Deepak's emotions -Ek Pita ka Dard

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey All;
The turmoil that deepak is going thru right now had moved me a lot,i have tried to portray the pain and hurt that Deepak issuffering thru my poem.. I hope I have done justice to his emotions. Just a word before you read, this piece of writing is probably the most emotional of all my poems so far...it has so much pain that it is just unbearable, i dont know how Deepak is able to bear this pain...
EK Ummed Kesaath ghar se nikala tha,
Apni beti ke aankhon ke aanson jo pochne the,
Yakeen tha ki Gautam se ekbaar mulakat karlunga;
To koi na koi raasta jaroor nikal hi aayega,
Lekin ye kya dikha diya waqt ne mujhe,
Jaise saari umeed tutkar kar bikhar si gayi..
Jo Shak, Jo Dard main jhutlana chahta tha,
wo hi Kadva sach bankar mere smane aakar khada ho gaya tha;
Haan maine Gautam ko ek ladki , anjan ladki ke saath..
Haste Muskurate aur kuch jyada hi kareeb se ghulte -milte dekha..
Aankhon par jaise yakeen hi nahi ho raha tha,
Aur mera dil jaise dard se bhilakh utha tha,
Mann to kiya ki abhi jaakar gautam ko rok lu,
Is giri hui harkat ke liye , use sabke samne sazza du,
Lekin phir gudiya ka chehra aankhon ke samne aagaya,
Aur maine apne gusse ko, aur naarazgi ko wahi rokliya,
Tamasha banakar bhi kya matlab ikalta,
Aakhir meri beti aur poti ki zindagi ka jo sawaal tha...
Bada hi nazook sa mod hai, isse samabhlkar hi suljhana tha...
Badi mushkil se khud ko sambhal kar main wapas ghar pahoncha,
Raaste bhar jaise main apne kadamo ghasit raha tha...
Aankhon dekha sach maine meeta ko sunaya,
Darr gayi thi wo bhi,
Par jaane kyun is sach ko man hi nahi rahi thi,
Mujhe shayad koi galatfemi hui hai, aisa use lag raha tha,
Kaise samjhata use, main bhi ek baap hun,
Insaan ko pehchanane ki samajh hai mujhme..
Phir, maine apni nazaroon se apni naarazgi bayaan kar hi di
Apni betiya ko kya kahun, kaise kahun,
Yehi samajh nahi aaraha tha,
sab kuch kahin khatam na ho jaye
Is soch se dil betha jaa raha tha..
Tabhi ek aas lekar renu mere paas aayi,
Mere aur gautam ki mulakat ke baare main sach jaanan tha use...
Baat badi ghambhir thi, par usko chupakar to kuh nahi milta,
isliye badi himmat jutakar maine renu ko sab sach batahi diya,
Jaise koi kaanch girte hi tutjaata hai,
Usi tarah renu bhi ekdum se tut hi gayi
Uske aanson dekhkar, mere bhi aansu ruk nahi rahe the,
Lekin phir maine apni himmat banayi rakhi,
Mere sahare ki jarroorat thi use,
Us waqt main kaise kamzoor pad sakta tha..
Meeta ki baaton par yakin nahin tha muhes,
Par shayad ek aur mauka miljaye is shadi ko
Isi umeed se maine, meeta ki baaton main apna yakeen dikhaya
Apni beti ko apne kandhe ka sahar de,
keh to diya tha maine ki" Papa sab kuch thik kardenge"
Par kaise yehi samajh nahi aaraha hai..
Aaj pehle baar khud ko bahot majboor paa raha hun main...
Kash kahin se koi umeed dikhjaye,
Aur main ek baar phir apni bitiya aur gudiya ki zindagi sawaaar dun...
For the first time I have tried to portray for someone other than Navya..i hope you guys enjoy reading it.
Please press the LIKE button if you like my poem.
I'll look forward to all your replies,advices/comments as always...
Love you all
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi Urmi. Very moving. I miss my dad now
This is what moved me the most from yesterday's epi. The epi started with Deepak and was heart breaking. How does a dad deal with his daugther's pain and sadness. How does a dad in this situation make it all go away for ever. It is hard and would like to see how the CV's handle it.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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are waaah u realy wrote down deepaks feeling
u r gr8😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow Awesome Urmi,nice post 👏👏👏👏
you have wonderfully written ...reading ur post tears came to me,after reading ur post defintely everyone think of their Dad
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow!!u protrayed deepaks feelings soo well.. Hats off 2 u 4 writin such a wonderful poem 👏 mundhubudhi could do wid a few tips from u on how 2 writ poems... 😉
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: yamini_anya

Wow Awesome Urmi,nice post 👏👏👏👏

you have wonderfully written ...reading ur post tears came to me,after reading ur post defintely everyone think of their Dad

Hey Yamini..thnks for your reply..yes the peom is very emotional and painful..I know, everybody will miss their dads..i miss mine too..
thank you for your encouraging words dear..

Originally posted by: rosettablooms

are waaah u realy wrote down deepaks feeling

u r gr8😳

thanks for your kind words dear

Originally posted by: ilunavya

Hi Urmi. Very moving. I miss my dad now

This is what moved me the most from yesterday's epi. The epi started with Deepak and was heart breaking. How does a dad deal with his daugther's pain and sadness. How does a dad in this situation make it all go away for ever. It is hard and would like to see how the CV's handle it.

Hey dear..thanks for your reply ..I do miss my dad, and his strong embrace..
i a mreally looking forward to see how CV's do justice to such a delicate issue...
thank you for the reply dear.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: anyacrazy

Wow!!u protrayed deepaks feelings soo well.. Hats off 2 u 4 writin such a wonderful poem 👏 mundhubudhi could do wid a few tips from u on how 2 writ poems... 😉

Hey thanks for your lovely words dear..i am glad you liked it..
And abt tips..i'll love to give some tips to mandbudhi, if that means i get a chnace to talk to him😉
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: barbie2011


</div>Hey thanks for your lovely words dear..i am glad you liked it..
<div>And abt tips..i'll love to give some tips to mandbudhi, if that means i get a chnace to talk to him😉




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Posted: 14 years ago
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DAd missing u a llottt there..
Always feel Proud being ur daughter
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Posted: 14 years ago
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First Urmi thnx u give me d ans of que which is struck in meh mind after yesterday episode dat y deepak not slapped guatam or questioned him...?

U do completely justice wid urs words to realise us d pain of deepak..👏..after reading ur post first i gave hug meh dad..thnx dear for such a nice post and PM me...

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