Seven Hues- A Drabble Series Complete Page 39

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DDC1

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: napstermonster
PS: Yaar, since you'll be doing a Rainbow of posts over the next seven days (yay!) you've made me nervous! I offered to do the first one on Choti's weekend Navaras series--I'm supposed to lead it off with the OS on Disgust tomorrow---and now I'm worried my writing might just elicit that emotion, its utter crap...off to edit, brood and tear my hair out...

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Forumwasis have faith that you will make your Navras OS erotically disgusting or disgustingly erotic as promised!! Can't wait.

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div26

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Loved it, beautifully written 😊

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Sonia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

green, the true colour of jealousy. beautifully written

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SherryGS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

Green

Wow! The monsters in her head! That really stuck with me. Laila does live with demons. her old Rudra related well to her. She is so terrified of being alone in her hell.

I am so amazed at the talent that allows writers like you to evoke such emotion in people like me using so few words. ⭐️ Thank you. I know I will enjoy this series.

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Aruni.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

The colour of envy - Man we did not realize this symBALLism that day... Oh, we were busy drooling over Shower Rasiya... ☺️

Bhery nicely written. This colour suits Laila now, and many many days to come.

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Khuarv

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Posted: 11 years ago

#26

I loved reading the first hue of your seven hues Drabble series. It's a challenge to convey the intent of your writing in fewer words . But very well done. Eagerly waiting for the rest of the hues from your series.

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dreamwinner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#27

Interesting , let's c what other colors u will
bring to this drabble
For some bloody reason drabble are in vogue
in this forum.call me old fashion but I like more
then a para for my stories that I like to read.

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shagun-rocks

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Posted: 11 years ago

#28

love the concept...also like napster has stated, it is quite difficult to put up a drabble since there is a tight constraint on the number of words that one can use...so kudos to you for managing to portray laila's emotions so beautifully within 200 odd words...looking forward to reading the other installments of this series...

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Maya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#29

Haaye!!

So excited!!!!

Navarasas ke saath now we have Satrangi also!!

So many new stories to read...

Happy-wala dance!

I just loved the way you drew upon the significance of the green saree, in the haldi scene were Laila was consumed by jealousy...

I don't think even the CVs had made the connection, the green saree was probably a coincidence..

The green of the saree, the green-eyed monster...perfect!

And the last part...the devil in him and the monsters in her head...wow! That was superb! A brilliant thought...

I keep writing this about all drabble-writers - AngelTeen, TattleTale and now you!

Kudos!! The amount of emotion you convey in such few words...it takes immense talent!

Drabble on baisa! This is just awesome!

Love

what_the

PS: Thank you for the PM 😛

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niyoti

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Posted: 11 years ago

#30

Anky!

I Love that you thought of the color of the saree Rudra draped around Paro. I really wish the CV's could come down here and see what a perceptive audience they have. That even though it may not be their intention every gesture and scene on this fabulous show is interpreted in so many different ways and held so close to our hearts.

I couldn't have said it better than Navin.

The green of Laila's jealousy also wrapping like a schroud around Paro-- that green is an ugly color, indeed!

And that made the ugly green monster roar, destroying everything else in its wake.

Laila just wanted to kill her. Destroy that Paro for making him a human.

I LOVE these last lines. The hurt at being denied and the desire to be wanted by the one she loves, is morphing into all consuming hatred for the woman who she thinks has stolen what is rightfully hers.

Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned, nor Hell a fury like a woman scorned.

~ William Congreve

I think this drabble truly embodies the above quote, and to do it in so few words? Bravo!

Edited by niyoti - 11 years ago