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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

Vaish my dear this was fabulous I just wanted to read more..😊.
Right from the start where sharon went out denying she had nothing for swayam and then burning in jealousy when seeing swayam getting close to some other girl..
Swayam's uncontrollable chain of sinful thoughts seeing sharon eat those strawberries and then seeing her sensuous dance moves.. The confession to sharon of his thoughts around her and the hot romance that followed everything was simply superb I loved this OS..👍🏼 ❤️.
Do pm me when you write any other swaron work..😃.
Love,
Kashmi.

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rosy kohli

@rosyrkohli

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

res

unres

tis is the first tym i hav read ur work

beautifully penned

swaron strawberry date was 😆

luved thr photo seein session wala part 😉

do write more n dont forget 2 pm me 🤗

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Meenal

@Meesocute

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Vaishali di...
U are just awesome...
Each and every word perfect...
the begining from krisha convo's...
Aww...so cute nick names 'kiru' and 'reyu' perfectly create a scene of chilhood frds...
Strawberry fantasies of kriya...super good..
And THE END the super hot and smoking

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Shahnaz

@ShenzK

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Chal jhutti.. tu likhe and it doesnt turn out to be good... naah..!

Actually possible.. kyunki its always exceptionally good.. 😛

Pehle length dekh ke I thought its just Swaron.. phir I again came back here.. and saw its both the versions.. well.. mennu ki.. mujhe toh tere write ups se farak padta hai..

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luv_arsha

@luv_arsha

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Mind blowing OS...loved it very much

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medha

@ToujoursPur

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

too good.

thanks for letting me know marium.

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ArYa/Ash

@Arya.100

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

It wass amzingg vaishu di... <3

Thanxx fr d pm

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Maneet

@moon_cupcake

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Freaking awesome OS

loved it..

Enjoyed it to bits..

wish you would have added a bit more of Romance 😉

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keep guessing =P

@DaShInG_DeViL

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Vaishu u r such a sweet heart <3
This really made my day and all of tireness vanished away i had to read it and it was beautiful.
This is not my comment but res
This os is gonna get a comment which it deserves from me so it is res for now! But u wont have to wait for long i promise :)
Thank you so much Vaishu...love ya rey!

Un reserved:

God Vaishu that was such a sweet OS and I so loved it.

Let me tell you that I am a sucker for friendship and friendship based stories always attract me more, even if there is a love triangle between the girl, bad boy and her best friend I always root for the best friend...hhahaha that was just to tell how much I enjoyed this OS

perfect setting best friends meeting after such a long time and then followed the delicious fruit strawberry, I just loved the whole strawberry part. It was way to sweet and adorable!

then followed the first spark of jealousy followed by them driving to his house and looking at their childhood pics and then once again strawberry did its work and swayam wondered what she might taste like right now. despite controlling himself a little slip from him made all the control loose and what followed were the hidden desires even from themselves and when they were acknowledged they couldn't hide them again :D
loved it <3 loved the ending line...I am sure swayam is gonna have helluva fun teaching her those lessons

It was amazing dear and once again thank you <3

Edited by DaShInG_DeViL - 11 years ago

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Yogini

@yogini64

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#20

Awwiiee ... its a cute n mushy os...😃

I really liked that diaper comment by sharon.. 😆

Itne time baad dono miling... but dil khol ke jhappi karing ... thats their connection...🤗

Awww... rey arranged their meal in sync with strawberry fields... just for her... how adorable ...

Rofl... he feels for kriya & her-relishing-the-juicy-fruits totally aroused him ... too bad 😛

'How do you taste now?' 😲

Yeda hai pura... control nhi hai na apni tounge pe... 🤣

I like those moments ... when they are kissing & they don't know who actually started it...☺️

Why so casual ..all of a sudden?? Modern generation?? 😕 😆

Abhi bhi pics dekhni hai... self control hai boss... 😎

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