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Posted: 11 years ago

#31

WoW!!!! That was so beautiful...

You know, actually I like drabbles...limited words but all said aptly...

I love this drabble...and hope you will continue further...will be waiting for red color😉 that's my favorite...but I don't know you will describe that color in romantic way or rage.

Will wait to know that

Sambhavi...

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: shariqash
That was awesome! And since that is the sum total of my writing talent I'm gonna leave it at that...eagerly awaiting the next one!

Thank you..! I'll update today! ^_^

Originally posted by: --POV--
👏👏👏 beautiful work, bookmarking

Thank you so much!

Originally posted by: div26
Loved it, beautifully written 😊

Thanks for the comment. 😃

Originally posted by: sonia_92
green, the true colour of jealousy. beautifully written

Thanks. 😊

Originally posted by: Suni
Awesome!

Thank you. 😊

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: ThithliDhost

You said it . Green is her color and the color green is getting darker by day. 😆
I like how you captured her emotions. Very well done.
You know in the beginning I really used to feel for Laila. It is not easy to live with the feeling that the one you love does not return the feeling.
And I always thot , she played the seductress only bcze she thot that is the only way to keep his interest.
But the Haldi day scene put me off Laila totally.. I still understand where she is coming from .. I wished CVs had shown her in a more grey shade than what they are showing us now..

Kasam se, The way she is progressing Radz.. Her green will turn black with malice.

I did too. I thought that maybe.. just maybe her love for Rudra was true enough, that I'll actually think about her case for once. But hurting others just so you can get to your love? That is when I just plain out gave up on even hearing her side.

I had mentioned this long long back. That Laila should have had self respect and kicked Rudra out of her life so that she doesn't just revolve in this vitriolic relationship. But she seems to be addicted to the vitriol. Nothing much can be done then.

Anyways, thanks for the comment!! 😃

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Posted: 11 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: DDC1
Khamma Ghani Zakura Baisa,

I am green with envy too..
Laila's emotions make their intended impact, you nailed it Baisa.. looking forward to more.

I totally second Napster's 2 per color request. BSD wala uniform ..

Ghanni Khamma DDC1-Sa..!

Why are you green with envy?

And regarding the 2 per color... I am really not capable enough.

I'll see if I can rope in another writer!!

Thank you for the comment! 😃

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HappilyLost

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Posted: 11 years ago

#35

That was pretty awesome. I am amazed how you kneaded the sentences into a complete riot of emotions within 200 words!!.Green and envy perfectly match each other. I so love this idea of colors and the emotions they play out.

Firstly a big Thank you to couch potato ( don't know her name!!) for coming up with such a great yet challenging idea. And then secondly, I am thoroughly impressed with the way you took it forward.

You are an amazing writer baisa and i would definitely look out for more of your works desperately.

Also it would be interesting to watch how this series unfold as well.

And yes you totally nailed Laila's character!!

P.S have you read sweet evil by wendy higgins by any chance??

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: aruni50218
The colour of envy - Man we did not realize this symBALLism that day... Oh, we were busy drooling over Shower Rasiya... ☺️

Bhery nicely written. This colour suits Laila now, and many many days to come.

Thank you Aruni-Sa!

I am pretty sure most of the symBALLisms are in my head-wa only!

Yep. The color is perfect for Laila. Ugly as the feeling.

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: Khuarv
I loved reading the first hue of your seven hues Drabble series. It's a challenge to convey the intent of your writing in fewer words . But very well done. Eagerly waiting for the rest of the hues from your series.

Thank you Khuarv-Sa!

I'll update soon. Like, as soon as I finish the replies. ^_^

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: dreamwinner
Interesting , let's c what other colors u will
bring to this drabble
For some bloody reason drabble are in vogue
in this forum.call me old fashion but I like more
then a para for my stories that I like to read.

The colors are the usual ones. VIBGYOR. Only that I'll replace one of them with my choice! :)

I have written drabbles before and this time it was because I didn't want to stretch this project. I actually don't update frequently if I take on a full fledged series. I am VERY lazy.

That's why.

I am sorry that this isn't fulfilling enough! And its not about old fashion yaar! Its about preferences! Nothing wrong with it.

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MissAsian

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Posted: 11 years ago

#39

Such a beautiful piece of drabble
the best lines:
She wanted her Rudra back. She wanted her devil back to play with the monsters in her head.

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: shagun-rocks
love the concept...also like napster has stated, it is quite difficult to put up a drabble since there is a tight constraint on the number of words that one can use...so kudos to you for managing to portray laila's emotions so beautifully within 200 odd words...looking forward to reading the other installments of this series...

Thanks for the comment!

I am glad that the emotions seeped through and I didn't really make a fool out of myself! 😆