naam nahi le raha the...1.00 bajgaya..mujhe tho itna daar laga ki agar tum kuch aur dher terrace par hi rehthe tho main bhag kar tumhare pass aajati...๐Ÿ˜›

Naina;Holds hands of daksu; I am sorry daksh..mere wajah se tumhe hurt hona pada

Daksh;holds naina's face in his arms( cupped); naina tum mujhe milgaye ho..iss khusi ke aage tho duniya ka sara gham kam padjayega๐Ÿ˜ƒ..I love u๐Ÿ˜ aurTumhe pata nahi ki main kitna khush hoon๐Ÿ˜ƒ...jab se pyar ko jaana hain sirf tumhe chaha..tumhare saath apna poora zindagi bitane ka sapne saja raha tha..aur unhi sapno ki sahare jee rahatha.๐Ÿ˜.aur aaj mere saare sapne sach ho gaye...

Daksh; ( hands in his hair)hey bhagavan. aisa lag raha hain..ki iss khushi se mein paagal ho javunga.๐Ÿ˜ƒ.๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜ƒ.hugs naina and says; I love u naina..I love uโค๏ธ

Naina stands speechless in hug ๐Ÿค—feeling warmth of his love and listening to her name in his hr8 beatโค๏ธ

After few moments both come out of hug

Daksh; acha hua ki tum nahi aayi.teraace pe.warna main tumse apni dil ki baat kabhi nahi kehpata...๐Ÿ˜›
Naina; iss liye..woh sab natak karna pada..aur main tumhari dil ki baat sun rahi hoo๐Ÿ˜.puts an hand on his hr8..โค๏ธdaksh puts his hand on hers

Naina; ek min daksh;She takes out letter and shows it to him.;ye khat padne ke baad main samaj gayi ki mere dil main bhi tum hi ho๐Ÿ˜ณ..lekin letter padne tak mujhe ehsaas nahi hua...mein iss letter ko hamesha sambahl kar rakhungi..first love letter jo hain.๐Ÿ˜†..aur woh bhi Karela patwardan ne likha( smiles)๐Ÿ˜†

Daksh; smiles ...and says; frame karavake doo kya?๐Ÿ˜†

Naina;haan haan kyu nahi..mujhe nahi pata tha ki KP itna acha love letter bhi likh sakta hain (few smiles from both of them)..๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›

Daksh;mujhe khud nahi pata tha. naina...aur maine kabhi socha nhai tha ki mujhe pyar ho jayega aur mein LOve letter likhunga...tum ne mere poori zindagi badaldi naina..I love u..

Naina; Love u too daksh;...tumhara pyar mere liye sabsa bada gift hain lekin mujhe mera gift chahiye..mera gift kaha hain?๐Ÿ˜‰

Daksh; arey ...mein tho bhool gaya( hand on head)..ek min..he gets up and takes ring from his pocket..kneel down before naina and says...

Naina bharadwaj..main daksh patwardan tumse bahut pyar karta hoon.. aur zindagi bhar kartha rahunga.๐Ÿ˜.kya tum mere pyar ko aacept karke mujhse shaadi karoge? pls...pls pls๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜

Naina first shows lil attitude..later smiles and nods her head; haan..๐Ÿ˜›

..With all smiles๐Ÿ˜›,daksh usko ring pehnatha hain aur uske haath ko kiss karta hain.๐Ÿ˜ณ.He gets up,lovingly kisses her fore head ๐Ÿ˜ณ,and naina is about to hug him..daksh stops her.and says..Ek min
Naina; surprised ;kya hua?๐Ÿ˜ฒ

Daksh moves away from her...ab dakshna ke beech kamse kam 6-7 foot ka distance hain..F2F

Daksh;naina.. tumne kaha tha ki mera letter padne ke baad mere paas bhagkar aana chahthi thi...tho...he stands there with his arms wide open.๐Ÿค—.cute trade mark smile.๐Ÿ˜›( as if calling naina to come and hug him)...๐Ÿ˜

Naina smiles at daksh's act and comes and hugs him๐Ÿค—...both share cute and tight hug...joined by moon light..cool breeze.๐Ÿ˜.daksh slowly takes naina's face into his hands and brings her lips closer to his lips.๐Ÿ˜ณ...both close their eyes and share their first kiss...โ˜บ๏ธโ˜บ๏ธ

PS; THO Khatm hogaya..fiction..aur shru hogayi ek khoobsurat love story, jisme na koi villinas hain naa vamps.๐Ÿ˜›.sirf aur sirf pyarโค๏ธ hain aur dakshna...

Hope u enjoyed reading this FF - Mera prem patr

With loads of love
Lucky๐Ÿ˜‰

perfect ending lucky!! just perfect!!!!!๐Ÿ‘ loved it!!!!!!!!!Day Dreaming๐Ÿ˜ƒ hey have CVs shown us where Naina run towards daksh and hugs him when he has his arms wide open in real SSBN? they should do a scene like that!!! sooo sweet and cute๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒTongue๐Ÿ˜‰ and they shared their first kiss also!!! AWWWDay Dreaming๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ THANK U LUCKY FOR AN AWESOME FF!๐Ÿค—
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Posted: 14 years ago
#36
Thank u Thank u so much...Daksh ki letter poocha aur is letter ke saath itni achii FF dil kush Thank u so much lucky..๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 14 years ago
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๐Ÿค—Hey buddies

Thanks to u all 2 for such lovely comments..๐Ÿ˜›.๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—

Hope u had fun๐Ÿ˜‰


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