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-Zesty-

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Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#101

OMG!!!! That was really terrifying...

But all i can say is you are a GREAT writer,...just love you...

I felt everyone's emotions...you weave the character so subtly that I feel like all the characters are performing in front of my eyes...

you are too good!!!!!!!!

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zanayaforever

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Posted: 11 years ago

#102

Sorry napster sa i cudnt read it fully.i wud much rather hav d redemption.i was a complete gonner after reading ur, jallad part 2".pls update soon..

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DiyaS

@DiyaS

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#103

Oh god, what was that? 😲

Honest opinion ... after this, I CANNOT imagine Paro ever having any feelings other than hatred for Rudra ever at all ... I want her to run away with Aman ... and Rudra to find out her innocence and live in agony for the rest of his life. And I want Paro to hate him for the rest of her life. No innocent deserves to be put through this. I don't want her to fall for him ... ever. Make this a different story, if you like ... but this goes beyond forgiveness for me.

Waiting for the last part of this ... I want retribution for Paro here.

Or please, something lighter if possible.

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Sunara

@princessunara

Trailblazer

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Posted: 11 years ago

#104

3rd part 3rd part 3rd part plsss!!!!!

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underveil

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Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#105

the part 2 of yesterday was exactly wat one wasexpectin but even though the torture and cruelty of jasheem khan was expected it was still heart wrenchin and i was cringing at d horror of d poor gal. the perplexion af rudra towards d end was beautifully described too.

waitin for d next update but it'll b worth .

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mona

@automaticstart

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Posted: 11 years ago

#106

o god i m so scared but waiting

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Hunnybunny3

@Hunnybunny3

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Posted: 11 years ago

#107

I've said this before and I'll say it again. You are a FANTASTIC writer. You have a way with words that pull me in like I'm front row audience. With that visual concept this was excruciatingly hard to read. The sheer horror of wounds being inflicted on her should have killed her by now but she still holds on...and for what? For Rudra to realise just how big a monumental mistake it all was? His unintentional emotional connection to her makes him 'feel' everything she's going through but what can he show for it? Nothing!! I have no idea how you've planned this redemption track and I can't imagine how any kind of forgiveness could be achieved but I still have hope that if anyone can turn this around it'll be you. I await in anticipation of part 3 because regardless of how dark and painful this series is I'd rather be reading something that gets me going than a cutesy OS any day. That doesn't mean that you NOT write any cutesy OS. It just balances the scale I guess.

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Cara86

@Cara86

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#108

Intense torture at its worst and yet you wrote it in such a way that i couldn't pull away ...You're an amazing writer !

Waiting in fear for part 3

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Sunara

@princessunara

Trailblazer

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Posted: 11 years ago

#109

Congratulations on turning a Golidie!! 🤗

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

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Posted: 11 years ago

#110

Originally posted by: napstermonster

I am truly sorry for the reaction this inspired in you guys--and yet, that was the exact reaction I was going for, so in a way, I'm kind of relieved, too. You see, when I sat down to write this, I initially wrote a very abridged version of Parvati's experience because I didn't want to freak out my readers. But I felt that was cowardly of me.

I know that the happy-happy-joy-joy form of writing will be more popular. If I wanted 500 plus likes and pages after pages of "so good! excellent! awww! cute!" messages from delighted readers, I could write something on Rudra and Paro similar to my Arnav-Khushi One Shot Homecoming (you can actually read that in my Monstrous Index, if you want a few moments of pure corny lovey-dovey romance! Its quite popular even though it was sappy as hell--- https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/fan-fictions/2933278/ippknd-os-arhi-homecoming)

But this story demands a tougher reader, and a more invested one. I am fine with that, because it gets me people like you, and the other commenters who are here, to talk to and discuss things with, too. Someone who has signed on for RangRasiya did it knowing it dealt with real issues, and real threats. So to my readers, I'd like to remind them--this is Not saas-bahu kitchen politics, not will he-wont-he love stories, but real honest to goodness threats to life and safety. This is a story about the men and women who protect us and how they have to do it, and at what cost to them.

So I chose to re-write the parts that hurt (to write as well, trust me) and that needs to hurt, to make sense of Rudra's patriotism, and what it can cost men like him. They have to do things, things that are not pretty, and that are damn hard to forgive. But they do it for you, and for me.

In a version of someone's eternal words--"paarna hai toh paro!" 😉

Hey Napster,

Padna hai tabhi to padh rahen hain! 😆 Aur agey bhi padenge!! But thought you'd like to know exactly what I felt while reading it since you said once before that you wanted honest feedback. I completely understand and admire your need to be true to yourself as a writer. That's the only kind of writing I would want to read anyway. If I wanted to read corny, happy, I'd grab myself a couple of M&Bs. But I do love your writing - and that's from someone who has resisted reading almost all fan fiction barring one or two in IPK and none in any other forum but RR. BTW, are you a published writer/journalist? Your writing has that kind of verve and confidence. And I love well-written stories. So yes, I'll continue to read, maybe edit out the bits that make me hurt a bit, but still love the whole. And if you don't want criticism, I won't hand out any, coz it wasn't meant to demotivate or pull down, I wouldn't do that to any writer anyway - I hesitated to say what I did hoping it wouldn't offend you. And in any case you are too good a writer to be affected by such feedback from the lay reader. So please do continue to write as you do without censoring the ugly. And I may not enjoy it, but will appreciate it for an honest, beautiful piece of work.

Pax? 😊

Sabs.

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