Round 3 - Feedback Thread - Page 5

Originally posted by: *Sunita*

Originally posted by: kiti_g

Thanks a bunch Arun for putting me in the top grade! And i do feel honored that u chose me as the bakra for detailed analysis 😛 ... will come back after ur post to tell u whether i really felt honored or not 😉😆 ... j/k 😆 ... ur most welcome to scrutinise and would love to hear the comments!

OK here you go. It is interesting how a second listen bares out what you missed out the first time. I wish I had the time to listen to all the songs 2-3 times before commenting but I guess I won't be able to do that until the number of contestants pare down to 4 or 5. So this time you alone are the bakra as you rightly point out 😆

Let me break out the comments in a linear fashion from the beginning of the song to the end. One big caveat to note here. Just because I have so many comments (and some of them are just nitpicks) doesn't mean your rendition is not good. You have done a very good job and I will save some of the kudos to the end 😉

Mukhda (First/second/third): You start out with a bang. It kind of jolts you into attention. Understand you need a lot of energy in this song but you could have pared it down a notch at the beginning.

Words "barse" "tarase" need a little more modulation."chamke" in chamke base zara stands out and it doesn't flow well with the rest of the line there.

In the line "ritu/ghata saawan ki", you start right away trying to put the murkis in. Build it up. Sing the lines straight without any variations first. Then add murkis and then the nice meend etc. That said, the murkis in those lines need more finesse. Also the meend in saaaaaawan needs to be dragged out. You always need to drag the meends out. Otherwise they just don't sound good.

The word "aise" in the line aise chamke barase needs more flourish. Watch out how you land on barase. Your sur is not always pakka on that word. In general, landing notes are one of the more common places where sur tends to falter.

First Antara: You need to step down nicely in jagaaye in the line aas jagaaye. Sur is also slightly off there.

"pyaase armaan" is slightly flat and then again in "har kali ko".

You have good power in sustained notes and your sur is very steady there too. Sustained notes are another danger area for sur but you seem to do very well there.

Second Antara: Like how you end the words "Badri" "bikharake" with the little murkis. "ban" in moti ban jaaye is slightly off and again in the word just before mausam (can't hear that properly). And yet again at "ye" in ye puharen.

One general comment I have is listen to the original several times; pause at each line if needed to rehearse it in real-time. You don't have to follow the lines exactly as the original. It is OK to vary it the way you want it. Just be aware it may or may not sound good. As you get attuned more and more, you intuitively begin to sense which variations might work well and which won't. This particular comment applies more to your rendition of ab to hai tumse in the previous round than this song but just wanted to put it out there.

Music director Jatin once made a comment on SRGMP which made a lot of sense to me. Whatever the imperfections in a song, "totality men mazaa aana chayiye". That applies to your rendition here. Most of the above comments are minor which can be easily rectified. Your sur is pretty good and could be improved further. Your voice quality is nice. You have good throw. You emote well too. Modulation could be better. Finesse is needed in a few places. Overall your rendition is certainly one of the better ones in this round. So you deserve some applause there 👏

Arun

Originally posted by: tvfan1401

11) Donny - I never heard this song before. It sounded perfect to me. The song suited your voice and sounded very good to me. ....👍🏼

I am so sorry guys this time I could not give my feedback...just got too busy... I know its a bad excuse.... but what to do...😳 next one, rest assured, I will go with blazing guns....😆

Best of luck to all for next round !

Originally posted by: advil

I am so sorry guys this time I could not give my feedback...just got too busy... I know its a bad excuse.... but what to do...😳 next one, rest assured, I will go with blazing guns....😆

Best of luck to all for next round !

so sweet of u to say this....😃....No probs,we know u were busy ,after all we r all partly responsible for it 😉...next time(hopefully😉),u will not not be grilled with questions and can give us ur fb 😊

Originally posted by: Donny COMB

*waiting*... 😛 for sum feedback... 😳 ...despite the fact i know how good i sang... 😳 😆

Donny ji i know how good singer you are ....like Don like Donny ...dhum dhuma dhum dum 😆😆 jokes apart ..saara i ll come later with my feedback ..aakhir man laga kar aapka gaana sunna hai ..😃

Originally posted by: sim38

Donny ji i know how good singer you are ....like Don like Donny ...dhum dhuma dhum dum 😆😆 jokes apart ..saara i ll come later with my feedback ..aakhir man laga kar aapka gaana sunna hai ..😃