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vaishali

@Vaish24

Trailblazer

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Posted: 11 years ago

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agirlhasnoname.

@agirlhasnoname.

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

Res :')

I just can't believe my fate!

Itne saalo baad... I am getting this esteemed opportunity to be I'st one to comment on 'The Great Vaish's' OS.

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Vaishhh :* :'D

I feel so proud to say that "You are my Bandi" :*

This OS, MY dear- It was so freaking Awesome!

I wonder how can you plan and plot so beautifully, everything- from the start (KriSha convo was cute! ;) ) to the hot passionate end ! :*

So awesome V!

Hayeee Naughty Convo's likhne mai YOU ARE FREAKING BEST OUT HERE! ;)

And in writing the make out too ;)

I just Loved the OS!

Thaaankuuu

And Dare you say anything about this One! You are my OS-Machine! ;) And you are so Good at it :* ❤️

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madhu

@Madhu_ArSha

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

Awwiee. . . .
Awsm os di. . .
Realy mast. . .
Aiye-haiye best frnds convrtd to hot making out lovers :-D
It was realy awsm, mazza aa gaya read kerke :-D

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kuhu bhatta

@kuhu_Arsha

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

ahhh vaishu🤗

literally breathtaking os re 😃

the words way u used to describe BEAUTIFUL ❤️

N KR romance hayeee i so luv it<3

suprblyk os👍🏼

u nailed it girl👏

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Akanksha

@Effacious

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

vaishuuu... 🤗

firstly thanx a tonnn for increasing the make out part... 🤗

i know u hav been almost banging ur head on wall for this...🤣

but the outcome has truly been worth it... 😉

i jst freaking loved this OS...

it was just Ah-Mazing babe...

der feelings...emotions.. how one feels meeting after ages..

and..looks like they were in love since childhood... 😆

and that photos wala part...

Rey bada daring nikla... mu pe bol dia "i wonder how u taste now" ...

Kria ki jagah koi aur hoti toh sharam se paani paani ho chuki hoti... 🤣

but that make out part was ... WOW...

tune seriusly is OS mei kamaal he kar ditta...

Ah-MAzinglyyy written OS... 🤗

Loved et to the coreee... 😳

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Fida

@aTTiTude_dIvA

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

it was splendid!

i thoroughly enjoyed this one...😳

hayye KriYaansh were soo adorable...!!

and you know what i loved d most...

it is the way u carried the latter part off... i mean, while going through the album.. and the next instant making out from nowhere..

it thought it would be followed with a ot of awkward moments between the two.. which i really dint want so as not to drag things and kill the moment...

so the way u framd it was just perfect... no awkwardness, infact it just made them more comfortable in each other's presence..

juzz loved it!! :D :* :*

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Sunil

@Suni1986

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

Both d versions r amazing
strawberry date was lovely

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Don't even know anymore

@Death_Memories

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

i loved this one
I loved loved the krisha convo in the beginning it explained so much about their bond.
the Swaron part next was adorable with hug and then her messing his hair
The strawberry part again was sweet and the Strawberropedia was hilarious
Then the club part changed the mood of the Story from innocent to naughty in a flick of a second but yet it was not abrupt.
Swayam's thoughts were ahem ahem naughty to say the least and well I liked them and the jealous and possessive sharon was treat.
The childhood memory reminiscence was again lovely.The kiss was expected yet it surprised me Ironic eh
The mood again changed from naughty to sensual all through the makeout and then to naughty again in the last.
Loved the whole thing
brilliant job
-harshita

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Purplevalley

@Ocean.eyes

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

Res
unres

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Pehle toh ek badhi jhappi

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Amazing os yaar
loved it

i mean those girls talk was nicely written
agar yeh wohi os hai jo tune muje scrap kia tha then...mahn u changed it totally...woahh

and then that reyu kiru was so cuteee...

Awww itne dino badh mile do dost...

So their date turned out quite good...it seems

and that straberry thing u added was nice...

Lol i never thought koi childhood pics dekh ke apne sense loose karega...hehe

again that part was nicely written
and end humpe chod diya tune haina...jo sochna hai socho... :*

well this time ur writing was kinda different..new choice of words and lines...nice...

Me loved it
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Thanx for this amazing gift yaar

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Hatts off to for this one...kya shidhat dikhayi hai isse likhne me wah🤣
me toh pagal hojati itni baar likhte likhte
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thanx for this wonderful gift vaishu
this is surely special for me
love u :*

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thanx 4 the pm

ps - i love the borders...they are adorable

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-kinjal

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Vadhana

@Vaddy

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

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OMG!! That's too good :D seriously the OS was simply splendid :) amazing, idk how to describe it, but it was fab.amazingly penned down 👏 Wow :D this was extraordinaire :D I loved it :) amazing work di :)please do write more 😳

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