KR/Swaron OS: Out Of Line

First Previous

Page

Frequent Posters

Meera

@MirageSwaron

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#41

Suffice to say that this one belonged to a different league...b it the concept or the way the story is being told...loved it to the core...thanx Deepu for letting know of this one...write more often Vaishu...

Quote

Anjori

@anjoriii

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#42

haayyyee ...such a cute OS di ... ^_^

love it ... <3 <3

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Snigdha

@Snigs.

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#43

Phewww!

I got to complete dis one now...

While I was trying to do since afternoon...

I loved d Kiru-Sharon convo at the start...

Sharon is soo perfect😉

Kiru n Reyu names were funny😆

But I really loved d way it was represented n fabulously written...

They were so cosy with each other...

Her strawberry moans igniting his desires...

Her seductive moves sparkling him romanctically😉

Three years...that was long

Rey dancing on with a random chic to keep his thoughts away😆😆

Laptop...pics...umm...ahem...ahemm...*clears the throat*

It was a great idea!

And their KISSS it was hawwwttt☺️

Strawberry Peck and Indirect relevation of fantasy...😉

Beautifully penned down...👏👏

I liked d different ending too😆

Shocked?😆

I know its written by youu😆😆

Copyingg Pasto's gif*Copyright to be taken😆*

A Jhappi for you for the amazing OS😃

Quote

Shukti_19

@Shukti_19

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#44

Super awesome OS..
Luvd it from d starting to d end..
Enjoyed Kriyaansh's naughty convo! ;)
ending was hottt :-*
great job as always

Quote

Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#45

That was nice just loved ur work.

Quote

VAISHNAVI MURALI

@-vaishnavimural

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#46

awesome os.. loved it.. d way u showed krisha's convo n kria trying to divert d topic n d way rey was getting affected by kria n d desires coming out n d mantra of her being his friend was nice.. loved it.. d passionate romance in d end was fantastic... d naughty convo was superb... u play with words differently n d outcome s awesome... brilliantly penned os...

Quote

..Roop..

@..Roop..

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

super awsm OS vaishu...

reyu n kiru are friends since they were in diapers...😆

and now they met after 3 years...

they alwz had some hidden feelings...

and strawberry has an important role in their story...

isi k chakkar me unki childhood fantasy saamne aa gyi...

an you showed their growing n confusing feelings towards each other very beautifully...

and end was mindblowing...

just loved it sooo much... (:

Quote

Aanchal singh

@Artistic_Stroke

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

minblowing os vaishu di

u described it beautifully

kriyansh romance aah i m still n kr land

just loved it

thanks for pm

Quote

Nivriti

@agreatperhaps

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#49

Wow Di!
Yea yeah. Peet lo. I am capable of that. For going away for sooo incredibly long. Bit nevertheless Di. I missed you tons. :D

And I am so glad you finally wrote this down for me. And I certainly and trulyllovee it. Frankly I dun even remember what key words / situation I gave you but I am certain it is much much better than what I expected it to be.

I love You so much Di. Thanks For writing this.

Suno na. I'll continue thode dino mein. Out of time right now. Diwali ne dewala nikal diya.

Theeke. And yes. This is not it. There's more to come.

Tab tak thank you and Happy Diwali.

*Edit*

Shit, what glorious mistakes I have made. 😆

Anyway, you are the best, and I love you, sooo much! Der se hi sahi, you wrote this one for me, and der se hi sahi, I commented on it, so I guess we're even.

In any case, I love the way you show Kria and Rey, and Sharon and Swayam for that matter, 😆 And mind you, it was worth the wait. Bahut tadpaya hai apne mujhe, isse padne ke liye. But now, when it is here, I am speechless.

And look at the irony, the one who requested, or in this challenged the OS, writes at the last, Laalat hai mujhpar! But you know how it is.

Chalo, my ability to write a comment is degrading day-by-day, so I'll just leave it here.

Love Youuu! :D ❤️

Edited by NocturnalBeing - 11 years ago