OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Forgiveness (completed)

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shilpa

@mrsp

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Posted: 11 years ago

#121

Slightly stunned at this graphic description of torture.I suppose it happens in the shadowy world of secret service defense but shocking none the less.Jamsheed is an animal and I am still unsure whether Rudra can ever have any redemption after this behaviour.We will see

On a critique of your writing can I say superb.Description is your forte.It adds to story immensely setting the scene perfectly.This piece of writing is as rivoting as it is disturbing and has certainly stirred many emotions.Wondering about the next episode desperately.

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Radhika

@YellowBoots

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Posted: 11 years ago

#122

Ah! So much dard. Like literally. But you REALLY paint a picture with your words. Can't wait to read more 👏

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Sunara

@princessunara

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Posted: 11 years ago

#123

Navin... ab toh next part post karo! i can't sleep for worrying...

These lines keep haunting me,
"Tonight, Jasheem had admitted that he was planning on locking himself into the cell, and tossing away the Bluetooth earpiece through which he had had to hear Major Ranawat's orders for restraint, for control. The Major would be upset at first, but of course, results would make him happy. Parvati would break, one way or the other."

I imagine graphic scenarios n I am scared! Have never waited with such baited breath for another update!!

pls pls pls have mercy n post yaar!!

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Sarikaa97

@Sarikaa97

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Posted: 11 years ago

#124

Please post the 3rd part yaar!! I can't sleep peacefully...Waiting :(

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Aruni.

@Aruni.

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+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#125

ab toh update banta hai baisa... 😭

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Sidda

@Sidda8

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+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#126

I feel like beating Rudra for torturing Paro so much. It doesn't matter that he is falling her pain through his nightmares. He is very cruel to punish an individual this way, especially when he has no concrete evidence that she is a terrorist much like her baraat and ex-husband.

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Exprimere

@Exprimere

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Posted: 11 years ago

#127

I am kinda upset you left it where you did. I can take 6 k words EASILY. I will comment again after the final part. Give and take.

P. S I love you, I LOVED the part. But what happens to Paro yaaa? What happens? When will Rudra stop that real wala Jallad? It was so bad to read that about Paro!

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win7

@win7

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Posted: 11 years ago

#128

OMG this was hard to read. I had to stop reading several times.

Amazing writing and you totally pulled me in to the story.

I love ram mohan!

I know aman will save paro! 😎

I wonder why paro wants aman? Will she break or continue fighting.

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win7

@win7

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Posted: 11 years ago

#129

double post. 😳

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Sonata24

@Sonata24

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Posted: 11 years ago

#130

I felt it. I felt Paro's helpless agony. I felt Rudra's equally helpless anguish and turmoil at what he had to do, at the means he had to resort to, for obtaining some justice to those innocent lives slaughtered mercilessly.

You were right to bring out the torture scenario like you did, because these things cannot be beautified. They do happen in reality, and it is what it is- A necessary evil.

You have a wonderful way of making the reader absorb the emotions of the characters, and you do it so elegantly that the readers are left speechless.

I eagerly await the final post. It will be interesting to watch this multi-facet tale of forgiveness unfold, and showcase Paro & Rudra's union- which I'm sure would leave everyone speechless, yet again. :)

Thank you! :)

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